for Dark Souls: Gods, Men and the Plan that Made Everything Worse4/19 c1 Marquez
continue the story, I'm expecting beyond absolute infinite amounts and number of chapters ad infinitum by next week, chop chop I need more, please continue writing this beyond infinite absolute quantities of years, don't stop, keep it up
continue the story, I'm expecting beyond absolute infinite amounts and number of chapters ad infinitum by next week, chop chop I need more, please continue writing this beyond infinite absolute quantities of years, don't stop, keep it up
4/11 c16 
19CaptainMoonshine
The grass swept back and forth.
Such a joy to read our protagonist somehow manages to find himself in worse and worse situations. I am very curious to see where the story is going and how Kaylen will navigate the tightrope that is Gwynevere.
Flann really must be wondering what Kaylen did to deserve such attention.
19CaptainMoonshineThe grass swept back and forth.
Such a joy to read our protagonist somehow manages to find himself in worse and worse situations. I am very curious to see where the story is going and how Kaylen will navigate the tightrope that is Gwynevere.
Flann really must be wondering what Kaylen did to deserve such attention.
4/10 c16 clinttraper
Okay i just want to say that my opinion on the mc’s actions don’t reflect my enjoyment of the overall story. Despite the mounting frustration ive felt towards him, i still think this is a good fic. I’m eager for the next chapter.
Okay i just want to say that my opinion on the mc’s actions don’t reflect my enjoyment of the overall story. Despite the mounting frustration ive felt towards him, i still think this is a good fic. I’m eager for the next chapter.
4/10 c14 clinttraper
Fuck man, the Gwynevere bipolar attitude of ‘hating bullies’ while treating mc like a slave is so off-putting. With the mind fuckery, i wouldnt be suprised if the mc snaps and slits her throat in the bath.
Fuck man, the Gwynevere bipolar attitude of ‘hating bullies’ while treating mc like a slave is so off-putting. With the mind fuckery, i wouldnt be suprised if the mc snaps and slits her throat in the bath.
4/10 c13 clinttraper
Dude making Kaylen not hold any grudge against Gwynevere and come to terms with her actions so insanely fast feels so wrong. The fact that a man could get over someone literally stepping on their face and then just think, “yeah this is my fault,” before forgiving them, is so stupid. There’s no way i can see mc ever forgive that, especially with the ‘prior slave’-esc background you’ve been hinting at him having. Hell, even i wouldnt be able to take that with a smile and im a lazy af 21st century person with little to no pride near the levels of a medieval fantasy warrior/assassin.
Dude making Kaylen not hold any grudge against Gwynevere and come to terms with her actions so insanely fast feels so wrong. The fact that a man could get over someone literally stepping on their face and then just think, “yeah this is my fault,” before forgiving them, is so stupid. There’s no way i can see mc ever forgive that, especially with the ‘prior slave’-esc background you’ve been hinting at him having. Hell, even i wouldnt be able to take that with a smile and im a lazy af 21st century person with little to no pride near the levels of a medieval fantasy warrior/assassin.
4/10 c9 clinttraper
Fuck man, idk if i can continue reading this. Im not a masochist, idk if i can watching someone get shit on constantly in borderline torture porn. I just cant put myself in the mcs shoes
Fuck man, idk if i can continue reading this. Im not a masochist, idk if i can watching someone get shit on constantly in borderline torture porn. I just cant put myself in the mcs shoes
4/9 c16 Godzilathegoat
awesome sauce and i missed you author
awesome sauce and i missed you author
4/8 c16 5Turquoise Leaf
Oh, look, my crack dealer is back. Let me get my card… I am so excited to see what the deal is with Kaylen. I’ve been edging for years.
5Turquoise LeafOh, look, my crack dealer is back. Let me get my card… I am so excited to see what the deal is with Kaylen. I’ve been edging for years.
4/7 c16 lycnt
Oh thank God you're alive. I missed this story so much that when I saw you updated, I just read the whole thing again.
I know you're partial towards velka, but there's no way you can leave Gwynevere out. She and your OC share a beautiful connection, it's intimate, it's great and it's developing. As I said before, the only good ending is a Kaylen/Velka/Gwynevere romance. (Please! You made me love Gwynevere too much).
