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Interesting premise.

I'm more of an Eliot fan or a team as family, heavy on the Eliot role, fan, but I'll check for your Friday updates and see what happens.

It was a bit of a difficult read, but as I'm using a translator program, I think that can be expected. One thing, though, is that you should really have two spaces between paragraphs, rather than making a *huge* paragraph out of a bunch of smaller ones. For instance, the very last paragraph here in the second chapter is fine, but the massive paragraph right before it should actually be 6 paragraphs; should be a new paragraph for each new speaker. The longer, run on paragraphs makes it very daunting to read.

Thanks for posting!

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