for Spartans Don't Play Games6/12 c59 Guest
This seems to have followed every wish fulfillment fanfic in existence. The insert characters don’t really have any role beyond showing off in front of the locals, and despite their overwhelming power only really make minor deviations from the canon plot line. These small changes add up though, and eventually the plot derails, forcing the author to write something new. At this point the author realizes they don’t actually have their own story to tell and promptly abandons the story. Been there done that. All in all, a very tired implementation of an old unoriginal premise.
This seems to have followed every wish fulfillment fanfic in existence. The insert characters don’t really have any role beyond showing off in front of the locals, and despite their overwhelming power only really make minor deviations from the canon plot line. These small changes add up though, and eventually the plot derails, forcing the author to write something new. At this point the author realizes they don’t actually have their own story to tell and promptly abandons the story. Been there done that. All in all, a very tired implementation of an old unoriginal premise.
6/7 c59 Angel beck
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5/24 c59 The Hunter
I just noticed something. It seems like most of the people of Westeros are under the wrong assumption that the terrans are still westerosi like them, we can see this when Rhaegar thought that the terrans were some branch of House Ambrose of The Reach, or when Elia thought that Olivia was native from Dorne. The Westerosi don't realize that the inhabitants of the Plataea are more foreign than anyone they’ve ever met.
As of right now, there are very few people that understand that the terrans aren’t from Westeros or Essos, I think only Rhaella and maybe Tywin know this fact. Also, although Tywin may know that the UNSC isn’t from Westeros, I think only Rhaella may know about the true capabilities of the UNSC, I think this since Tywin thought that he and his bannermen are a threat to the terrans, thinking that the Westerlands can gang on them, something that we know wouldn’t happen.
It would be interesting to see what the other houses think of the terrans now. It seems like, after the war and the trial by seven, most noble houses of Westeros think that the terrans are a new but very influential house. Even so, I think that most houses still see the terrans as a medium power within Westeros, that’s why we didn’t see the great houses proposing marriages to the Terrans, they don’t see them as that important yet.
IIRC Kurt told Tywin that they’ll be establishing themselves as an independent power soon. If this were to happen, I think that many houses would see the terrans as oathbreakers and would put them at the same level as the Ironborn after their rebellion.
The difference is that, unlike the Ironborn, the Palatea has enough military might to destroy anyone in Westeros. When they succeed in their independence war, the other houses may look more favorably. After all, the nobles of Westeros seem to regard martial prowess with great regard.
This would also be a great stain on Tywin's reputation, showing that he doesn’t really have that great of a control over his bannermen and, if I’m correct in my assumption that the new UEG’s territory would become the most developed country on the KNown World, many houses would think that the Lannisters made a great mistake in letting the terrans get away of their “control”.
Although, given Westeros’ history with foreign invaders, if they find out that the terrans aren’t actually westerosi, they may get worried that their independence may just be the first step in a new Andal or Targaryen invasion.
I just noticed something. It seems like most of the people of Westeros are under the wrong assumption that the terrans are still westerosi like them, we can see this when Rhaegar thought that the terrans were some branch of House Ambrose of The Reach, or when Elia thought that Olivia was native from Dorne. The Westerosi don't realize that the inhabitants of the Plataea are more foreign than anyone they’ve ever met.
As of right now, there are very few people that understand that the terrans aren’t from Westeros or Essos, I think only Rhaella and maybe Tywin know this fact. Also, although Tywin may know that the UNSC isn’t from Westeros, I think only Rhaella may know about the true capabilities of the UNSC, I think this since Tywin thought that he and his bannermen are a threat to the terrans, thinking that the Westerlands can gang on them, something that we know wouldn’t happen.
It would be interesting to see what the other houses think of the terrans now. It seems like, after the war and the trial by seven, most noble houses of Westeros think that the terrans are a new but very influential house. Even so, I think that most houses still see the terrans as a medium power within Westeros, that’s why we didn’t see the great houses proposing marriages to the Terrans, they don’t see them as that important yet.
IIRC Kurt told Tywin that they’ll be establishing themselves as an independent power soon. If this were to happen, I think that many houses would see the terrans as oathbreakers and would put them at the same level as the Ironborn after their rebellion.
The difference is that, unlike the Ironborn, the Palatea has enough military might to destroy anyone in Westeros. When they succeed in their independence war, the other houses may look more favorably. After all, the nobles of Westeros seem to regard martial prowess with great regard.
This would also be a great stain on Tywin's reputation, showing that he doesn’t really have that great of a control over his bannermen and, if I’m correct in my assumption that the new UEG’s territory would become the most developed country on the KNown World, many houses would think that the Lannisters made a great mistake in letting the terrans get away of their “control”.
