for The King's Blade7/15/2021 c2 
3Sir Cookie
lemon porn scene
lime echi
This terminology was more practical when was way more strict in deleting stories based on lewd scenes, and these words were used to censor the summaries while still letting people know what was the up and up.
Also, interesting story.
3Sir Cookielemon porn scene
lime echi
This terminology was more practical when was way more strict in deleting stories based on lewd scenes, and these words were used to censor the summaries while still letting people know what was the up and up.
Also, interesting story.
7/12/2021 c3 chemiczen
I like it...? Kind of. Huh, I didn't expect that. Reading chapter 1, I thought this would just be another story written solely for the author's self-indulgent wish fulfillment. But no, the characters are actually being developed properly so far. That's a pleasant surprise. I especially like the heartwarming moments between Emiya and Nyx. Author seems to favor Claudette, but hopefully there will still be some more Emiya/Nyx going forward. I really like those two.
The stuff with Pride. I don't find it as cringey as the other reviewers. However, I think it does feel a little out of place. I wasn't expecting another appearance past the prologue. Not a big issue though. For now, I don't mind it. Maybe that's because I recently finished rewatching Carnival Phantasm, and I see Pride as a parody character, much like the anthropomorphized corrupt holy grail (Grail/Sehai-kun).
The lemons. Nothing stellar. A little too vanilla for me. I still think it's a good addition though, and that's because, in this case, there's some character development added to them; not just lemons for the sake of lemons. I hope future lemons will be just as useful to the story.
Other complaints? The usual: grammar (although passable) sometimes makes me pause, and the last update date is giving me the 'will it, or will it not, be abandoned' anxiety. Feel free to ignore the latter. I was just rambling. It's something I'm used to by now, so no pressure.
Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us!
P.S. I disagree with Pyromania101. I think Archer can be just as, if not more interesting. For me, it's always fascinating to see how fanfic writers develop Archer's character in their stories. I wouldn't count him out for comedy either. Check 'The Hill of Swords' (yes, it's Shirou, but he's more like a psuedo-Archer). The 'harem', the comedy, the ideals, it all works really well in that story.
And minor correction: Archer isn't wittier. Archer is Shirou, but without the filters. If you played the VN, you'd see Shirou's thoughts are similar to Archer. Shirou just chooses to not express them verbally.
I like it...? Kind of. Huh, I didn't expect that. Reading chapter 1, I thought this would just be another story written solely for the author's self-indulgent wish fulfillment. But no, the characters are actually being developed properly so far. That's a pleasant surprise. I especially like the heartwarming moments between Emiya and Nyx. Author seems to favor Claudette, but hopefully there will still be some more Emiya/Nyx going forward. I really like those two.
The stuff with Pride. I don't find it as cringey as the other reviewers. However, I think it does feel a little out of place. I wasn't expecting another appearance past the prologue. Not a big issue though. For now, I don't mind it. Maybe that's because I recently finished rewatching Carnival Phantasm, and I see Pride as a parody character, much like the anthropomorphized corrupt holy grail (Grail/Sehai-kun).
The lemons. Nothing stellar. A little too vanilla for me. I still think it's a good addition though, and that's because, in this case, there's some character development added to them; not just lemons for the sake of lemons. I hope future lemons will be just as useful to the story.
Other complaints? The usual: grammar (although passable) sometimes makes me pause, and the last update date is giving me the 'will it, or will it not, be abandoned' anxiety. Feel free to ignore the latter. I was just rambling. It's something I'm used to by now, so no pressure.
Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us!
P.S. I disagree with Pyromania101. I think Archer can be just as, if not more interesting. For me, it's always fascinating to see how fanfic writers develop Archer's character in their stories. I wouldn't count him out for comedy either. Check 'The Hill of Swords' (yes, it's Shirou, but he's more like a psuedo-Archer). The 'harem', the comedy, the ideals, it all works really well in that story.
And minor correction: Archer isn't wittier. Archer is Shirou, but without the filters. If you played the VN, you'd see Shirou's thoughts are similar to Archer. Shirou just chooses to not express them verbally.
6/16/2021 c1 Guest
Hmm that was long winded and would have been boring but I was entertained by the choice of Emiya and the siutation. Though more accuratley it might have been how you had everything play out, well done!
Hmm that was long winded and would have been boring but I was entertained by the choice of Emiya and the siutation. Though more accuratley it might have been how you had everything play out, well done!
5/22/2021 c3 deltadragon373
It always sucks when good fics like these have so much wait in between the next chapters. This is a very good fic. I look forward to the next chapter when you eventually get around to it.
It always sucks when good fics like these have so much wait in between the next chapters. This is a very good fic. I look forward to the next chapter when you eventually get around to it.
