for A Flower for the Soul11/16 c15 Sahamosveb
The author asks not to flame. It's okay to criticise:
1. that he doesn't want to risk other people is his decision, which can't be "cancelled" by a simple "it's her decision to risk it or not". Ok, and if he doesn't want to, what then? Make him feel guilty and ask for forgiveness for... Deciding not to risk someone else's life?
2. Women are scaryit's such a cliché that it doesn't even bring a smile.
3. Fleur literally forced Harry into a relationship with her. If Harry did what she did, everyone would be screaming about how toxic and abusive he is.
The author asks not to flame. It's okay to criticise:
1. that he doesn't want to risk other people is his decision, which can't be "cancelled" by a simple "it's her decision to risk it or not". Ok, and if he doesn't want to, what then? Make him feel guilty and ask for forgiveness for... Deciding not to risk someone else's life?
2. Women are scaryit's such a cliché that it doesn't even bring a smile.
3. Fleur literally forced Harry into a relationship with her. If Harry did what she did, everyone would be screaming about how toxic and abusive he is.
11/16 c15 Sahamosveb
Dumbest chapter ever. Stupid teenagers. Stupid "lose to take away her sadness" choice. Ugh. It's disgusting.
"I guess I deserved it." What a disgrace.
Dumbest chapter ever. Stupid teenagers. Stupid "lose to take away her sadness" choice. Ugh. It's disgusting.
"I guess I deserved it." What a disgrace.
11/6 c36 
2ta.shrivastava
I discovered this story when the topic of the soul shard being good was brought up. I have seen the versions where it possesses Harry, turns him evil and other such ideas. But a reformed one was not something I saw. This story was recommended and given I was looking for a large one to occupy my time, I started to read it.
I liked how you developed the relationship between Tom and Harry and how neatly the soul shard and Voldemort are separated as two different characters. That is how they felt to me, I am aware that they are same people with different shades.
I'm glad that you didn't turn Dumbledore into a idiotic villain who has craziest of plans. I mean I get it, those are fun to read. But they kind of get boring after a while. You can only see an idea so many times after all.
That also brings me to the professors. In much of the fan fictions, they are presented as buffoons unworthy of their positions. Either because they are not good in combat (they are teachers!) Or because they are in with Dumbledore to screw Harry in some fashion. But here, you presented them as competent academicians who are experts of their craft, having dedicated their lives to it and expect the same dedication from their apprentices that they have.
However, there are a few complaints I have.
The romance of Harry and Fleur. I felt it took too much screen time. This on itself is not a bad thing, but it felt like the constant loop of guilt, apologies, and the repetition of the fact that Vila are passionate creatures. I mean I get it man, no need to hammer this into my brain already!
I feel like she just ended up an anchor for Harry. Her stake in the plot, especially when it comes to dealing with the villains was unequal. Granted, it is not easy to do, and you would end up bringing a lot of elements to the story which would increase the length, and convolute the plot. It makes sense to keep her where you did, given how the only stake in this is her involvement with Harry. She has come late to the party in this case.
Having said that, ultimately I liked the story you have written, despite my complaints. I have given a detailed analysis to the best of my abilities, hopefully it won't be seen as a flame review. Keep writing!
2ta.shrivastavaI discovered this story when the topic of the soul shard being good was brought up. I have seen the versions where it possesses Harry, turns him evil and other such ideas. But a reformed one was not something I saw. This story was recommended and given I was looking for a large one to occupy my time, I started to read it.
I liked how you developed the relationship between Tom and Harry and how neatly the soul shard and Voldemort are separated as two different characters. That is how they felt to me, I am aware that they are same people with different shades.
I'm glad that you didn't turn Dumbledore into a idiotic villain who has craziest of plans. I mean I get it, those are fun to read. But they kind of get boring after a while. You can only see an idea so many times after all.
That also brings me to the professors. In much of the fan fictions, they are presented as buffoons unworthy of their positions. Either because they are not good in combat (they are teachers!) Or because they are in with Dumbledore to screw Harry in some fashion. But here, you presented them as competent academicians who are experts of their craft, having dedicated their lives to it and expect the same dedication from their apprentices that they have.
However, there are a few complaints I have.
The romance of Harry and Fleur. I felt it took too much screen time. This on itself is not a bad thing, but it felt like the constant loop of guilt, apologies, and the repetition of the fact that Vila are passionate creatures. I mean I get it man, no need to hammer this into my brain already!
I feel like she just ended up an anchor for Harry. Her stake in the plot, especially when it comes to dealing with the villains was unequal. Granted, it is not easy to do, and you would end up bringing a lot of elements to the story which would increase the length, and convolute the plot. It makes sense to keep her where you did, given how the only stake in this is her involvement with Harry. She has come late to the party in this case.
Having said that, ultimately I liked the story you have written, despite my complaints. I have given a detailed analysis to the best of my abilities, hopefully it won't be seen as a flame review. Keep writing!
10/12 c36 10RevDorothyL
Well done! I cried when "Tom" died in Harry's place, and again when Serana died, full of years and well-loved in a sunny, warm home with Harry's family.
10RevDorothyLWell done! I cried when "Tom" died in Harry's place, and again when Serana died, full of years and well-loved in a sunny, warm home with Harry's family.
10/8 c36 Cele13hrt
Having read several of your stories, I think this one might be my second favorite. One, I hadn't encountered this pairing before, and while I'll try to find some others (like the ones you recommended), I think this one might spoil the rest for me. Personally, I think this is the best romance you've written so far, and maybe the most interesting Harry. The story is perhaps less grand than When the Roses Bloom Again, but the portrayal of Harry as such a brilliant introvert was one I enjoyed. Also, his emotional maturity growth alongside his foil in Fleur was really well done, and I felt like their romance made a lot of sense. I'll keep working through the rest of this catalogue. You're really talented!
