for A King's Path11/27 c34 
1Finnspa23
Damn! Glad you're re-writing. I did like the idea of Hedwig being a Pheonix so hopefully that carries over
1Finnspa23Damn! Glad you're re-writing. I did like the idea of Hedwig being a Pheonix so hopefully that carries over
11/27 c30 Finnspa23
"You'll see when we get there." said Moody cryptically, "We'll be taking brooms - you're still too young to apparate, we can't safely use the Floo Network, and we'd be fools to try and set up an unauthorized portkey in a muggle area."
"It shouldn't be a problem for you." said Kingsley, a dark skinned wizard in the back, "We saw you during the first task, you should be fine."
Harry used one spell durring the first task to make chains... not sure what Kingsley is implying here haha. Regardless, I've been thoroughly enjoying this story!
"You'll see when we get there." said Moody cryptically, "We'll be taking brooms - you're still too young to apparate, we can't safely use the Floo Network, and we'd be fools to try and set up an unauthorized portkey in a muggle area."
"It shouldn't be a problem for you." said Kingsley, a dark skinned wizard in the back, "We saw you during the first task, you should be fine."
Harry used one spell durring the first task to make chains... not sure what Kingsley is implying here haha. Regardless, I've been thoroughly enjoying this story!
10/27 c8 Animeworld2.0
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10/23 c1 dixonjason403
id complain about how pointless this chapter is and how its a waste of time to just repeat his canon backstory 100%, but i guess you DID warn us that the first few chapters were complete ass.
id complain about how pointless this chapter is and how its a waste of time to just repeat his canon backstory 100%, but i guess you DID warn us that the first few chapters were complete ass.
10/13 c31 ItzJoe
why hasn't harry been emancipated yet? he should have already been via the tournament, the contract clearly stated he had to take part, yet it also stated that only an of age which or wizard was able to compete, therefore he is automatically emancipated and considered of age, meeting the requirements to claim his lordship, and vaults, i understand dumbles keeping it from him but it is something that salazar should've picked up straight away
why hasn't harry been emancipated yet? he should have already been via the tournament, the contract clearly stated he had to take part, yet it also stated that only an of age which or wizard was able to compete, therefore he is automatically emancipated and considered of age, meeting the requirements to claim his lordship, and vaults, i understand dumbles keeping it from him but it is something that salazar should've picked up straight away
9/25 c34 beloved of naruto
I'm glad to see that this fic isn't being abandoned in it's entirety. I read the entire thing in less than two days finishing at approximately 9:00 A.M. If original fic is this freaking good already I can hardly wait to see how the new revamped version will turn out. Good luck with your writing.
I'm glad to see that this fic isn't being abandoned in it's entirety. I read the entire thing in less than two days finishing at approximately 9:00 A.M. If original fic is this freaking good already I can hardly wait to see how the new revamped version will turn out. Good luck with your writing.
9/13 c31 oldpotato
Harry gets offended at Rita posting false and offensive things towards him in the newspaper so he finds a plan to blackmail her, and it was not for Fleur's sake at the time either as they barely knew each other. Half a year later, other people post false and offensive things towards him in the newspaper, but he doesn't seemingly care, even though now he has a way to fight back through Rita Skeeter.
Additionally, he spends 27,000 galleons to buy a book by Herpo the Foul on Horcruxes, but then doesn't read it. Yet goes into the Black library to read about Horcruxes instead.
There's just too many inconsistencies with this plot.
Harry gets offended at Rita posting false and offensive things towards him in the newspaper so he finds a plan to blackmail her, and it was not for Fleur's sake at the time either as they barely knew each other. Half a year later, other people post false and offensive things towards him in the newspaper, but he doesn't seemingly care, even though now he has a way to fight back through Rita Skeeter.
Additionally, he spends 27,000 galleons to buy a book by Herpo the Foul on Horcruxes, but then doesn't read it. Yet goes into the Black library to read about Horcruxes instead.
There's just too many inconsistencies with this plot.
9/13 c27 oldpotato
Exposition is great, writing style fine, detailing very solid, characterization great.
But your plot seriously is unsatisfying. All this extra training with one of the greatest wizards of all time, all the dueling, all the studying, yet literally nothing changed. Fleur is supposed to be similar power to Bellatrix Lestrange but she still gets caught off guard to a quidditch fanatic, albeit under the imperious. Harry still somehow ties Cedric with the cup, despite having so much more training and Cedric (by your own words) being been the least formidable competitor. Cedric still dies. Harry still gets caught. Harry still is forced to duel, he's still forced to bow, despite all the Occlumency training. Fudge still doesn't believe him. The year ends in exactly the same way despite you spending 20 chapters focusing on all this training with Salazar Slytherin. You spent all this time making Hedwig into a phoenix just to negate that point with the 3 word copout of anti-phoenix wards.
Not to mention, all this focus on emphasizing that he's not as strong as Fleur, he's not as strong as Dumbledoor, he's not as strong as Voldemort. Essentially all you've managed to change is a relationship between Harry and Fleur, which is great with how you've written it, but still.
Exposition is great, writing style fine, detailing very solid, characterization great.
But your plot seriously is unsatisfying. All this extra training with one of the greatest wizards of all time, all the dueling, all the studying, yet literally nothing changed. Fleur is supposed to be similar power to Bellatrix Lestrange but she still gets caught off guard to a quidditch fanatic, albeit under the imperious. Harry still somehow ties Cedric with the cup, despite having so much more training and Cedric (by your own words) being been the least formidable competitor. Cedric still dies. Harry still gets caught. Harry still is forced to duel, he's still forced to bow, despite all the Occlumency training. Fudge still doesn't believe him. The year ends in exactly the same way despite you spending 20 chapters focusing on all this training with Salazar Slytherin. You spent all this time making Hedwig into a phoenix just to negate that point with the 3 word copout of anti-phoenix wards.
Not to mention, all this focus on emphasizing that he's not as strong as Fleur, he's not as strong as Dumbledoor, he's not as strong as Voldemort. Essentially all you've managed to change is a relationship between Harry and Fleur, which is great with how you've written it, but still.
9/12 c4 Alice Scarlett Knabel
in some fanfiction they talk about how the elves need the bond or they die that doesn't mean they shouldn't be treated like family however
in some fanfiction they talk about how the elves need the bond or they die that doesn't mean they shouldn't be treated like family however
9/2 c34 6Jestrbob
It would be best if you amended the 1st chapter with this note.
I have enjoyed watching your writing improve over time. My writing has improved over the years. I did a major rewrite of my 1st story. I have a second arc of another tale that is ready to release. I have three other stories being considered for publication in paper book format.
Good luck with you writing.
6JestrbobIt would be best if you amended the 1st chapter with this note.
I have enjoyed watching your writing improve over time. My writing has improved over the years. I did a major rewrite of my 1st story. I have a second arc of another tale that is ready to release. I have three other stories being considered for publication in paper book format.
Good luck with you writing.