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2/1/2021 c6 Guest
When it's gonna update? T_T
1/31/2021 c6 Guest
Update time
1/28/2021 c6 LuNaonepiece
This is a great story but the grammar mistakes ruin the story. I completely understand if English is not your first language but you should use microsoft word or google docs (which is free). The grammatical mistakes dampen the key scenes during the story becuase instead of Luffy saying "I'm going to be the King of the Pirates!" It comes out as "am going to have pirate of king" so you can see that it slightly ruins the affect of the whole moment but I can't wait for new chapter and well done on the previous ones.
1/26/2021 c6 bastidaswilliam2005
i wat to know what will happen to tashigi please make her join the crew she does not deserve to die luffy can convince her telling her what they do it to him
and about smoker you can make a coin tois up
side a he join the crew
side b he does not care about what the marine did, get kill and his fruit goes to tashigi (i like this one)
1/25/2021 c6 Goku Black
Hey, you don't care what others think. I support you, I must say I really liked what I read. This is what Luffy has to take seriously about killing enemies just to protect his loved and innocent ones, the entire crew should train and study more to become more powerful. Take Batman as an example, I really admire him for being a stronger and smarter human being. You really want to play Luffy as not only Saitama or Superman, but also Batman just for being a detective and smart. I know that the World Government and the Yonkous like Kaido and Big Mom are not going to take it seriously about the superpowered Luffy, stupidly still think that a brat like him is still a rookie and there is no way he could defeat Dracule Mihawk. I believe that Luffy maybe should make an alliance with Whitebeard, Shanks and other pirates like Eustass Kidd and Trafalgar Law to unite in action to overthrow World Government and kill all the nobles, which would leave idiots astonished to remember Rocks D. Xebec. Luffy needs stronger members and finally appoint them as commanders.
If the idiots don't take it seriously and still underestimate him for being "newbie", Luffy must show the world that he is really the strongest on the planet that surpasses Yonkous and Admirals, maybe even 5 old farts and Im. A Morgans journalist is very intelligent and knows very well what is going on in the world, I believe he will be a witness and will probably announce Monkey D. Luffy as a new Yonkou due to being much stronger than the other Yonkous. Of course, Blackbeard will be very angry. Furthermore, Luffy should claim all the islands as territories because they would help a lot not only to build a base, houses, castles, but also to protect innocents from enemies. So Luffy should recruit Johnny, Yosaku, Gin and even Nojiko, it will be better to expand even more crew. Perhaps who knows Luffy can build harem, there are no problems. Good luck buddy. Looking forward to reading.
1/24/2021 c6 Guest
I'm glad that now you already read my previous review about the mistakes (though there's still a lot in this chapter but hey, at least now i can rest easy knowing you also aware of this mistakes)
This story really become something special to me that i always feel impatient to wait for another week, but i know that there's nothing i can do about it because you also have personal life and things to do
Oh yeah, by the way where's the bounty hunter duo? I didn't see their name being mentioned in this chapter
1/24/2021 c6 FallenSage
Although I don’t see him doing anything to luffy I also don’t see him trying to kill him maybe fight him but not kill be mihawk is kind of a friend of shanks
1/24/2021 c6 vilgax
It is a great story I really can't wait for him to enter grand line and for marines to realise cause of all this mess is they themselves
1/24/2021 c6 1XINRS
Are you going to make a reaction from Garp or Luffy's grandfather about Luffy still alive and coming back with that much power?
1/24/2021 c5 Guest
I think this is the time for you to update, it's already Sunday
1/22/2021 c1 Guest
Loving ur story. Cant wait to see the new bounty of the crew. I also love Nami's devil fruit power and wish to see more of it. Man, if other one piece fics can be like this one. I can't wait to see who the navy sends after Luffy and how Luffy will KO the moron. Can't wait for the next update Ben and thank you for a great story.
1/21/2021 c5 bastidaswilliam2005
well i like the fic so far waiting for the next chapter althoug that i miself i am a fan of harem because be realist i don think that no women alone can keep with luffy resistan (if you know what i mean) for the oc if you are gona introduce please make it from another universe for example kimimaro from naruto with the fruit bone bone that alow bone manipulation
1/20/2021 c1 19Syluk
So cringe, oh my goodness. Just because you want the main character to have a tragic past, you don't have to be so over-the-top. Subtlety and mystery in these cases can do wonders for the story.
1/17/2021 c1 TheSoundOfThunderingEngines
The name of his fruit is wrong for what it does. A Limit Limit DF would be able to Limit not break those limits. I think the word you are looking for is Limitless.
1/17/2021 c2 TheSoundOfThunderingEngines
Good plot however really needs editing IE mint should be myth and numerus other things. If you where to write this in google docs and spend sometime editing before posting. It would be more readable. Also don't use caps when a ! would suffice.
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