for A King's Path5/26 c26 Guest
Damn bro so we just following the exact same plot but sprinkling in a filler relationship in the middle huh
Damn bro so we just following the exact same plot but sprinkling in a filler relationship in the middle huh
5/16 c24 taraygosse
While I agree, why does Cedric HAVE to be a fixed point?... It's not fair! Lol tantrum over, greatly enjoying this read
While I agree, why does Cedric HAVE to be a fixed point?... It's not fair! Lol tantrum over, greatly enjoying this read
4/8 c2 
3Charlee56
Common mistake re: travellings from Suburban Surrey to London; the Underground doesn't go that far. One must take the suburban (or "regional") railway. That would leave one at Kings' Cross, and from there one would then take the Underground.
3Charlee56Common mistake re: travellings from Suburban Surrey to London; the Underground doesn't go that far. One must take the suburban (or "regional") railway. That would leave one at Kings' Cross, and from there one would then take the Underground.
3/27 c34 mumphie
Sad that you abandoned this. I saw that you have a 'new', improved version started. I shall look at it. It's only at ch. 19 now, though.
I o like inheritance rituals, and don't consider them trite or a cliché, after all, some things just must be done. What IS cliché, I think, is when he is the heir to a dozen fortunes. ;)
I have been enjoying this story, so I hope your improvements are good and that you will keep your mojo and continue on. :)
Sad that you abandoned this. I saw that you have a 'new', improved version started. I shall look at it. It's only at ch. 19 now, though.
I o like inheritance rituals, and don't consider them trite or a cliché, after all, some things just must be done. What IS cliché, I think, is when he is the heir to a dozen fortunes. ;)
I have been enjoying this story, so I hope your improvements are good and that you will keep your mojo and continue on. :)
3/27 c25 mumphie
Biting my nails in sad anticipation worrying about Hedwig. Will she survive his momentary death?
Biting my nails in sad anticipation worrying about Hedwig. Will she survive his momentary death?
3/26 c19 mumphie
"...she had many things about the Boy-Who-Lived..." - heard many things
"...Dumbledore gently one of the two names aloud..." - said?
"...she had many things about the Boy-Who-Lived..." - heard many things
"...Dumbledore gently one of the two names aloud..." - said?
3/25 c13 mumphie
Just a couple of oops. Unusual for this story.
"...Rita quickly hid behind one of the many shacks." - shrubs? bushes?
"...bowels of French dishes..." - bowls
Just a couple of oops. Unusual for this story.
"...Rita quickly hid behind one of the many shacks." - shrubs? bushes?
"...bowels of French dishes..." - bowls
2/15 c3 Mutant Ascension
I really don't understand why you keep having Harry compare himself to Voldemort? Why would Harry care about what the man who murdered his parents And have tried to kill him repeatedly, used to look like or how handsome he was or whatever? In their first encounter in second year he tried to manipulate Harry, in their second encounter they had a fight to the death which Harry won. Where in that do you see any kind of interaction that would result in Harry remotely wanting to compare himself to this man? the only thing Harry would think about when it comes to voldemort is how to kill him once and for all.
I really don't understand why you keep having Harry compare himself to Voldemort? Why would Harry care about what the man who murdered his parents And have tried to kill him repeatedly, used to look like or how handsome he was or whatever? In their first encounter in second year he tried to manipulate Harry, in their second encounter they had a fight to the death which Harry won. Where in that do you see any kind of interaction that would result in Harry remotely wanting to compare himself to this man? the only thing Harry would think about when it comes to voldemort is how to kill him once and for all.
1/12 c25 kawasaki1298
you made all the work you wrote in look like nothing. Voldemort came back damn near exactly like cannon lol. The only difference is you just used someone elses blood when harry could have used them oh so special powers you wrote in to escape already! Truly a tragic telling about this event truly unimpressed here!
you made all the work you wrote in look like nothing. Voldemort came back damn near exactly like cannon lol. The only difference is you just used someone elses blood when harry could have used them oh so special powers you wrote in to escape already! Truly a tragic telling about this event truly unimpressed here!
1/6 c30 Anton Vlasov
Автор ты конченный, если бы ты знал мир Поттерианы ты написал все как надо, но я не понимаю нахрен на лезть туда где ты не разбираешься. В турнире могу участвовать совершенно летние и если Гарри в нем участвует он автоматически становится взрослым и без надлежащей опеки над ним. Почему он не пошёл в банк к гоблинам а? Салазвр должен ему об этом сказать. И мы читаем теперь бред чистой воды где происходит суд. Молодец обосрались мы знатно.
Автор ты конченный, если бы ты знал мир Поттерианы ты написал все как надо, но я не понимаю нахрен на лезть туда где ты не разбираешься. В турнире могу участвовать совершенно летние и если Гарри в нем участвует он автоматически становится взрослым и без надлежащей опеки над ним. Почему он не пошёл в банк к гоблинам а? Салазвр должен ему об этом сказать. И мы читаем теперь бред чистой воды где происходит суд. Молодец обосрались мы знатно.