for Harry Potter and the Conjoining of Paragons3/6 c64 keybladejedi
The epilogue made me wish I never started reading this fic. I've literally never had my opinion on a fanfic crater so drastically with that joke of a twist ending. Fucking baby murder. That's vile. Get some therapy.
The epilogue made me wish I never started reading this fic. I've literally never had my opinion on a fanfic crater so drastically with that joke of a twist ending. Fucking baby murder. That's vile. Get some therapy.
2/19 c64 Spelf
enjoyed most of the story but not really how the ending landed
enjoyed most of the story but not really how the ending landed
1/9 c7 
1LuminouShadowAlt
Wants to write a good Hadrian fic, claims that all others are shit, but writes shit anyway smh.
1LuminouShadowAltWants to write a good Hadrian fic, claims that all others are shit, but writes shit anyway smh.
12/28/2024 c20 unCordial
Wow this is hot garbage filled with circular pseudo logic. Its 20mins of a character having an inside monologue flashback of last 3 chapters just to arrive to no conclusion. Story makes 1 step every 10 chapters, the its 9 chapters of the author writing the same thing over and over again... this feels what i assume is like reading the bible 50 times in a row.
Also:
Gah!
Gah!
Gah gah gah! Gah! Rubs head... GAH! Farts... gah! Riddle looks at anything? Gah!
Gah!
Gah!
I read gah ever again in any story ill die of eyebleed. Gah! Kit.
Wow this is hot garbage filled with circular pseudo logic. Its 20mins of a character having an inside monologue flashback of last 3 chapters just to arrive to no conclusion. Story makes 1 step every 10 chapters, the its 9 chapters of the author writing the same thing over and over again... this feels what i assume is like reading the bible 50 times in a row.
Also:
Gah!
Gah!
Gah gah gah! Gah! Rubs head... GAH! Farts... gah! Riddle looks at anything? Gah!
Gah!
Gah!
I read gah ever again in any story ill die of eyebleed. Gah! Kit.
12/27/2024 c64 SylviaV
It was beautiful. Period. Emily will forever be a rendition of Riddle thay i hold dear.
It was beautiful. Period. Emily will forever be a rendition of Riddle thay i hold dear.
12/23/2024 c64 1bleachorange
Honestly, the finale was rather unsatisfying. And I dont mean just the epilogue. I can say I am overall ok with the time I spent reading, but I feel there are serious flaws in the story overall. The theme meandered quite a bit, and the focus was so zoomed in the setting didnt breathe at all. That said, the bit you did focus on did do a better job than many of characterizing people, even if I sometimes disagree with how you went about it.
1bleachorangeHonestly, the finale was rather unsatisfying. And I dont mean just the epilogue. I can say I am overall ok with the time I spent reading, but I feel there are serious flaws in the story overall. The theme meandered quite a bit, and the focus was so zoomed in the setting didnt breathe at all. That said, the bit you did focus on did do a better job than many of characterizing people, even if I sometimes disagree with how you went about it.
12/22/2024 c56 bleachorange
I dont think you have done a good job of transitioning Harrys thought processes the last few chapters, nor this one. It just comes off wrong.
I dont think you have done a good job of transitioning Harrys thought processes the last few chapters, nor this one. It just comes off wrong.
12/22/2024 c53 bleachorange
A bit late, but, I always feel sympathy for those who have had a recent loss. My belated condolences.
A bit late, but, I always feel sympathy for those who have had a recent loss. My belated condolences.
12/22/2024 c51 bleachorange
I dont understand the emphasis you have on him repeating that line. Is it ptsd, or is it obsession, or what? I can say its distracting.
I dont understand the emphasis you have on him repeating that line. Is it ptsd, or is it obsession, or what? I can say its distracting.
12/22/2024 c50 bleachorange
Its so amusing to me that some people dont understand the distinction between a killer and a murderer. Murder is a premeditated killing, usually to derive a gain for the murderer in some way - material, emotional, whatever. If you kill someone in self defense or in war, you its not murder when you kill someone. You can still have psychological issues stemming from life or death situations, justified or not, though, so it doesnt matter here aside from me thinking Harry is being stupid in how he frames his guilt.
Its so amusing to me that some people dont understand the distinction between a killer and a murderer. Murder is a premeditated killing, usually to derive a gain for the murderer in some way - material, emotional, whatever. If you kill someone in self defense or in war, you its not murder when you kill someone. You can still have psychological issues stemming from life or death situations, justified or not, though, so it doesnt matter here aside from me thinking Harry is being stupid in how he frames his guilt.
12/22/2024 c46 bleachorange
So, an aside for last chapter. Why did Grindelwald go? He had just won. Explaining things like this is important. It makes no sense why he would leave after winning without achieving his goal with harry.
As for this chapter, I dont really have an opinion on it.
So, an aside for last chapter. Why did Grindelwald go? He had just won. Explaining things like this is important. It makes no sense why he would leave after winning without achieving his goal with harry.
As for this chapter, I dont really have an opinion on it.
12/22/2024 c45 bleachorange
Your action sequence left a bit to be desired. I dont mind sparse prose, but this was a bit ridiculous. You didnt even detail the wands moving back and forth, just that someone now had them. Much less transition sentences like the flames moving from where they were.
Your action sequence left a bit to be desired. I dont mind sparse prose, but this was a bit ridiculous. You didnt even detail the wands moving back and forth, just that someone now had them. Much less transition sentences like the flames moving from where they were.
12/22/2024 c43 bleachorange
That duel with dolohov you wrote was weird and forced. Him snapping in that way just makes no sense whatsoever. I recognize that not all psychotic breaks make sense, hence the psychotic break bit, but this really didnt work for me.
That duel with dolohov you wrote was weird and forced. Him snapping in that way just makes no sense whatsoever. I recognize that not all psychotic breaks make sense, hence the psychotic break bit, but this really didnt work for me.