Although, given Westeros’ history with foreign invaders, if they find out that the terrans aren’t actually westerosi, they may get worried that their independence may just be the first step in a new Andal or Targaryen invasion.
4/22 c59 Arthur Leywin
Honestly? I think that the crew of the Plataea is too small for a ship of its size. I know that you didn't want the crew to be too big to overshadow the population of Westeros, but you have to remember that the continent has a population if arround 40 million people, it would be impossible for a few thousand to do this.
Remember that the Infinity had a crew of around 18 thousand personnel post 2558, and even the Spirit of Fire, at full capacity, has a compliment of 11,350 personnel. The SoF wasn't that much bigger than an Orion and almost triplicate the 4 thousand crew you gave to the Plataea.
Making a comparison between the Orions and the SoF, I reckon the Plataea should have had a creo of arround 7 thousand personnel. That's a better population to settle and develop other territories on Planetos. I know that that part of the story is now fixed, but I just feel like 4,000 is too low to expand and have a greater impact, and it would have been better if the UNSC marines, army, air force and navy had a place on Planetos alongside the Spartans.
I love this story man! I really hope we can see more of it soon.
Honestly? I think that the crew of the Plataea is too small for a ship of its size. I know that you didn't want the crew to be too big to overshadow the population of Westeros, but you have to remember that the continent has a population if arround 40 million people, it would be impossible for a few thousand to do this.
Remember that the Infinity had a crew of around 18 thousand personnel post 2558, and even the Spirit of Fire, at full capacity, has a compliment of 11,350 personnel. The SoF wasn't that much bigger than an Orion and almost triplicate the 4 thousand crew you gave to the Plataea.
Making a comparison between the Orions and the SoF, I reckon the Plataea should have had a creo of arround 7 thousand personnel. That's a better population to settle and develop other territories on Planetos. I know that that part of the story is now fixed, but I just feel like 4,000 is too low to expand and have a greater impact, and it would have been better if the UNSC marines, army, air force and navy had a place on Planetos alongside the Spartans.
I love this story man! I really hope we can see more of it soon.
3/1 c59 
22Cap'n Chryssalid
Enjoyable! I have a weakness for stories like this.
It took a while to explore how it was going off the rails, but I greatly appreciate a story that does go off the canon rails (even if only half-on half-off) and forges its own path. It makes the fusion or crossover element feel much more worthwhile.
I think I actually read this before, maybe two years ago. Was glad to see updates. I'll remember to tag it for a follow this time.
22Cap'n ChryssalidEnjoyable! I have a weakness for stories like this.
It took a while to explore how it was going off the rails, but I greatly appreciate a story that does go off the canon rails (even if only half-on half-off) and forges its own path. It makes the fusion or crossover element feel much more worthwhile.
I think I actually read this before, maybe two years ago. Was glad to see updates. I'll remember to tag it for a follow this time.
2/21 c59 StarWarsfan1
Wann kommt das nächste Kapitel so in etwa ?
Wann kommt das nächste Kapitel so in etwa ?
2/18 c59 snow in the darkness
I keep delaying to read this fic because I thought it was going to be Tywin centric fanfic, but now turns out it is fic where Tywin is the biggest fool. God you made my week
I keep delaying to read this fic because I thought it was going to be Tywin centric fanfic, but now turns out it is fic where Tywin is the biggest fool. God you made my week
1/29 c59 Ranger003
I really hope that Min won’t just move to the lands beyond the wall and go native with the Free Folk. Even though the spartans are socially inept due to their upbringing, they still know and respect the laws and culture of the UEG and they wouldn’t tolerate a lot of the horrific aspects of the Free Folk way of life, and they surely wouldn't join.
What I really want is that Min and a few other members of the crew will start a new colony beyond the wall. With fusion and other UNSC’s technologies they could create a thriving community beyond the wall and make it even better than the southern kingdoms, with that colony they could claim those territories for the UEG since right now it’s no man's land. If the Free Folk wants to live in the new colony they should be welcome as long as they agree to follow UEG’s law and integrate in the new culture, I’m sure that there would be many that would be willing to change their way of life in exchange for security, abundant food and a better life for themselves and their family.
Also, you should consider uploading this story on Questionable Questing. I'd love to have more active discussions of this story and this is the kind of story that would generate a lot of feedback. To avoid the same situation of Spacebattles you should release the story slowly so to allow discussion to form, maybe release one chapter a week until the chapters catch up? I’d love to see what people think of this story at large.