5/14/2021 c3 5Pyromania101
This is a good concept, and I always enjoy seeing (well, reading) Nyx being thrown a bone or two. However, this story has one element-I can't even call it a problem because it technically isn't one-that I can't get over, and it's a big one: I wish you'd used "regular" Shirou instead of Archer. Now, a friend of mine pointed out that, between the two, Archer is wittier, and he is; but with the kind of world Gainos is, I personally believe that... I guess Fate!Shirou would befit it more since he's used to living with beautiful women. *Sigh* I honestly can't think of a good way of explaining this, which is why I don't think it deserves to be called a problem, but in the end, your decision to make Archer the protagonist instead of Shirou limits the comedy potential for me. Plus there's the whole values dissonance: I'd love to see Shirou try to impart his beliefs onto this barbaric world, rather than see the bitter and jaded Archer refuse to be what he used to want to be. Again, though, that's a matter of personal tastes.
Makes sense? No? Yeah, I'm not too sure it does, either. I did say I can't think of a good way to explain my feelings about this, after all.
5Pyromania101This is a good concept, and I always enjoy seeing (well, reading) Nyx being thrown a bone or two. However, this story has one element-I can't even call it a problem because it technically isn't one-that I can't get over, and it's a big one: I wish you'd used "regular" Shirou instead of Archer. Now, a friend of mine pointed out that, between the two, Archer is wittier, and he is; but with the kind of world Gainos is, I personally believe that... I guess Fate!Shirou would befit it more since he's used to living with beautiful women. *Sigh* I honestly can't think of a good way of explaining this, which is why I don't think it deserves to be called a problem, but in the end, your decision to make Archer the protagonist instead of Shirou limits the comedy potential for me. Plus there's the whole values dissonance: I'd love to see Shirou try to impart his beliefs onto this barbaric world, rather than see the bitter and jaded Archer refuse to be what he used to want to be. Again, though, that's a matter of personal tastes.
Makes sense? No? Yeah, I'm not too sure it does, either. I did say I can't think of a good way to explain my feelings about this, after all.
5/10/2021 c2 26The Jingo
If I had to suggest a lemon improvement it would be to use more "dirty" words.
Cunt, pussy, quim, ect rather than just vagina
26The JingoIf I had to suggest a lemon improvement it would be to use more "dirty" words.
Cunt, pussy, quim, ect rather than just vagina
5/9/2021 c3 B099
I just hope that you don't overuse the smut/lemons in every single chapter, two times in one is fine mybe three but 5 to 7? Nope. Many used the porn parts as the main attraction in ther ff making them monotone predictible and boring as f without any plot whatsoever. I have read your other ff and I really line what I am reading and I sse the potential in this one two since we don't have goog enough ff of queens blade in the crossover area, with all the potential it has.
So please, dont do the same mistake many people to with ffs and fill them all with nothing but sex, sex, and sex every single chapter, please! Sorry for the rant but one ff that I read long time ago start very goog and interesting only to no just ruined tbe characters but also make it into a fuckfest litterally with the talking about how slepts with the mc and tbe mc been a drama queen somtimes and a racist.
I just could standed.
Thats why I dont want this one to end like that after a very good start man. Thats what sacres me the most. Been disapointed with another ff using porn as click and bait as the main reason for the story to exist.
Thank you for reading and bering this rant of mine and keep creating very entertaining ff as always.
P.S. The lemons you make here are both erotic and hearthwarming. Thats something that I like the most when a new harem girl is now include and the showing the fluffy and cute moments between the girls and emiya without it been always been in the sex department. Just remember to not overuse it like many others to and use it whenever is truely necesary man.
Adios.
I just hope that you don't overuse the smut/lemons in every single chapter, two times in one is fine mybe three but 5 to 7? Nope. Many used the porn parts as the main attraction in ther ff making them monotone predictible and boring as f without any plot whatsoever. I have read your other ff and I really line what I am reading and I sse the potential in this one two since we don't have goog enough ff of queens blade in the crossover area, with all the potential it has.
So please, dont do the same mistake many people to with ffs and fill them all with nothing but sex, sex, and sex every single chapter, please! Sorry for the rant but one ff that I read long time ago start very goog and interesting only to no just ruined tbe characters but also make it into a fuckfest litterally with the talking about how slepts with the mc and tbe mc been a drama queen somtimes and a racist.
I just could standed.
Thats why I dont want this one to end like that after a very good start man. Thats what sacres me the most. Been disapointed with another ff using porn as click and bait as the main reason for the story to exist.
Thank you for reading and bering this rant of mine and keep creating very entertaining ff as always.
P.S. The lemons you make here are both erotic and hearthwarming. Thats something that I like the most when a new harem girl is now include and the showing the fluffy and cute moments between the girls and emiya without it been always been in the sex department. Just remember to not overuse it like many others to and use it whenever is truely necesary man.
Adios.
5/9/2021 c1 2Maelaeran
As far as meta-jokes and fourth wall breaks go, this was much less painful and cringy than it could have been. So, good job!
2MaelaeranAs far as meta-jokes and fourth wall breaks go, this was much less painful and cringy than it could have been. So, good job!
5/6/2021 c3 10Primordial Inscriptor Z-09
This was more fluff than smut, but considering how needy Claudette was, it was good scene in any case
10Primordial Inscriptor Z-09This was more fluff than smut, but considering how needy Claudette was, it was good scene in any case