for Heart full of stars5/16/2021 c4 megafangirl
omg, I've read your other story, alone, and I'm absolutely hooked on both. please please please keep updating!
omg, I've read your other story, alone, and I'm absolutely hooked on both. please please please keep updating!
312/28/2020 c1 PJOBlackjack
Hey, the story is pretty good. I think you shouldn't jump from point of view to point of view in one chapter. If you really want to change the pint of views, I suggest doing it in separate chapters or space them out so they won't be switching right after just one paragraph or two. I advice using a spell checker like Grammarly to edit your chapters.
Hey, the story is pretty good. I think you shouldn't jump from point of view to point of view in one chapter. If you really want to change the pint of views, I suggest doing it in separate chapters or space them out so they won't be switching right after just one paragraph or two. I advice using a spell checker like Grammarly to edit your chapters.
12/22/2020 c2 pjolarry
This is a really good story. My only complaint is the first few paragraphs of the first chapter need a bit of editing to make them flow more smoothly, but otherwise it's really good. :)
This is a really good story. My only complaint is the first few paragraphs of the first chapter need a bit of editing to make them flow more smoothly, but otherwise it's really good. :)