I really hope that Min won’t just move to the lands beyond the wall and go native with the Free Folk. Even though the spartans are socially inept due to their upbringing, they still know and respect the laws and culture of the UEG and they wouldn’t tolerate a lot of the horrific aspects of the Free Folk way of life, and they surely wouldn't join.
What I really want is that Min and a few other members of the crew will start a new colony beyond the wall. With fusion and other UNSC’s technologies they could create a thriving community beyond the wall and make it even better than the southern kingdoms, with that colony they could claim those territories for the UEG since right now it’s no man's land. If the Free Folk wants to live in the new colony they should be welcome as long as they agree to follow UEG’s law and integrate in the new culture, I’m sure that there would be many that would be willing to change their way of life in exchange for security, abundant food and a better life for themselves and their family.
Also, you should consider uploading this story on Questionable Questing. I'd love to have more active discussions of this story and this is the kind of story that would generate a lot of feedback. To avoid the same situation of Spacebattles you should release the story slowly so to allow discussion to form, maybe release one chapter a week until the chapters catch up? I’d love to see what people think of this story at large.
1/28 c59 Guest
Keep doing this pls don’t fall behind on it
Keep doing this pls don’t fall behind on it
1/28 c1 27mad97
I love this fic but i have problem with the the Plaetea crew being this passive and giving alligance to anyone else they should only answer to the UNSC so why didn't they takeover the 7 kingdoms or atleast packup and fly the ship to Esoss and takeover the slaver cities they should have done that it would have allowed them to assimilate the freed slaves to their culture and have greater manpower incase the covenant found them or they were the last of the UEG it would insure that the UEG would survive also why would Kurt discharge the Spartans and the crew don't they need a military and what would the Spartans even do they become uncomfortable when they take off their armour and despite the fic name the Spartans did in fact played the game of thrones and the didn't gain anything from it and after the Spartans showed their might and know they were in it for the long haul why did they still pander to these assholes who call themselves nobels ?
I love this fic but i have problem with the the Plaetea crew being this passive and giving alligance to anyone else they should only answer to the UNSC so why didn't they takeover the 7 kingdoms or atleast packup and fly the ship to Esoss and takeover the slaver cities they should have done that it would have allowed them to assimilate the freed slaves to their culture and have greater manpower incase the covenant found them or they were the last of the UEG it would insure that the UEG would survive also why would Kurt discharge the Spartans and the crew don't they need a military and what would the Spartans even do they become uncomfortable when they take off their armour and despite the fic name the Spartans did in fact played the game of thrones and the didn't gain anything from it and after the Spartans showed their might and know they were in it for the long haul why did they still pander to these assholes who call themselves nobels ?
1/22 c59 Guest
Damn, 2 hella deep chapters. Brought a tear to my eye. Next chapter… honestly, i hope next chapter is of Rhaella. Having her speak to one of the spartan III’s she is familiar with and speaking to them about kurt. Having a bit of his history revealed how he had been fighting since young, against an enemy that burnt entire planets, of his sacrifices, that he had no choice in, and what that has done to him. Letting her see some of the context of his life. Maybe even add in autumn showing some holographic images of the covenants destruction and of kurt fighting. If you wana kick us in the feels, that sort of revelation would hit like a truck. That no matter ehat suffering Rhaella went through, kirt has been through worse, and has fought his entire life to save people from having to take the burden of that suffering themselves. That he lived his whole life expecting to die defending humanity. Maybe add in a bit about spartans being the hope for humanity, that they dont get killed in action, only ever go missing in action. Try to just convey the burden he held before reaching Westeros, and how despite everything he has done, the future of everything he fought his entire life for is out of his hands and that he has to come to terms with that.
Maybe even have mendez be the one to speak about it, given his insight into kurts life since the start. Giving Rhaella that perspective which gives context to everything she has seen of the man, his scar she saw from back in the red keep, his outward appearance etc. maybe even have her come to the conclusion that his condescending attitude towards the locals is less to do with how primitive they are - although that may be a part of it - but at how they are so blissfully ignorant of what is out there that he had been fighting. Of how the lack of that gaze when looking at his fellow spartans is due to them fighting shoulder to shoulder with him.
Like these are just some brief points you can go into some serious depth with, and having Rhaella, who had just seen one of humanity’s greatest warriors at their absolute lowest, reacting to seeing that would make for one fucking emotional as hell chapter.
