for Written in the Stars9/26/2024 c8 Guest
Ok so I've read all the chapters and remember the ones you took down. I can say that while the story was good you can do better. With the Astraea record out we have more information about the Astraea girls. Their personality, magical capabilities and how they interact within the familia. Also instead of having Shirou regressed as a kid how about a few years after the holy Grail war. Also it doesn't have to be Shirou from the three routes. How about the Shirou Emiya from Fate/Kaleid (Miyu brother). Honestly I like his character development more compared to the other Shirous.
Ok so I've read all the chapters and remember the ones you took down. I can say that while the story was good you can do better. With the Astraea record out we have more information about the Astraea girls. Their personality, magical capabilities and how they interact within the familia. Also instead of having Shirou regressed as a kid how about a few years after the holy Grail war. Also it doesn't have to be Shirou from the three routes. How about the Shirou Emiya from Fate/Kaleid (Miyu brother). Honestly I like his character development more compared to the other Shirous.
8/25/2024 c8 ThreeKerr
goddamn. this story is gold! i wish there was another chapter after 7! thank you for writing!
goddamn. this story is gold! i wish there was another chapter after 7! thank you for writing!
3/21/2024 c8 
8Wally991
Just saying, Shirou could have easily dealt with Evilus and the Juggernaut if he had used Unlimited Blade Works. And he COULD have used it, as it is present in his status
8Wally991Just saying, Shirou could have easily dealt with Evilus and the Juggernaut if he had used Unlimited Blade Works. And he COULD have used it, as it is present in his status
3/13/2024 c8 E
Well, this was interesting despite a few issues. Though, all of these chapters seem to be set up and the story ended here.
If this ever resurrected, I might read more.
Well, this was interesting despite a few issues. Though, all of these chapters seem to be set up and the story ended here.
If this ever resurrected, I might read more.
3/13/2024 c6 E
You know, right after a sus as hell author's note last chapter, immediately we get this insanity. I think this is an utterly immersion breaking and tonally dissonant chapter. That might be on purpose, but it sucked to read. I didn't need an entire chapter of literal fever dream. I get it, Shirou was poisoned. I don't need his pov as he strokes out. Utterly baffling story decision.
I dearly hope next chapter isn't remotely similar.
You know, right after a sus as hell author's note last chapter, immediately we get this insanity. I think this is an utterly immersion breaking and tonally dissonant chapter. That might be on purpose, but it sucked to read. I didn't need an entire chapter of literal fever dream. I get it, Shirou was poisoned. I don't need his pov as he strokes out. Utterly baffling story decision.
I dearly hope next chapter isn't remotely similar.
3/13/2024 c5 E
... What? You made a major plot decision based on fucking astrology? I REALLY hope you were joking, because that's phenomenally stupid.
I've liked this story so far, I really hope that stupidity doesn't leak into the writing.
... What? You made a major plot decision based on fucking astrology? I REALLY hope you were joking, because that's phenomenally stupid.
I've liked this story so far, I really hope that stupidity doesn't leak into the writing.
11/21/2023 c1 moose master5543
damn you author for leaving this story. i hope your dad never comes back with the milk and he leaves you behind like you left this story behind
damn you author for leaving this story. i hope your dad never comes back with the milk and he leaves you behind like you left this story behind
8/1/2023 c7 keybladelight
Hope to see more. When will Bell appear so that shirou meet him and Hestia.
Hope to see more. When will Bell appear so that shirou meet him and Hestia.
7/8/2023 c4 Guest
If I would have did a re write of this story I would keep all of them the same but just change the parts where the survivors were the 5 main girls, Ryuu, Lyra, Kaguya, Alise, and Neze. Would be alive.
If I would have did a re write of this story I would keep all of them the same but just change the parts where the survivors were the 5 main girls, Ryuu, Lyra, Kaguya, Alise, and Neze. Would be alive.
6/24/2023 c8 Guest
So is Alise alive or dead and is kaguya alive. Which members survived and which didn’t
So is Alise alive or dead and is kaguya alive. Which members survived and which didn’t
5/12/2023 c1 Pixelitus
Shirou…can’t use Avalon. Avalon is something will only *actually,* properly work if he is near Saber or has a contract with her. Without her magical energy, it’s pretty much useless.
Shirou…can’t use Avalon. Avalon is something will only *actually,* properly work if he is near Saber or has a contract with her. Without her magical energy, it’s pretty much useless.
4/11/2023 c8 Guest
To Soren Arelia,
I agree with you. That Shirou's an idiot.
To Soren Arelia,
I agree with you. That Shirou's an idiot.
2/22/2023 c1 3Redguardmen
To soren arelia. Mate that not how Unlimited Blade Work and NPs work. Unlimited Blade Work can't give the creations to other to use like with FSF Duma's NP.
3RedguardmenTo soren arelia. Mate that not how Unlimited Blade Work and NPs work. Unlimited Blade Work can't give the creations to other to use like with FSF Duma's NP.
2/4/2023 c1 Justaguy867
To Soren Arelia
Nps cannot be given to others,they are literally crystallized legends and can only be wielded by its true and archer can only wield them thanks to said that even Kanshou and Bakuya should be more than enough to kill anything is danmachi verse.
To Soren Arelia
Nps cannot be given to others,they are literally crystallized legends and can only be wielded by its true and archer can only wield them thanks to said that even Kanshou and Bakuya should be more than enough to kill anything is danmachi verse.