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for Optimistic Game: Revised

9/17 c70 Alex TF
famous last words
9/17 c70 yahiro365
lovely chapter! thank you for posting!
9/17 c70 Lechuzape
...Titania... f*ck... dont say that never!
9/17 c70 justinq719
Titania, now you gone and tempted fate...
9/17 c70 Wolf1741
nice
9/12 c69 the sonic devil
Nice
9/8 c69 Umi
Yo
9/8 c68 Ray
Thanks for the chapter
9/5 c16 2Lea RosenWulf
Okay, I want to start off by saying I love your fic, this is my fourth time rereading it after all, so what I say next isn't me hating on the fic in its entirety.

I feel like how Jaune was handled so far was kind of piss poor and taken out of character. I do not believe he would have thrown the sap without an element added to shift his character this story does not currently have. I know Jaune gets a bit of redemption later, but this whole subplot leaves a BAD taste in my mouth every time I get to it.

I understand this is to get Pyrrha into the harem, but I have a couple thoughts on that. First is that there are other ways this could have been done, the least of which could have been to gender bend Jaune or write him out of the story entirely. Second, does Pyrrha HAVE to be in the harem? Like there are PLENTY of female characters in RWBY without you having to essentially ruin and cuck one that MAY become a couple. What next, going to kill Ren so Nora is single?

I wanted to ask you though process on this plot point, see if I could see it from your perspective, but I can't find a proper link to your discord (and I don't have the money to go to patreon).
9/3 c65 1GideonBlackthorn
Oyakodon you say...
KaliBlake
RubySummer
YangRaven
Weiss/WinterWillow
Velvet?
THE MIND BOGGLES
9/2 c50 GideonBlackthorn
*slow clap*
bravo
9/2 c41 GideonBlackthorn
i like the chapter and velvet is one of my favorite characters in the series, but this ch seemed to just speedrun all the relationship building that we saw with ruby and kinda the same thing with Yang, like soon as ruby gave perm our mc started fucking everything and just everybodys cool with it. dont get me wrong still reading and love your work but more of a buildup in the relationship would be a lot more believable
8/31 c6 GideonBlackthorn
DAMN. that omake, just DAMN. this needs to be a fic on its own!
8/28 c4 MatteusN
how this has 9k followers is beyond me. 4/10
8/25 c67 Vortozan
Holy mind-fucking shit I love your portrayal of Salem. Iā€™m now rooting for her wtf xD
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Though speaking frankly, your poor decisions guided your miserable existence. It wasn't the humans that made you suffer that led you here. You're simply an idiot.
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Burn!

Thank you for the incredible read lmfao
- Vortz
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