Hell, it could even give some context to the ‘graduation song’ and how mournful it is, since the spartans graduating would be marching to their deaths against an enemy massacring humanity. Like you could make the next chapter fucking deep as hell, and provide Rhaella with the context about kurt that would allow their relationship to get some foundation. For her to see him as the soldier that had committed his life and death towards a goal he can no longer fight towards. Like damn, you set the scene for something like this absolutely amazingly, and I seriously hope you capitulate on it and bring up some, if not all of the above points up in the discussion. Distraught Rhaella admitting to seeing kurt in that state, a disbelieving spartan hearing about what happened and trying to comfort her, or the not so regulation following AI seeing her state and deciding to try and help her captain out a bit.
But yeah, aside from my non verbal splurge of how to hit people in the feels, this has been a frankly brilliantly written work. Most halo fics i sort of expect to be written by the spartan wanabe kiddies (ie those who change their gamertags to a cannon or non cannon spartan’s id tag and run around role playing like 5 hear olds), so i was admittedly a little hesitant to read this one. But you uave seriously blown that outa my mind. While i will admit i feel that the spartans show a bit too much emotion, and loose their emotionlessness a bit too quickly (which might not be 100% accurate due to me not accurately clocking how much time has passed on their Westeros vacation),what you have conveyed about their thought processes, emotions and so on is a level of depth i honestly didn’t expect going into this, especially as Spartans are so often idealised by the previously mentioned wanabe kiddies so they never actually consider the fact that Spartans are emotionally shattered individuals effectively receiving the indoctrination that children of countries like north korea and china receive.
So in all, despite this not being the best work i have read, in part limited due to the constraints of having a self sufficient capital ship from what, 2554 was it? In a medieval world limiting just how much struggle the Spartans would face, you have executed it frankly perfectly. Like seriously, most would just have the UNSC steam roll the natives and have done. But with the legal reasoning, political positioning and logic behind it, and the setting with initial hope of getting home dictating their actions, only for that reasoning to change in favour of plans for their long term stay… well, this is frankly a masterpiece in its own way. So props to you for writing this, and a big old good job. Thereis so mich else i could compliment you on such as with your accurate portrayal of characters, understanding of the regional politics, etc.
I look forward to your next chapters.
Would be hilarious to see Euron Greyjoy watch his ship get obliterated by a - i think its a miniaturised MAC gun the condor uses? Never actually delved into the specific specs for the condor. But it would be hilarious, especially if he tried to use his dragon horn on it to bring the big, loud, metal dragon under his control .
Damn, 2 hella deep chapters. Brought a tear to my eye. Next chapter… honestly, i hope next chapter is of Rhaella. Having her speak to one of the spartan III’s she is familiar with and speaking to them about kurt. Having a bit of his history revealed how he had been fighting since young, against an enemy that burnt entire planets, of his sacrifices, that he had no choice in, and what that has done to him. Letting her see some of the context of his life. Maybe even add in autumn showing some holographic images of the covenants destruction and of kurt fighting. If you wana kick us in the feels, that sort of revelation would hit like a truck. That no matter ehat suffering Rhaella went through, kirt has been through worse, and has fought his entire life to save people from having to take the burden of that suffering themselves. That he lived his whole life expecting to die defending humanity. Maybe add in a bit about spartans being the hope for humanity, that they dont get killed in action, only ever go missing in action. Try to just convey the burden he held before reaching Westeros, and how despite everything he has done, the future of everything he fought his entire life for is out of his hands and that he has to come to terms with that.
Maybe even have mendez be the one to speak about it, given his insight into kurts life since the start. Giving Rhaella that perspective which gives context to everything she has seen of the man, his scar she saw from back in the red keep, his outward appearance etc. maybe even have her come to the conclusion that his condescending attitude towards the locals is less to do with how primitive they are - although that may be a part of it - but at how they are so blissfully ignorant of what is out there that he had been fighting. Of how the lack of that gaze when looking at his fellow spartans is due to them fighting shoulder to shoulder with him.
Like these are just some brief points you can go into some serious depth with, and having Rhaella, who had just seen one of humanity’s greatest warriors at their absolute lowest, reacting to seeing that would make for one fucking emotional as hell chapter.
Hell, it could even give some context to the ‘graduation song’ and how mournful it is, since the spartans graduating would be marching to their deaths against an enemy massacring humanity. Like you could make the next chapter fucking deep as hell, and provide Rhaella with the context about kurt that would allow their relationship to get some foundation. For her to see him as the soldier that had committed his life and death towards a goal he can no longer fight towards. Like damn, you set the scene for something like this absolutely amazingly, and I seriously hope you capitulate on it and bring up some, if not all of the above points up in the discussion. Distraught Rhaella admitting to seeing kurt in that state, a disbelieving spartan hearing about what happened and trying to comfort her, or the not so regulation following AI seeing her state and deciding to try and help her captain out a bit.
