for Wolf of Numenor4/20/2022 c70 Emperor Wan Athers
Honestly, this is a good story but the longer you drag the Middle-Earth arc weaker it becomes, and that is not to mention the many cracks this story has like weird time how can one continent pass over 50-60 but on another only 5 or 7 years just passed (at very least that how you portrait) the mass harem thing it's fine if want go that round but don't turn this into mass harem where they all claim to love him all 9 of them, and lastly we have Margaery in all honestly why when Jon and Arianna become a thing he(Jon) specifically claimed that he loved her more them Marg and that was when he didn't have all others of his lovers you also have a fact that times changes person and duo the lack of development on Margies side we still have a power-hungry who would sacrifice practically anyone for her goal (true she doesn't want want to marry anymore and she felt some remorse but still would you marry a woman that only married you for the throne when you have better options) and let's not forget that Margaery is still human and that humans live up to 80-85 where Jon is a Númenóreans his life span is about 350 to 400, so qustion is why would you take her back. The best advice split this story into 2 or 3 parts when it's part it's its own story or in the worst scenario rewrite it completely.
Anyway that my opinion and i wish you good luck with this or any other thing you do
Honestly, this is a good story but the longer you drag the Middle-Earth arc weaker it becomes, and that is not to mention the many cracks this story has like weird time how can one continent pass over 50-60 but on another only 5 or 7 years just passed (at very least that how you portrait) the mass harem thing it's fine if want go that round but don't turn this into mass harem where they all claim to love him all 9 of them, and lastly we have Margaery in all honestly why when Jon and Arianna become a thing he(Jon) specifically claimed that he loved her more them Marg and that was when he didn't have all others of his lovers you also have a fact that times changes person and duo the lack of development on Margies side we still have a power-hungry who would sacrifice practically anyone for her goal (true she doesn't want want to marry anymore and she felt some remorse but still would you marry a woman that only married you for the throne when you have better options) and let's not forget that Margaery is still human and that humans live up to 80-85 where Jon is a Númenóreans his life span is about 350 to 400, so qustion is why would you take her back. The best advice split this story into 2 or 3 parts when it's part it's its own story or in the worst scenario rewrite it completely.
Anyway that my opinion and i wish you good luck with this or any other thing you do
3/28/2022 c25 
1Pont1ac-Band1t
Elves don’t envy death. Not in the way you mean.
The gift of men is literally a curse.
Originally humans were meant to have the ability to die when they were ready to. Over time Melkite perverted and corrupted the gift so that men feared death and suffered as a result.
Being stuck in an eternal loop like the elves isn’t exactly a win when you look at it but only loving 80 odd years in the grand scheme of things compared to the lives of other races is not a better deal.
1Pont1ac-Band1tElves don’t envy death. Not in the way you mean.
The gift of men is literally a curse.
Originally humans were meant to have the ability to die when they were ready to. Over time Melkite perverted and corrupted the gift so that men feared death and suffered as a result.
Being stuck in an eternal loop like the elves isn’t exactly a win when you look at it but only loving 80 odd years in the grand scheme of things compared to the lives of other races is not a better deal.
3/16/2022 c59 Janny092
This story was awesome to read through for 2 days straight, but author-san this arc is taking far too long in my opinion when it comes. Aemon and others should have been at this point have already finished everything they need to do in middle earth and should have already been in Westeros starting their work bringing back the lost children Eru Illuvatar back into his arms again and repel servants of Sauron.
Please hurry up and finish this arc already, while it is entertaining to read through the daily life of our main cast, it has started to becoming dull to me.
This story was awesome to read through for 2 days straight, but author-san this arc is taking far too long in my opinion when it comes. Aemon and others should have been at this point have already finished everything they need to do in middle earth and should have already been in Westeros starting their work bringing back the lost children Eru Illuvatar back into his arms again and repel servants of Sauron.
Please hurry up and finish this arc already, while it is entertaining to read through the daily life of our main cast, it has started to becoming dull to me.
2/21/2022 c69 RReaperOfSouls
Love this story but the thing that I think actually holds it back a little is the harem... Like I can't see how it helps the story progress or the use of it but I it's preference at the end. Keep up the good work!
Love this story but the thing that I think actually holds it back a little is the harem... Like I can't see how it helps the story progress or the use of it but I it's preference at the end. Keep up the good work!
2/19/2022 c69 JUANMARTIN202000
es una gran historia y espero con ancias cuando se pueda el proximo cap, siempre me da una sonrisa ver una nueva actualisasion. magnifico trabajo
es una gran historia y espero con ancias cuando se pueda el proximo cap, siempre me da una sonrisa ver una nueva actualisasion. magnifico trabajo
1/26/2022 c34 alefrosier
Wow what an exaggeration to put all the blame on lyanna, at least for me she was used as an excuse to dethrone the targaryans the cruelty that followed is the fault only of the individuals who practiced it, blaming her for that is ridiculous, Robert would have been a horrible husband to her, her only sin was falling in love with a married man
Wow what an exaggeration to put all the blame on lyanna, at least for me she was used as an excuse to dethrone the targaryans the cruelty that followed is the fault only of the individuals who practiced it, blaming her for that is ridiculous, Robert would have been a horrible husband to her, her only sin was falling in love with a married man
1/24/2022 c68 CeeLee
Still enjoying the story, but I am curious how you will reconcile the time differences?