Also, for my own sake, I will ignore the height thing you approached this chapter, for me it makes little to no sense in this story. Aside from difficulties in relationships, it makes no sense that Ciaran gave him a 7/10 and a "you'll make some woman really happy" when naked, unless it's from a human perspective.
Anyways, I don't mind the two goddess being taller than him, if it's not by inhuman proportions. Could you please clarify this?
That's all I have to say. Again, thank you for updating, sorry for ranting and please, PLEASE come to the Kaylen/Velka/Gwynevere side.
Oh thank God you're alive. I missed this story so much that when I saw you updated, I just read the whole thing again.
I know you're partial towards velka, but there's no way you can leave Gwynevere out. She and your OC share a beautiful connection, it's intimate, it's great and it's developing. As I said before, the only good ending is a Kaylen/Velka/Gwynevere romance. (Please! You made me love Gwynevere too much).
Also, for my own sake, I will ignore the height thing you approached this chapter, for me it makes little to no sense in this story. Aside from difficulties in relationships, it makes no sense that Ciaran gave him a 7/10 and a "you'll make some woman really happy" when naked, unless it's from a human perspective.
Anyways, I don't mind the two goddess being taller than him, if it's not by inhuman proportions. Could you please clarify this?
That's all I have to say. Again, thank you for updating, sorry for ranting and please, PLEASE come to the Kaylen/Velka/Gwynevere side.
4/6 c16 Soulbow109
Velka doing a bouncing happy jig naked in the water. *nosebleed and thumbs up* Nice gap moe, good job Gamer. Her new outfit sounded really nice too.
Gwynevere acting more cute is nice too. Makes one want to give her more hugs and headpats though not sure if her pride would be happy with it. Comes off a but like a himedere. Also nice touch on showing she knows how to handle the more serious part of her royal job. Loved it.
Kaylen is certainly in an interesting position where he has the attention of 2 goddeses. Really curious to see what kind of rumors and attention this gets him in the future lol. He certainly picked a funny way to get them to not fight. Still I understood the logic, rather then fight each other have them focus on a common iritation lol.
Overall I think you are doing Ok with how the three are interacting with each other. Under different circumstances I think Velka could be seen as overeager, but with Gwynevere there it can be seen as her subconsciously seeing her as competition for Kaylens attention and not wanting to lose what seems to be the first guy to really catch her interest. Even if she seems to look down on Gwynevere she can't deny she got high specs. As for Gwynevere, considering the interaction last chapter and what is told this chapter its not too weird that the two are on much more friendly terms. Heck she said so herself that she wants to understand and explore her current feelings so its not strange that she wants to stay close to Kaylen. Alot of stuff happened in the past but even Kaylen has acknowledged that a good portion was his fault, feels weird to hold a big grudge at this point. Even if for self-preservation purposes he has shown a desire to be on the two womens good side so not too weird for him to continue to try and act friendly. Some could argue that time and place would be better then in front of the Duke (I can see most noble types be pissed if a commoner got more attention then them especially at an event where they are trying to appeal and show off) but Kaylen has shown a talent for forgeting what these kind of high ranking people can do to him so its fine at this point.
Things are getting exciting, looking forward to the action next chapter. Currently most worried about that Lords Blade though. Is she still around observing? if she is wonder if she may try something too?
There is a part that goes "He was expecting Gwynevere to sound so ...well... smart and well learned". i think you meanted 'wasn't' here.
Velka doing a bouncing happy jig naked in the water. *nosebleed and thumbs up* Nice gap moe, good job Gamer. Her new outfit sounded really nice too.
Gwynevere acting more cute is nice too. Makes one want to give her more hugs and headpats though not sure if her pride would be happy with it. Comes off a but like a himedere. Also nice touch on showing she knows how to handle the more serious part of her royal job. Loved it.
Kaylen is certainly in an interesting position where he has the attention of 2 goddeses. Really curious to see what kind of rumors and attention this gets him in the future lol. He certainly picked a funny way to get them to not fight. Still I understood the logic, rather then fight each other have them focus on a common iritation lol.
