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8/6/2021 c9 scyfly
i do believe one had to keep eye contact with a hippogryph.

turning a rock into a javelin and banishing it into the mouth of the dragon when it is gonna breathe fire
throwing a rocking with a delayed enlargement charm into its mouth
binding its mouth shut and choke it with a bag over its head.
tie its feet and tail to the ground with transfiguration.

truly killing a dragon is not that hard, much like taking on a crockodile: their muscles are only strong in a certain direction and without momentum or leverage they are screwed.
8/5/2021 c8 G silently
you could make the harry/fleur romance happen since distance wouldn't be a problem *points at house elves*
8/5/2021 c1 raf.athenaphone
i am truly a fan your work, and this story is not an exception, hope to read more of this soon and thank you for the update
8/5/2021 c8 1mir19
I think you uploaded the same chaper
8/5/2021 c2 LordOfWinter001
Your dialogue needs work man. It hasn't gotten to the point where it's cringy yet, but it's still pretty bad.

Go watch the movies or reread the books. Look at how they use dialogue when two characters are speaking to each other. It sounds realistic, it sounds like something an 11, 12, 13, etc year old would say. Now go and read your dialogue out loud to yourself and tell me if it sounds good. This isn't how 14 year olds talk man. It sounds to me like you put way too much effort in trying to craft the "perfect" dialogue. It comes off as unnatural and weird.
8/5/2021 c8 untoldpleasure
I could have sworn I read this chapter before... was the update a new chapter or had you made some edits?
8/5/2021 c1 ScientistXXXX
Mc is a idiot by the way ROB is a god you can't just kill that not without becoming a god or a god level or even higher power level being yourself
8/5/2021 c9 JohnMonty
Will you no longer be posting The Lion Cub on FanFiction then? Hope that's not the case!
8/5/2021 c9 Doctor Doofenshmirtz
Ah.. you became pay-to-read... Great!
8/5/2021 c1 1Archonstine
So, are all future chapters going to be on Patreon?
8/1/2021 c8 PappyOldGuy
Interesting and (well enough written in my opinion) a very good story. I like it, I like it a lot! It seems to be meshing the realities quite well, and I can hardly wait to read more from you. I do know this, when someone who is not the creator of a character, writes about them, it is to have them do something that the creator doesn't want to or didn't think of. I know that I always think of my favorite characters doing things, I have never read of in books or seen them doing in movies. I think it is fantastic that others (here in "FanFiction") are actually writing their stories of what they want them to do in a "What If" world. For those who complain that the characters would not do this or that, forget them. You need to write this first for yourself, and then for the rest of us who do enjoy your take on what just might, could, should, would and probability (if a frog had wings, his ass wouldn't bump the ground nearly so often) can happen. I do know this as well, I am enjoying it and will follow such stories as long as you will write them. Also, do NOT feel pushed to post, sometimes the words and thoughts just flow and sometimes you have to cogitate for a bit. Just learn to let them grow at their own pace and those of us who appreciate them will be here to read them when they are posted.

Thank you so much for sharing.
8/1/2021 c1 PappyOldGuy
An intriguing start to what promises to be a good story. I have read quite a number of "FanFiction" stories, and many have been enjoyable. It looks like it will likely take a few chapters to get all your main characters and store line fleshed out, but with the hints provided I like where I see this going.

Thanks for sharing!
8/1/2021 c8 anish38kumar
Please keep on updating more.
Where were you author.
7/28/2021 c8 Mastersgtjames
Pretty cringy whenever the MC spouts one of his metaphors or some random reference, like Janus. just does not fit the story/character and makes you stop and be like... what!?
7/28/2021 c7 Mastersgtjames
MC should get Skeeter started on that Dumbledore story, Life and Lies of Albus Dumbledore. Maybe have her expose him as a "dark lord".
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