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3/26/2021 c6 Guest
I really love this idea so far and I can’t wait to see what happens next!
3/8/2021 c6 SeleneMoonFall
Good luck on your exams!
2/17/2021 c5 Guest
Seems a lot better already
In this chapter its mainly missing emotional
Anyway, im still hooked
:D
2/17/2021 c4 Guest
Shorter, less intertwined sentences
Also less Repetition f.e. the hellhound
Replace those with raging beast, it, the Monster, the servant of darkness and death etc. Be creative with those!
2/17/2021 c3 Guest
Tip for this chappy: write more about thee feelings of characters! Makes it feel less rushed and they seem much more realistic
:)
2/17/2021 c2 Guest
I alsow recommend more Backstory, as well as using Line Breaks more! If you can, read through the chapter one more time after finishing to find mistakes and repetitions.
Anyway, still love this!
2/17/2021 c1 Guest
Just a Tip: practice punctuation, it makes everything youe write seem so much more realistic and Professional. Also, dont rush fights or plot please.
Anyway, for a first Story, this is great!
We will watch your career with great interest.
2/17/2021 c5 3PercyJackson'sWorstNightmare
Nice :) It's really good
2/11/2021 c4 SeleneMoonFall
From what I read so far, it's an amazing story! I hope you update soon!
2/9/2021 c1 AVWPD5033B
sick story i love it so much
2/9/2021 c4 1OURcade
This seems interesting, I'm excited to see where the story goes!
2/3/2021 c3 AangPotterJackson
This is absolutely amazing but u should proof read it bc alot of punctuation is kinda missing. Also if u live in India I'm ur neighbor... if countries were neighbors that is
2/1/2021 c2 Boiboi
When u gonna update
2/3/2021 c3 RageSage
Great chapter man, can't wait for the next one!
1/30/2021 c2 Boi
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