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9/1/2021 c3 Apple89123
gobi-no-kitsune... why are you doing this? I understand if you do stuff like this for names or titles but this is just about Fox demons with 2 tails or whatever gobi means. There is no reason to be cringe about it. Just say a two tails or two tailed or whatever like a normal person would.
gobi-no-kitsune... why are you doing this? I understand if you do stuff like this for names or titles but this is just about Fox demons with 2 tails or whatever gobi means. There is no reason to be cringe about it. Just say a two tails or two tailed or whatever like a normal person would.
9/1/2021 c2 Apple89123
zanjutsu just means swordsmanship and Hakuda probably is also just a normal japanese word fighting with fists... going all "bleach" here is kinda cringe.
zanjutsu just means swordsmanship and Hakuda probably is also just a normal japanese word fighting with fists... going all "bleach" here is kinda cringe.
7/28/2021 c5 
5Beast Mode92
This is actually pretty good. I look forward to the MC meeting Vali since he is the descendant of the previous white dragon emperor
5Beast Mode92This is actually pretty good. I look forward to the MC meeting Vali since he is the descendant of the previous white dragon emperor
4/7/2021 c5 Middernacht
I hope a new chapter comes out soon my Man/Woman/She-male/Apache Attack Helicopter
(Hey! I don't discriminate!)
I really have an image of your main character with a hero from Epic seven. His name is Mort and his entire character is despite being dragon royalty he longs to find an opponent that can rival him since no over dragon can challenge his might
I hope a new chapter comes out soon my Man/Woman/She-male/Apache Attack Helicopter
(Hey! I don't discriminate!)
I really have an image of your main character with a hero from Epic seven. His name is Mort and his entire character is despite being dragon royalty he longs to find an opponent that can rival him since no over dragon can challenge his might
2/27/2021 c2 Sherodx
is your oc retarded? does he really think that as descendant of albion he will have peace? imagine wasting potential in a world of gods and dragons cuz he thinks he will leave in peace AS a dragon ddraig said that dragons attract enemies and lovers
is your oc retarded? does he really think that as descendant of albion he will have peace? imagine wasting potential in a world of gods and dragons cuz he thinks he will leave in peace AS a dragon ddraig said that dragons attract enemies and lovers
1/20/2021 c5 AsbelLhant
I was expecting a scene where He would do the same thing with Amaterasu. Like saw Amaterasu being a hottie and he was like "Aren't you supposed to be some hag wearing glasses with huge earlobes!?"
I was expecting a scene where He would do the same thing with Amaterasu. Like saw Amaterasu being a hottie and he was like "Aren't you supposed to be some hag wearing glasses with huge earlobes!?"
1/12/2021 c2 Issei ODR
Tiamat (DXD) es la tiamat de FGO. Que perdió su divinidad o su poder que sus hijos le arrebataron.
Tiamat (DXD) es la tiamat de FGO. Que perdió su divinidad o su poder que sus hijos le arrebataron.
1/11/2021 c5 dragon slayer of death 98
does yasaka still have her massive boobs from canon, i think she is the biggest in the series, i don't get why youve changed her appearance from canon, she was hot
does yasaka still have her massive boobs from canon, i think she is the biggest in the series, i don't get why youve changed her appearance from canon, she was hot
1/11/2021 c4 scyfly
...while not unheard of, is certainly possible.
yes that is why it is not unheard of. such a statement would make sense if it went like:
...while not unheard of, is no easy feat.
or something
...while not unheard of, is certainly possible.
yes that is why it is not unheard of. such a statement would make sense if it went like:
...while not unheard of, is no easy feat.
or something
1/11/2021 c3 scyfly
this is a good example:
cute little hungry youkai.
you are saying that the youkai is cute and a little hungry instead of a little youkai that cute and hungry
this is a good example:
cute little hungry youkai.
you are saying that the youkai is cute and a little hungry instead of a little youkai that cute and hungry
1/11/2021 c2 scyfly
signing your grandson up to teach in devil terrirtory while it is being owned by two sisters of the satans is a very good way to get him killed. seriously sona and rias basicly put a giant bullseye on their back by doing that. every idiot would understand this, so why does his grandfather do this? well obviously it is the one responsible for his reincarnation because they got bored with his life. and he obviously accepts because you cannot possibly deny a contract which you did not personally sign.
bad writing if ive ever read it. and your story is already a bit of a mess where the pacing is all over the place with a rather haphazerd information dispensal, all of it stuck together with english that needs work. mostly it is clear you learned a lot of words by yourself and assigned them the wrong meaning likewise with the grammar, it is clear what you want to say and do it how you've seen it before only with your own twist making it not exactly english. or something like that.
cant say im to impressed with this, mostly because of you forcing the plot
signing your grandson up to teach in devil terrirtory while it is being owned by two sisters of the satans is a very good way to get him killed. seriously sona and rias basicly put a giant bullseye on their back by doing that. every idiot would understand this, so why does his grandfather do this? well obviously it is the one responsible for his reincarnation because they got bored with his life. and he obviously accepts because you cannot possibly deny a contract which you did not personally sign.
bad writing if ive ever read it. and your story is already a bit of a mess where the pacing is all over the place with a rather haphazerd information dispensal, all of it stuck together with english that needs work. mostly it is clear you learned a lot of words by yourself and assigned them the wrong meaning likewise with the grammar, it is clear what you want to say and do it how you've seen it before only with your own twist making it not exactly english. or something like that.
cant say im to impressed with this, mostly because of you forcing the plot