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22Kingdark
Hi,
We're almost three years later, and I do have a few things to say. I really liked the first and second story and I liked this one as well, but I do have a few observations. Firstly, it's fine to do a filler, but this is an entire chapter about food and conversation. I started skipping ahead when the scene just went on and on and on and I basically skipped nearly halve of this chapter.
The writing quality is a bit less in this story overall though. I can't quite put my finger on it, but it's like, in the other two stories, you wrote the chapters, then went over them twice, just to catch as many typo's as possible. But with this story, I've gt the impression, you wrote the chapter and then only went over it once and in a hurry at that.
I'm also beginning to think that you're losing or perhaps 'forgetting' is the better word, the theme of the story. Earlier, Harry kidnapped a cook, so he could have a chance to work there and then he killed what's essentially an innocent civilian? Something was said about the hospital, but there were no other scenes about it, nor was it referenced again, so I'm not even sure if that nameless character is dead or not.
Grammar and spelling wise there isn't much I can criticize. Your punctuation is a bit lacking here and there. I noticed placed that lack a question mark or a period or insert whatever here enough to be noticeable.
Either way, these points aren't enough to make me stop reading though, so if and hopefully when you post something else, I'll be right there, reading it.
Kingdark.
22KingdarkHi,
We're almost three years later, and I do have a few things to say. I really liked the first and second story and I liked this one as well, but I do have a few observations. Firstly, it's fine to do a filler, but this is an entire chapter about food and conversation. I started skipping ahead when the scene just went on and on and on and I basically skipped nearly halve of this chapter.
The writing quality is a bit less in this story overall though. I can't quite put my finger on it, but it's like, in the other two stories, you wrote the chapters, then went over them twice, just to catch as many typo's as possible. But with this story, I've gt the impression, you wrote the chapter and then only went over it once and in a hurry at that.
I'm also beginning to think that you're losing or perhaps 'forgetting' is the better word, the theme of the story. Earlier, Harry kidnapped a cook, so he could have a chance to work there and then he killed what's essentially an innocent civilian? Something was said about the hospital, but there were no other scenes about it, nor was it referenced again, so I'm not even sure if that nameless character is dead or not.
Grammar and spelling wise there isn't much I can criticize. Your punctuation is a bit lacking here and there. I noticed placed that lack a question mark or a period or insert whatever here enough to be noticeable.
Either way, these points aren't enough to make me stop reading though, so if and hopefully when you post something else, I'll be right there, reading it.
Kingdark.
1/7 c12 Guest
It's a shame 3 years later no follow up. Hope author is aight.
It's a shame 3 years later no follow up. Hope author is aight.
12/22/2024 c12 Vemyr Kycil
I am exceedingly sad that this story hasn't been updated in a long time. Honestly, it's my favorite D&D-adjacent fanfic (Harry Potter or otherwise) hands down, and I really hope the author comes back to this someday
I am exceedingly sad that this story hasn't been updated in a long time. Honestly, it's my favorite D&D-adjacent fanfic (Harry Potter or otherwise) hands down, and I really hope the author comes back to this someday
11/10/2024 c4 avigor
If I ever write my own magical America I am going to mix yours with Power of Paranoia, say that after the X-Men came out a school was attempted and after it floundered the founders then shifted into doing magical summer camps that only magic aware people can go to so magic can be done openly including supervised experimentation opportunities, self-study resources are made available, a variety of magical and normal games and sports are held to facilitate practice for interested parties,mand workshops are held on a variety of magical traditions and techniques in addition to more normal stuff like shop crafts and survival classes.
If I ever write my own magical America I am going to mix yours with Power of Paranoia, say that after the X-Men came out a school was attempted and after it floundered the founders then shifted into doing magical summer camps that only magic aware people can go to so magic can be done openly including supervised experimentation opportunities, self-study resources are made available, a variety of magical and normal games and sports are held to facilitate practice for interested parties,mand workshops are held on a variety of magical traditions and techniques in addition to more normal stuff like shop crafts and survival classes.
11/1/2024 c12 1RegularReplacement
I hope that one day you will continue this series. I love the how the characters are working in the gig economy and making a profit from it.
1RegularReplacementI hope that one day you will continue this series. I love the how the characters are working in the gig economy and making a profit from it.
10/6/2024 c12 SilentCritter
I just wanted to say that I really love this series (just finished my third or fourth read-through). I hope you come back to it some day...
I just wanted to say that I really love this series (just finished my third or fourth read-through). I hope you come back to it some day...
8/14/2024 c12 EvelynnSylph
I really like this story, it's very good, nice and interesting. The foreign magical culture is very interesting and cool. I'm actually really curious as to how Harry will do in Ancient Runes, if he takes it, and how surprised people will be at how good he is with it.
Also, I'm very curious about the Asian magical culture
I really like this story, it's very good, nice and interesting. The foreign magical culture is very interesting and cool. I'm actually really curious as to how Harry will do in Ancient Runes, if he takes it, and how surprised people will be at how good he is with it.
Also, I'm very curious about the Asian magical culture
8/4/2024 c12 Guest
I have hope you will one day return, I just hope it won't be another 2 or more years before you do.
I have hope you will one day return, I just hope it won't be another 2 or more years before you do.
5/27/2024 c12 2CMVreud
You really go all out with your descriptions, eh?
I mean I just ate but my mouth is watering again.
Good for the story, bad for the plot, a pity they're fillers, ex ergo a long side-quest.
2CMVreudYou really go all out with your descriptions, eh?
I mean I just ate but my mouth is watering again.
Good for the story, bad for the plot, a pity they're fillers, ex ergo a long side-quest.
5/27/2024 c5 CMVreud
You know, reading Harry buying a house in disguise...
...I just had this wonder idea of him buyinh an old house and only using it for relaxation. The cover being them of an oooold money family and beeing a bit cooky, a bit spooky and hamming it up like Camelot in Monty Pythons 'holy grail', they're the Addams family.
Sorry I could not resist.
You know, reading Harry buying a house in disguise...
...I just had this wonder idea of him buyinh an old house and only using it for relaxation. The cover being them of an oooold money family and beeing a bit cooky, a bit spooky and hamming it up like Camelot in Monty Pythons 'holy grail', they're the Addams family.
Sorry I could not resist.
5/27/2024 c10 CMVreud
For an infinisely small moment, as I read 'a pair of horns', for that small moment I really thought you'd go with the joke and make it a crumple-horned snorcack.
For an infinisely small moment, as I read 'a pair of horns', for that small moment I really thought you'd go with the joke and make it a crumple-horned snorcack.
5/27/2024 c7 CMVreud
I hope you come back to the two lovebirds that propably are a triangle. Because Ngo could have loved them both but seeing their budding love for another she sacrificed her luck/happyness so that these two could get together.
I hope you come back to the two lovebirds that propably are a triangle. Because Ngo could have loved them both but seeing their budding love for another she sacrificed her luck/happyness so that these two could get together.
5/26/2024 c1 CMVreud
Hmmmmmmm~
"Superpowers", eh?
Please stay with magic instead of some sort of super-cross-cross-over.
Hmmmmmmm~
"Superpowers", eh?
Please stay with magic instead of some sort of super-cross-cross-over.