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6/26 c10 29Mr. Aanonymous
Bud, i'm actually getting worried about you.

Please give me some evidence that you're alive.
4/25 c2 Mr. Aanonymous
Alright, we're back- with chapter 2 and i'm here to review. Truth be told, i've got the same set-up with you as i do with several other writers- the quid pro quo thing... i'm starting to regret it.

I'm just gonna say it.

Most of them suck.

No, really.

I get that most of the people on this site are just hobbyists, at best. And they do it for Fun. but their work. they don't even try. Plot holes, spelling errors... just random crap. More often then not either one wall of text after another or, maybe, a line of dialogue that's meant to tell a story in five words or less.

No standards at all- the second i point that out, on any level- there's a tantrum, i'm called a bad guy, and ghosted.

Fanfic, writing. its actually important to me. I actually wanna do good work. To do that, i need help. I need someone to actually talk to about this. This quid pro quo thing. Its just another in a long line of failures to do just that. Depressing, is the most... 'cheerful' way to describe it.

Hell, even your work. You've got brains. you've got experience. Commitment. Enthusiasm. Whole thing. but its just too random, OC, and minimalist on detail for me to get into.

I hope you don't get too angry when i say this, but your work- all of your work, there's just nothing for me to latch onto. Nothing about this that i enjoy. Me looking at and reviewing your stuff, its strictly work for me. Nothing more.

That said, lets get to it.

1. same issue as last time. No disclaimer. authors notes. No title of any kind. Professionalism out the window.

2. Chris is doing an intro with a brief recap. Chef is playing wingman. you're showcasing the difference from previous seasons- paying customers/ reviewers are also there, I.E people chris can't abuse on a whim. Chef himself actually being the one to complain about it, with chris defending. Surprising. Okay.

Cue theme song.

3. Okay, we've got your off brand OC's doing establishing character moments before discussing their annoyance/ fear for what chris has in store for them. And you are doing it for every team. Damn. Just a suggestion, but you might wanna just focus on one team, or at least select group of characters, for each chapter instead of trying to give everyone their fair shake each time. It eats up too much of everything and stretches it on.

just a suggestion.

4. There was a LOT of back and forth between the characters before they even got to the challenge. All very fun, very entertaining, but not a lot of pay off when it comes to plot. I'm hoping i'm wrong about that.

5. Alright, first challenge at around... just under the halfway point for the chapter. nice. Surprisingly enough, the challenge sounds like something the show would actually do. At least in the early seasons before things got... weird.

6. Okay, for the next... i wanna say third of the chapter, the teams are having misadventures trying to do a very basic task without anyone-aside from themselves- even trying to sabotage them. All very entertaining. Just throwing this out there, but you might wanna cut down these 'challenge chapters' into three part 'arcs'. Each chapter focusing on a single team doing their best to complete the challenge. It would allow you to actually focus and put in detail. Though, you seem pretty focused at just throwing everything at the wall and hoping something sticks. Not my thing, but i can see it.

7. Ahhh... the elimination. seemed pretty by the number. Though, putting-

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In there like that. It just seemed distracting. I know why you did it. just seemed a bit much.

8. Lets be honest here, with a name with the word 'suckers' in it- you just know that their team is gonna have the losers in it. I feel like i'm seeing the 'owen' and 'gwen' clue again from the first season. Though, odds are the final contestant and winner of the season will be from the 'seasonal suckers'.
4/22 c1 Mr. Aanonymous
alright, i'm here and i'm ready-ish to get to work.

Full disclosure, i've been kinda putting this off. Mostly through procrastination, exhausted from the gym, and drunk- respectively. Don't judge.

But i'm here, lets do this.

xxxxxxxxxxx

off, i need to get something out of the way. I was curious as to the reviews of this thing and... wow. Someone actually had the balls to leave a review begging other's to look at her own. I'm not gonna name names. It was a one-shot and had about 200 something reviews. God knows why. But i will say that all of them were just as crazy as the 'look at my story!' review she left for you.

Damn... that's a no-no. I hope someone reports on her.