But yeah, aside from my non verbal splurge of how to hit people in the feels, this has been a frankly brilliantly written work. Most halo fics i sort of expect to be written by the spartan wanabe kiddies (ie those who change their gamertags to a cannon or non cannon spartan’s id tag and run around role playing like 5 hear olds), so i was admittedly a little hesitant to read this one. But you uave seriously blown that outa my mind. While i will admit i feel that the spartans show a bit too much emotion, and loose their emotionlessness a bit too quickly (which might not be 100% accurate due to me not accurately clocking how much time has passed on their Westeros vacation),what you have conveyed about their thought processes, emotions and so on is a level of depth i honestly didn’t expect going into this, especially as Spartans are so often idealised by the previously mentioned wanabe kiddies so they never actually consider the fact that Spartans are emotionally shattered individuals effectively receiving the indoctrination that children of countries like north korea and china receive.
So in all, despite this not being the best work i have read, in part limited due to the constraints of having a self sufficient capital ship from what, 2554 was it? In a medieval world limiting just how much struggle the Spartans would face, you have executed it frankly perfectly. Like seriously, most would just have the UNSC steam roll the natives and have done. But with the legal reasoning, political positioning and logic behind it, and the setting with initial hope of getting home dictating their actions, only for that reasoning to change in favour of plans for their long term stay… well, this is frankly a masterpiece in its own way. So props to you for writing this, and a big old good job. Thereis so mich else i could compliment you on such as with your accurate portrayal of characters, understanding of the regional politics, etc.
I look forward to your next chapters.
Would be hilarious to see Euron Greyjoy watch his ship get obliterated by a - i think its a miniaturised MAC gun the condor uses? Never actually delved into the specific specs for the condor. But it would be hilarious, especially if he tried to use his dragon horn on it to bring the big, loud, metal dragon under his control .
1/15 c59 alero6159
Friend, please continue your story. I like it a lot and I read it in 2 days. It's not perfect but I loved it. The only recommendation I would make is that you emphasize the interest in the "others" since I think that a threat capable of hurting a Spartan would not be taken with such leniency. Take your time but talk more about the subject please.
Friend, please continue your story. I like it a lot and I read it in 2 days. It's not perfect but I loved it. The only recommendation I would make is that you emphasize the interest in the "others" since I think that a threat capable of hurting a Spartan would not be taken with such leniency. Take your time but talk more about the subject please.
1/14 c58 hitmon126
I would like to apologize for my chapter 59 review I actually like the story and it your story and you can do what ever you want with it , it's just that get super pissed off when things said in the chapters contradict what stated in the books such as the in chapter 46 referring to the Orion-class assault carrier as a super carrier, the are only two ships that are referred to as a super carrier are the infinity and the Punic class vessel. I still think that high charity would have detected the platea and destroy it because they had thousands warships protecting it and even with the prowlers, I believe that high charity would have detected them because they could have used the forerunner dreadnought senor array to detect them and intercept them and I don't think that human stealth ships would have been able to avoid detection from forerunner tech. If gray team prowler (that has a nova bomb) was unwilling to destroy Sanghelios because the planet was to well guarded it means that mean covenant tech would have eventually have detect them and destroy them so they decided to destroy Glyke instead. I believe the only way they could have done that mission is if they stole a covenant warship and used a very powerful nuke to cause a lot of damage and the Spartans would have taken heavy casualties because they would be swarmed by hundreds of thousands of sangheli,brutes , etc... and the only reason the master chief wasn't killed was because they were in a civil war and without it, I believe that chief would have died on high charity plus the flood.
I would like to apologize for my chapter 59 review I actually like the story and it your story and you can do what ever you want with it , it's just that get super pissed off when things said in the chapters contradict what stated in the books such as the in chapter 46 referring to the Orion-class assault carrier as a super carrier, the are only two ships that are referred to as a super carrier are the infinity and the Punic class vessel. I still think that high charity would have detected the platea and destroy it because they had thousands warships protecting it and even with the prowlers, I believe that high charity would have detected them because they could have used the forerunner dreadnought senor array to detect them and intercept them and I don't think that human stealth ships would have been able to avoid detection from forerunner tech. If gray team prowler (that has a nova bomb) was unwilling to destroy Sanghelios because the planet was to well guarded it means that mean covenant tech would have eventually have detect them and destroy them so they decided to destroy Glyke instead. I believe the only way they could have done that mission is if they stole a covenant warship and used a very powerful nuke to cause a lot of damage and the Spartans would have taken heavy casualties because they would be swarmed by hundreds of thousands of sangheli,brutes , etc... and the only reason the master chief wasn't killed was because they were in a civil war and without it, I believe that chief would have died on high charity plus the flood.