Overall I think you are doing Ok with how the three are interacting with each other. Under different circumstances I think Velka could be seen as overeager, but with Gwynevere there it can be seen as her subconsciously seeing her as competition for Kaylens attention and not wanting to lose what seems to be the first guy to really catch her interest. Even if she seems to look down on Gwynevere she can't deny she got high specs. As for Gwynevere, considering the interaction last chapter and what is told this chapter its not too weird that the two are on much more friendly terms. Heck she said so herself that she wants to understand and explore her current feelings so its not strange that she wants to stay close to Kaylen. Alot of stuff happened in the past but even Kaylen has acknowledged that a good portion was his fault, feels weird to hold a big grudge at this point. Even if for self-preservation purposes he has shown a desire to be on the two womens good side so not too weird for him to continue to try and act friendly. Some could argue that time and place would be better then in front of the Duke (I can see most noble types be pissed if a commoner got more attention then them especially at an event where they are trying to appeal and show off) but Kaylen has shown a talent for forgeting what these kind of high ranking people can do to him so its fine at this point.
Things are getting exciting, looking forward to the action next chapter. Currently most worried about that Lords Blade though. Is she still around observing? if she is wonder if she may try something too?
There is a part that goes "He was expecting Gwynevere to sound so ...well... smart and well learned". i think you meanted 'wasn't' here.
4/5 c16 Spaceman-7391
Action?! Nooo, give me more lovey dovey stuff!
Jokes aside, think it came out great.
Amazing job.
Action?! Nooo, give me more lovey dovey stuff!
Jokes aside, think it came out great.
Amazing job.
4/5 c16 freddy.lane.1
ooh, suspensfull! Also, is gweny gonna nurse our main man here as a "reward" for his services?
ooh, suspensfull! Also, is gweny gonna nurse our main man here as a "reward" for his services?
4/5 c16 Good little jit
Always good to have another chapter. As for your questions, both Gwynevere and Velka's attractions seem on brand for both of them so far. Kaylen seems a bit more comfortable than usual, normally he seems to be in a constant state of paranoia/worry interlaced with moments of sheer recklessness and audacity; maybe he needs to be knocked down a peg or two.
Otherwise, things are going along swimmingly, good to have you back.
Always good to have another chapter. As for your questions, both Gwynevere and Velka's attractions seem on brand for both of them so far. Kaylen seems a bit more comfortable than usual, normally he seems to be in a constant state of paranoia/worry interlaced with moments of sheer recklessness and audacity; maybe he needs to be knocked down a peg or two.
Otherwise, things are going along swimmingly, good to have you back.
4/5 c16 Zasun
I am so glad you’re back hot damn. I absolutely loved the interactions between all three characters. I feel the pacing of each relationship is going well too, nothing too forced or too fast. Velka is finding someone who can match her and take her at her worst, Gwynevere is finding someone who sees through her facade and both are having appropriate reactions.
Kaylen is just doing his thing. I’m really excited to hear more about HIS life and story. And I especially excited to hear the goddesses reactions to it.
As for the pairing, I’m team Velka. But as a wise lobster man once said, “Why not both?” I’m sure you could find a way for that to be reasonable given how good you are at story telling. But if you want it to be monogamous, then team Velka. With Kaylen being Gywnevere’s first real friend who still likes to tease him.
And Gwendolyn just needs a homie. I think Kaylen can be that homie.
I am so glad you’re back hot damn. I absolutely loved the interactions between all three characters. I feel the pacing of each relationship is going well too, nothing too forced or too fast. Velka is finding someone who can match her and take her at her worst, Gwynevere is finding someone who sees through her facade and both are having appropriate reactions.
Kaylen is just doing his thing. I’m really excited to hear more about HIS life and story. And I especially excited to hear the goddesses reactions to it.
As for the pairing, I’m team Velka. But as a wise lobster man once said, “Why not both?” I’m sure you could find a way for that to be reasonable given how good you are at story telling. But if you want it to be monogamous, then team Velka. With Kaylen being Gywnevere’s first real friend who still likes to tease him.
And Gwendolyn just needs a homie. I think Kaylen can be that homie.