BTW, it was a hanna montana story. In 2021! yeesh.

anyway, onto your stuff.

2. Kinda the same with my last review of your other story i looked at. No disclaimer, no author's notes- italicized or not- story and chapter title are not there. Show's a real lack of professionalism.

You need to have that stuff in there man. I'm sorry but its just needed.

3. Okay, i've scanned through it- without actually reading anything- and i can see that about 99% of the chapter is dialogue. Obviously you're still a 'tell, don't show' kind of writer. I have to admit, i was hoping that you'd change your style a bit from the fic you wrote 10yr ago. Quite frankly, i'm not seeing much of a difference- skill or style wise between this and your TD: stranded story.

Make of that as you will.

4. Okay, much like the 'stranded' story- this thing is starting off at the docks of the island. Difference here being its chris and chef doing some banter. Not much going on here. Biggest take away being some grammar stuff. A missing capital letter here. A comma instead of a period there. Small nit picks. but its there.

I don't know if this story is related to the show's cannon, but apparently the island has been blown up and repaired... so there's that.

5. Okay, i'm guessing the next... half of the chapter is just introducing the OC contestants for the season. Most of which i'm thinking are just going to be a mix and match of the show's cannon characters. the first one for starters- Natalia. I'm getting Crimson from RR along with the baby spin off version of gwen for the goth stuff, mixed izzy/ Mike's crazy. Only, not funny.

the last part's not really on you, i just don't care for OC's.

the rest more or less fallow that model. Given just enough characterization for the audience to bet on who they should care about/ get eliminated first.

6. The only real take away from the character intro is that the OC's this go round from 'Stranded' is that this batch is more cartoony and less 'edgy'/ dated since it wasn't written 10 yr ago. I'm sure that'll change in that same amount of time in the future.

Case and point, in stranded you had a character outright brain chris with a pipe while in this one you've got a kid in a sailor outfit calling people 'landlubbers'.

speaks for itself.

7. Just throwing this out there, but if you're going to have your chapters be 90% dialogue, you might have more luck with people reading everything if you tossed in words that are italicized, in bold, underlined, capital, even a exclamation point or two in there. Something. Let people know they're supposed to be paying attention.

8. Wow, you really went all out with the confessional. I'm just gonna ask it. where do you come up with all the OC stuff? Is it just random or do you actually plan it all out?

9. Okay, chris is actually tolerant in this one. Or at least he's not outright threatening someone's life for annoying him. You might wanna toss in why and even how he's like that since the dude was tossed in prison for... there's a list. but ignoring someone instead of yelling, intentionally leveling up challenges, outright trying to kill someone... you might wanna explain how he's not doing any of that.

10. Damn, i was right. about halfway through was the end point for the introductions for the OC characters. I'm good. Time for the challenge. The theme for this season is... running the joint like a hotel. Okay. why not. Kinda lack luster but i guess that is how you make it stand out compared to even the cannon stuff.

I like it. Can't wait to see how you twist it.

11. Okay, a lot of resort shenaniganry. Mostly whatever jokes you can squeeze out of the situation at any given time. Felt kinda like i was watching a simpsons or futurama episode. If you could find a random joke involving a resort you tossed it in there. i'm actually a little bit impressed.

good work.

Not much for plot, but hey. its the first episode. basically a job interview. you need to keep people's attention beyond the two drink minimum.

12. All and all, i take back my words about there not being much improvement between this story and 'stranded'. I would indeed enjoy watching this if it was its own season. i'd say its season 4 quality.

not the best, but far from the worst.
4/5 c14 7Vampiric Child of Dimitrescu
I enjoyed Nora's ending almost as much as Fabio's. They were a well-deserving final 2.
4/5 c13 Vampiric Child of Dimitrescu
This was a wonderful season. I ma so glad Fabio won. He def deserved it. He fought to get to the end from day one. Nora was a delight as well and she made a fabulous finalist. Her final battle with Fabio was a treat to read. Misty got the karma she had coming all season so that was cathartic to see Fabio shove her into 3rd place.
4/5 c14 1Nobody245
Good to hear and if you continue, then I look forward to seeing what comes next. Personally, I am hoping for a sequel of the Stranded or Uber Drama series you made as each of them were great in their own way. Maybe a Switcheroo sequel too if there are more likable characters than the previous ones.