Having read several of your stories, I think this one might be my second favorite. One, I hadn't encountered this pairing before, and while I'll try to find some others (like the ones you recommended), I think this one might spoil the rest for me. Personally, I think this is the best romance you've written so far, and maybe the most interesting Harry. The story is perhaps less grand than When the Roses Bloom Again, but the portrayal of Harry as such a brilliant introvert was one I enjoyed. Also, his emotional maturity growth alongside his foil in Fleur was really well done, and I felt like their romance made a lot of sense. I'll keep working through the rest of this catalogue. You're really talented!
9/30 c36 divine.shakespeare
Otra increíble historia, gracias por tus aportes para el fandom :) Me da un poco de nostalgia el último corte (año 2044) todos ya vivieron su vida, plena y feliz, y mueren. Me da tristeza la muerte de un ser querido.
Llegando al final de esta "versión de los hechos" he visto similitudes en la idea (coexistencia de Harry Potter y Tom Riddle) y te recomiendo al autor'a "Colubrina" (Hermanos Improbables) o "TendraelUmbra" (Salida del diario) . Con tu forma de escribir sería una buena mezcla, creo yo. Y quisiera que terminarás la historia de "Hermanos Improbables" que el/la autor'a dejo (:
Albus Dombledor podría ser el verdadero Sr. Oscuro, un titiritero. Manipulando todo a su favor y dar a entender que el lo da todo (luchar con el amor de su vida, Gellert, cuando en realidad el orquestaba la guerra), era lógico que le dieran todo.
Formerly_known es un autor'a de literatura erótica de cuestionable limitación a la hora de escribir sus historias, sin embargo en una de ellas (Incubus en Hogwarts, Cap. 7) Dombledor se muestra como un manipulador obsesivo, expresando que a una tierna edad controlaba todo en su vida y sabía el momento exacto de su muerte, porque así lo decidio.
Podrías utilizarlo de ejemplo para un cambio en los personajes, un gusto y que lo pases bien en tu vida :)
Otra increíble historia, gracias por tus aportes para el fandom :) Me da un poco de nostalgia el último corte (año 2044) todos ya vivieron su vida, plena y feliz, y mueren. Me da tristeza la muerte de un ser querido.
Llegando al final de esta "versión de los hechos" he visto similitudes en la idea (coexistencia de Harry Potter y Tom Riddle) y te recomiendo al autor'a "Colubrina" (Hermanos Improbables) o "TendraelUmbra" (Salida del diario) . Con tu forma de escribir sería una buena mezcla, creo yo. Y quisiera que terminarás la historia de "Hermanos Improbables" que el/la autor'a dejo (:
Albus Dombledor podría ser el verdadero Sr. Oscuro, un titiritero. Manipulando todo a su favor y dar a entender que el lo da todo (luchar con el amor de su vida, Gellert, cuando en realidad el orquestaba la guerra), era lógico que le dieran todo.
Formerly_known es un autor'a de literatura erótica de cuestionable limitación a la hora de escribir sus historias, sin embargo en una de ellas (Incubus en Hogwarts, Cap. 7) Dombledor se muestra como un manipulador obsesivo, expresando que a una tierna edad controlaba todo en su vida y sabía el momento exacto de su muerte, porque así lo decidio.
Podrías utilizarlo de ejemplo para un cambio en los personajes, un gusto y que lo pases bien en tu vida :)
8/26 c8 Guest
I disliked reading it after fleur appearance. It felt forced after that
I disliked reading it after fleur appearance. It felt forced after that
8/25 c36 SleepingFox09
I finished reading this wonderful fanfic in 3 days. I was really hurt by Serana's death as much as I was by Tom's death and I would have loved for Harry to be reunited with him in the afterlife with his parents. It felt a bit bittersweet the end of them at the lake, when I finished reading Whispers of Raven I felt the same but it was still very nice. Thank you so much for completing this story.
I finished reading this wonderful fanfic in 3 days. I was really hurt by Serana's death as much as I was by Tom's death and I would have loved for Harry to be reunited with him in the afterlife with his parents. It felt a bit bittersweet the end of them at the lake, when I finished reading Whispers of Raven I felt the same but it was still very nice. Thank you so much for completing this story.
7/29 c36 TauriPlaneshift
I cried for the big noodle. She was such a sweetheart. she even achieved every sneks dream in growing big and strong so she can eat people food too.
And now I'm thinking of a hypothetical crackfic of giving the basilisk the personality of a hognose, also known as the drama noodle to the uninitiated.
I cried for the big noodle. She was such a sweetheart. she even achieved every sneks dream in growing big and strong so she can eat people food too.
And now I'm thinking of a hypothetical crackfic of giving the basilisk the personality of a hognose, also known as the drama noodle to the uninitiated.
7/13 c36 Meddlingtiger
Magnifique! this was a wonderful read, and I thank the author for gracing us with it.
Magnifique! this was a wonderful read, and I thank the author for gracing us with it.
7/1 c37 Charlesdlalby
Your stories are well thought out and just wonderful !
Your stories are well thought out and just wonderful !
7/1 c17 Sapphire Exorcists
i love how i can always (almost anyway lol) tell when a HP writer is from america or the UK. Things like writing the date as day/month/year instead of month/day/year. Not important, just gives me a chuckle sometimes
i love how i can always (almost anyway lol) tell when a HP writer is from america or the UK. Things like writing the date as day/month/year instead of month/day/year. Not important, just gives me a chuckle sometimes