for Born to Darkness, Ascend to Light8/3/2021 c10 RabbidChimp
Awesome chapter! I love the fight with Yama and the fact that you didn't make Ichigo crazy OP. It seems that you've taken the fact that he's not using 1/3 of his soul and kept his total power at believable levels. So kudos for that.
Also, the foreshadowing with Unohana. Ichigo being 'too much like Zaraki'. If only he was a few centuries older. Lol god I hope you add her to the list!
I'm loving this story, keep up the fantastic work! Update soon!
Awesome chapter! I love the fight with Yama and the fact that you didn't make Ichigo crazy OP. It seems that you've taken the fact that he's not using 1/3 of his soul and kept his total power at believable levels. So kudos for that.
Also, the foreshadowing with Unohana. Ichigo being 'too much like Zaraki'. If only he was a few centuries older. Lol god I hope you add her to the list!
I'm loving this story, keep up the fantastic work! Update soon!
8/3/2021 c10 
4Antex-The Legendary Zoroark
HOT DANG! This was AWESOME! I enjoyed it! Definitely enjoyed how Ichigo was enjoying his battle with Yamamoto similar to how Hollow Zangetsu usually does with his fights! Not only that, loved how Ichigo taunted said Head Captain about his own arrogance and beat him! WICKED!
I am SO looking forward to the next chapter!
4Antex-The Legendary ZoroarkHOT DANG! This was AWESOME! I enjoyed it! Definitely enjoyed how Ichigo was enjoying his battle with Yamamoto similar to how Hollow Zangetsu usually does with his fights! Not only that, loved how Ichigo taunted said Head Captain about his own arrogance and beat him! WICKED!
I am SO looking forward to the next chapter!
8/3/2021 c10 2Mo Eazy
The thing about the Quincy attacking the Gotei 13 is that they had all the advantages. The relative curb stomp that took place in canon was completely appropriate. They had the element of surprise, massive amounts of intelligence and years of preparation and planning.
Frankly I think things should have been a bit worse for the Shinigami, if the Sternwritter didn’t fuck around so much. Then again, Shounen, so nobody “gets serious” until a few hours. Or they “get serious” multiple times, which is my favorite. God that is the dumbest.
I do feel like Ichigo outdoors have stopped screwing around or got more emotional about losing his comrades. Not to say it might have distracted him from his goals but still, his new family you know. How many of those Quincy would be alive if he put that speed to use?
No real other issues or opinions I guess. Just kind of confirming that you weren’t unfair to the Shinigami, you were actually more fair, considering all the advantages the Quincy had.
2Mo EazyThe thing about the Quincy attacking the Gotei 13 is that they had all the advantages. The relative curb stomp that took place in canon was completely appropriate. They had the element of surprise, massive amounts of intelligence and years of preparation and planning.
Frankly I think things should have been a bit worse for the Shinigami, if the Sternwritter didn’t fuck around so much. Then again, Shounen, so nobody “gets serious” until a few hours. Or they “get serious” multiple times, which is my favorite. God that is the dumbest.
I do feel like Ichigo outdoors have stopped screwing around or got more emotional about losing his comrades. Not to say it might have distracted him from his goals but still, his new family you know. How many of those Quincy would be alive if he put that speed to use?
No real other issues or opinions I guess. Just kind of confirming that you weren’t unfair to the Shinigami, you were actually more fair, considering all the advantages the Quincy had.
7/29/2021 c9 15Ryojin
I can't wait for the next chapter. I like that it is a more realistic depiction of a war. That you didn't make the Soul Reapers comically evil but showed how both sides saw themselves in the right and they both have people willing to go too far to prove it rather than being black and white.
15RyojinI can't wait for the next chapter. I like that it is a more realistic depiction of a war. That you didn't make the Soul Reapers comically evil but showed how both sides saw themselves in the right and they both have people willing to go too far to prove it rather than being black and white.
7/29/2021 c2 Ryojin
This is a really good story so far. I like it. I know some of the good guys from bleach are going to end up as enemies but it would be cool to see some divide amongst his friends. Just personally it would be nice to see that Kukaku and Yoruichi especially stay on Ichigo's side. Maybe the Visords too. I am interested to see where this goes.
This is a really good story so far. I like it. I know some of the good guys from bleach are going to end up as enemies but it would be cool to see some divide amongst his friends. Just personally it would be nice to see that Kukaku and Yoruichi especially stay on Ichigo's side. Maybe the Visords too. I am interested to see where this goes.
7/29/2021 c2 9KurosakiLucifer
Okay I like where the story is going. But I have a question about Renji.
Do you not like him or something? For what you did was a bit cruel, and I am a fan of him.
9KurosakiLuciferOkay I like where the story is going. But I have a question about Renji.
Do you not like him or something? For what you did was a bit cruel, and I am a fan of him.