Regardless, I look forward to seeing what you have in store next, so for now, keep up the good work.
4/5 c13 Nobody245
So, the final chapter is here and at last we have a winner. And it was Fabio who took the gold over Nora or Misty, and great to see that Misty lost since she didn't deserve to win in any way whatsoever.

And I like the winner here since he tried, he schemed, and he triumphed, and everything in between to get that money. May not be the most deserving morally, but he's more than earned it.

Great chapter.
3/26 c12 7Vampiric Child of Dimitrescu
I’ll admit, I’ll miss Ander a bit. He felt like the only normal one in a sea of uhh… larger than life personalities shall we say. But I am excited for the finale. This is a very compelling final 3. Nora has been nothing but good vibes all season even when she’s had to make tough decisions like turning on Omber and Lex. She kept her head up and didn’t resort to nastiness and I applaud her for that. I would be okay with it if she win. Fabio has been hilarious all season with his desire to be a millionaire and he is fake it till you make it attitude. He’s very much the underdog, coming from a team with less players then the other two and surviving all the way to the final 3. Gotta give the man his props. He’s def my pick for the winner. Misty has also been a compelling character to watch. Her delusions that she was ever in control of the votes was pretty funny. I mean she did manipulate that one guy who left early but he was an idiot so…you know the more I think about it the more I realize that Misty’s recent stradegy of doing nothing has kind of payed off for her. No one took her as a threat all season and simply allowed her to float to the end. Honestly if she pulls a Deux-machina out of her ass and wins, I wouldn’t be all that upset over it.
3/21 c12 1Nobody245
So, the penultimate episode before the finale is up. And Ander couldn't win immunity and is now out of the game. Not surprising, but disappointing. But with the final three here, I'm hoping Fabio wins the whole thing, though I wouldn't mind if Nora won either. It's Misty who I hope loses for sure.

But good chapter and I look forward to seeing the finale of this.
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2/21 c11 Gucci Mane LaFlare
I honestly can't believe Misty is still here. I thought she would've been like a pre-merge boot for sure lol.
2/21 c11 Nobody245
So, Lex bites it this time. A little surprised to be honest. I thought he would have made it to the finale. But hey, he was also a threat in the game so it wasn't exactly a bad move.

Though honestly, the only reason I think Misty is still here is because she is going to be set up as a possible dark horse winner. I know she still has a good chance of winner, but she also has the lowest chance. She has no real allies left, everyone has caught on about her fakeness, and she's only still in because she would be an easy match up. And I'll also say, from her sexist views and arrogance, she doesn't even feel like someone you want to win.

So, I'm kind of hoping for an Ander-Fabio-Nora final three. I would be happy if any of them win. But I guess I'll wait and see how it goes.

Good chapter though, and I'll look forward to the next one.
2/21 c11 7Vampiric Child of Dimitrescu
I knew Lex was leaving. They had too many death flags. On a good note they became quite the power player. Their friendships with Natalia, Eden, Omber, Fabio and Nora were a delight to witness and watching them evolve from a meak character with little to no self confidence to someone who essentially took control of the game was quite phenomenal. On the topic of a winner, honestly I hope Fabio wins, I think he deserves it.
1/24 c10 Vampiric Child of Dimitrescu
Lex made a very big move and I respect it. Corny had a good run and I’m glad to see he left on a good note. I’m rooting for Fabio to win. Honestly I feel he deserves it. I’m also intrigued to see what Misty will now do after her near death experience. Overall this was a good episode:)
1/24 c10 1Nobody245
So Corny is gone this time. Too nice for his own good, he was. The final 5 though are upon us and I'm honestly curious to see what will happen since I could see this going several ways.

Like I said last chapter, all of those remaining have a shot to win and those always make the most interesting seasons of reality shows. So, with that being said, I look forward to the next chapter.
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