55-60 years have passed in Middle Earth since Jon and company left but only maybe
5-10 years in Westeros. Perhaps there is a time dilation effect in the western sea?
Would make sense with how wonky the seasons are in Westeros and Essos.
Still enjoying the story, but I am curious how you will reconcile the time differences?
55-60 years have passed in Middle Earth since Jon and company left but only maybe
5-10 years in Westeros. Perhaps there is a time dilation effect in the western sea?
Would make sense with how wonky the seasons are in Westeros and Essos.
1/16/2022 c67 Guest
Ok, it seems like you're trying to rehabilitate Margery again. Whatever her feelings for John, she and her family chose power and prestige over love. They are now getting their just desserts. What does Margery bring to the table (or bedroom) at this point? Every single one of John's lovers/future lovers is superior to her. Only Arya is inferior in beauty and by now she's accomplished-not to mention family. LG, LI, AD and SS far outclass her in beauty, the arts of love and ability. LG is practically a living goddess. DT, RT,RHT are all family and dragon riders. Sansa has "filled out". Arianne is a warrior, and passionate lover. She's also very loyal- unlike Margery. You've already said in an earlier chapter that John loved her more than Marge. Besides, John is a completely different person. He is the epitome of an epic Joseph Campbell hero- not to mention much more mature with decades and later centuries of experience. John might forgive her-but that doesn't mean he should let her back in to his bed. At this point, I think Margery is a square peg in a round hole . It's your (good) fic of course and you can do whatever you want.
On another note, you need to figure out how John can balance the logistics of the harem. The girls have to figure a way to get along-maybe do some more of their own "bonding". John has to manage them and be fair. That said a 'fight' between 1st and 2nd born just is not fair. One ends up on top-perhaps in more ways than one. I'm rooting for the 'knife ears', although Arianne should be rewarded for her loyalty. (I also like the way you've written Irme)
BTW I think you need demonstrate the full power of Galadriel. Maybe against Sauron himself? Not to mention Caitlyn and Lady O. It's really not a fair contest.
Ok, it seems like you're trying to rehabilitate Margery again. Whatever her feelings for John, she and her family chose power and prestige over love. They are now getting their just desserts. What does Margery bring to the table (or bedroom) at this point? Every single one of John's lovers/future lovers is superior to her. Only Arya is inferior in beauty and by now she's accomplished-not to mention family. LG, LI, AD and SS far outclass her in beauty, the arts of love and ability. LG is practically a living goddess. DT, RT,RHT are all family and dragon riders. Sansa has "filled out". Arianne is a warrior, and passionate lover. She's also very loyal- unlike Margery. You've already said in an earlier chapter that John loved her more than Marge. Besides, John is a completely different person. He is the epitome of an epic Joseph Campbell hero- not to mention much more mature with decades and later centuries of experience. John might forgive her-but that doesn't mean he should let her back in to his bed. At this point, I think Margery is a square peg in a round hole . It's your (good) fic of course and you can do whatever you want.
On another note, you need to figure out how John can balance the logistics of the harem. The girls have to figure a way to get along-maybe do some more of their own "bonding". John has to manage them and be fair. That said a 'fight' between 1st and 2nd born just is not fair. One ends up on top-perhaps in more ways than one. I'm rooting for the 'knife ears', although Arianne should be rewarded for her loyalty. (I also like the way you've written Irme)
BTW I think you need demonstrate the full power of Galadriel. Maybe against Sauron himself? Not to mention Caitlyn and Lady O. It's really not a fair contest.
1/4/2022 c67 Sandford9687
He needs to stop being so willing to be ordered about and made a fool off one minute hes a wild warrior the next hes bowing his head and getting talked down to and forced to do things he doesnt want even after all he bas done for everyone.
He needs to stop being so willing to be ordered about and made a fool off one minute hes a wild warrior the next hes bowing his head and getting talked down to and forced to do things he doesnt want even after all he bas done for everyone.
1/4/2022 c67 p2eduardo2007
I am loving this story, but the diferent timelines confuse me. Decades have passed in middle earth, meanwhile in Westeros jus a few years. Will there be some time travel? Sorry If asking for spoilers.
I am loving this story, but the diferent timelines confuse me. Decades have passed in middle earth, meanwhile in Westeros jus a few years. Will there be some time travel? Sorry If asking for spoilers.
12/19/2021 c1 Guest
Well since you asked for one each chapter, here is the first. But i apologise already since the others will probably come at longer delays. Btw never read ur co author's one yet. Yours has a decent start though. Still a single chapter so not much to say except slightly disappointed that he is already in relationship with Margery since ei generally like the pursuit part of romance the most. That's just personal taste though, good start all in all.
Well since you asked for one each chapter, here is the first. But i apologise already since the others will probably come at longer delays. Btw never read ur co author's one yet. Yours has a decent start though. Still a single chapter so not much to say except slightly disappointed that he is already in relationship with Margery since ei generally like the pursuit part of romance the most. That's just personal taste though, good start all in all.