7/12/2021 c2 11Relo
I’m no one but as for “constructive” criticism this may just be a personal preference but perhaps some paragraphs can be a little shorter (only a few were long). And I like to italicize the apostrophe when speaking internally, but that’s just my pref. Other than that the grammar is good and the dialogue seems really genuine
good stuff
11ReloI’m no one but as for “constructive” criticism this may just be a personal preference but perhaps some paragraphs can be a little shorter (only a few were long). And I like to italicize the apostrophe when speaking internally, but that’s just my pref. Other than that the grammar is good and the dialogue seems really genuine
good stuff
7/7/2021 c2 Guest
It's a good story for me. Feels a bit lackluster at points but the concept is interesting enough that I stay. I just wanted to ask 2 quick questions (not sure if they will be resolved in the future chapters. I felt like they wouldn't.) You brought up how the Soul King is the thing that is balancing everything together. But like, wouldn't the quincies cause a lot of inbalance since they literally destroy hollows, and cause the souls to never be reborn or purified, so like what then? The Shinigami, specifically help with that and are good for trying to save all those souls. While Quincies while also good in this story, are just destroying them with no regard for the human souls they used to represent. Also why is Ichigo so like different, he isn't the loud mouthed strawberry boy that's fighting for those he cares about, now he is getting like edgier and edgier?
It's a good story for me. Feels a bit lackluster at points but the concept is interesting enough that I stay. I just wanted to ask 2 quick questions (not sure if they will be resolved in the future chapters. I felt like they wouldn't.) You brought up how the Soul King is the thing that is balancing everything together. But like, wouldn't the quincies cause a lot of inbalance since they literally destroy hollows, and cause the souls to never be reborn or purified, so like what then? The Shinigami, specifically help with that and are good for trying to save all those souls. While Quincies while also good in this story, are just destroying them with no regard for the human souls they used to represent. Also why is Ichigo so like different, he isn't the loud mouthed strawberry boy that's fighting for those he cares about, now he is getting like edgier and edgier?
7/6/2021 c9 9Ziltoid
Very, very interesting chapter. It made me reread the whole story. Not just Ichigo fighting Yama (which is going to be awesome!) but the way he's undermining soul society by shattering the allegiances of Yoruichi and the Visored. I do hope Yoroichi manages to convince Urahara.
I suppose if that happens the Royal Guard will have no other choice but to intervene directly.
I hope Ichigo is going to seek out his family soon. Or at least his sisters. I wouldn't be surprised if SS did another underhanded thing by kidnapping Karin and Yuzu... Frankly, I can't really care much about Isshin. That man screwed up big time. But perhaps if he learns what happens with his wife he'll change for the better.
Anyway, keep up the good work! Can't wait to see how this'll continue!
9ZiltoidVery, very interesting chapter. It made me reread the whole story. Not just Ichigo fighting Yama (which is going to be awesome!) but the way he's undermining soul society by shattering the allegiances of Yoruichi and the Visored. I do hope Yoroichi manages to convince Urahara.
I suppose if that happens the Royal Guard will have no other choice but to intervene directly.
I hope Ichigo is going to seek out his family soon. Or at least his sisters. I wouldn't be surprised if SS did another underhanded thing by kidnapping Karin and Yuzu... Frankly, I can't really care much about Isshin. That man screwed up big time. But perhaps if he learns what happens with his wife he'll change for the better.
Anyway, keep up the good work! Can't wait to see how this'll continue!
7/4/2021 c9 27darkmachines
I have to say you made Quilge's death actually sad to me. Making wish he could survived to continue working with Ichigo. I have a strong feeling Ichigo will not be happy over the death of some of the SternRitter he called his friends right?
What Kensei reads My Hero? I think All Might vs Mask would be a even match to me.
So we still have A, B, C, D, E, F, G, H, I, K, M, N, P, S, T, V, W, X, Y, and Z left. Think I'm only sad that Berenice had to die and couldn't live to be extend on more.
Anyway, I still look forward to BG9 the most and his cyborg moves and power of the Knowledge works too.
27darkmachinesI have to say you made Quilge's death actually sad to me. Making wish he could survived to continue working with Ichigo. I have a strong feeling Ichigo will not be happy over the death of some of the SternRitter he called his friends right?
What Kensei reads My Hero? I think All Might vs Mask would be a even match to me.
So we still have A, B, C, D, E, F, G, H, I, K, M, N, P, S, T, V, W, X, Y, and Z left. Think I'm only sad that Berenice had to die and couldn't live to be extend on more.
Anyway, I still look forward to BG9 the most and his cyborg moves and power of the Knowledge works too.
7/4/2021 c9 Anikong
Nooo not a cliffhanger! Still a great chapter. I cannot wait for the next one to see Ichigo fight the captain commander.
Nooo not a cliffhanger! Still a great chapter. I cannot wait for the next one to see Ichigo fight the captain commander.