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12/14/2020 c3 2papireaz

Things are starting to heat up. Very nice chapter, just a few things that I need to point out to make it a more enjoyable experience for the reader.

You put a space between punctuation which makes it frankly a little weird to look at. Not the worst thing ever, but I know some very picky people will mark you down for that.

Secondly could you like town down on the numbers. Like I get 6 am, but wouldn’t it be better for the reader for it to say six am. Maybe I’m reaching a bit here, but this sis really solid and I’m going to send it to my mates.

Anyway developing really well! As expected of a legend!
12/14/2020 c2 1Neville Severus Black
Great start to a very promising story! Can't wait to see what you do next. Other than the grammar issues this is just golden. Keep it up : )
12/14/2020 c1 Zompusbite
Very good start. The story is good and i can't wait to see la suite. thanks.
12/14/2020 c2 2papireaz
Pretty good. Nice formatting makes it easier to read.

Grammar good.

Excited to see how it goes man!
12/13/2020 c1 papireaz
Honestly quite good.

If you fix up a few grammar, and paragraph the first section it will be excellent.

Overall, interesting premise and I can’t wait to see what happened next.

As expected of a living legend!
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