for Can Jedi Wear Orange?6/25/2021 c7 Guest
So far, so good, really fun crossover that isn't some generic crap I keep seeing in this genre.
So far, so good, really fun crossover that isn't some generic crap I keep seeing in this genre.
6/23/2021 c6 
12Agurra of the Darkness
Can't really say too much about this chapter I suppose, again it's mostly explaining stuff and getting Naruto and Jiraiya up to speed.
Granted I do feel like there should be a bit more push back from some of the Jedi. As we saw in the films many of them were are stream firm traditionalists and I doubt they'd just go along with this even if Yoda says it's the way to go. There are always some who just don't agree.
I don't know much about how Jedi Younglings live and all this extended lore stuff, though I do question Barriss being there. I assumed she and Ahsoka first met on Geonosis as that's the vibe I got. Plus I feel like something is bit lost putting her and Naruto together so early. Part of what caused her to fall was her being raised in a far more traditional Jedi way which in turn made her far more emotionally unstable due to a sever lack of people to talk to and converse with. Throwing Naruto in with her pretty much makes that almost impossible since it'll pretty much confirm that the Jedi can and are more open minded. Maybe I'm just overthinking it.
Another thing I'm a little concerned about is making Naruto too much like Kakashi or like other versions of Naruto in other fanfics. Him essentially copying Kakashi's mask gag and being more serious kind of sucks some of the fun out of it. I enjoy Naruto being more of a loudmouth, high energy wise guy. Two stories I think handle Naruto's integration into another world very well are New Devil of House Gremory and The Newest Challenger. In both stories Naruto is thrown into a new world, DXD and Street Fighter respectively, and has no way to get back. Thus Naruto adapts and changes but still feels like the same character. In DXD Naruto is a more surly and abrasive individual, happily throwing out curse words and snarky insults, which feels like a logical progression but you also get a sense of maturity from him even if most of the time he's still shown to be petty. In Street fighter Naruto is more mellow, he still loves to fight and crack skulls, but is also very playful and joking while also not being afraid to throw snappy insults thanks to having a more normal childhood and a good group of friends to bounce off of.
I'm just hoping you won't make Naruto into a clone of Kakashi or do one of those overpowered stories where Naruto is just amazing at eveything.
Anyway I've said most of what I want so looking forward to the next chapter.
12Agurra of the DarknessCan't really say too much about this chapter I suppose, again it's mostly explaining stuff and getting Naruto and Jiraiya up to speed.
Granted I do feel like there should be a bit more push back from some of the Jedi. As we saw in the films many of them were are stream firm traditionalists and I doubt they'd just go along with this even if Yoda says it's the way to go. There are always some who just don't agree.
I don't know much about how Jedi Younglings live and all this extended lore stuff, though I do question Barriss being there. I assumed she and Ahsoka first met on Geonosis as that's the vibe I got. Plus I feel like something is bit lost putting her and Naruto together so early. Part of what caused her to fall was her being raised in a far more traditional Jedi way which in turn made her far more emotionally unstable due to a sever lack of people to talk to and converse with. Throwing Naruto in with her pretty much makes that almost impossible since it'll pretty much confirm that the Jedi can and are more open minded. Maybe I'm just overthinking it.
Another thing I'm a little concerned about is making Naruto too much like Kakashi or like other versions of Naruto in other fanfics. Him essentially copying Kakashi's mask gag and being more serious kind of sucks some of the fun out of it. I enjoy Naruto being more of a loudmouth, high energy wise guy. Two stories I think handle Naruto's integration into another world very well are New Devil of House Gremory and The Newest Challenger. In both stories Naruto is thrown into a new world, DXD and Street Fighter respectively, and has no way to get back. Thus Naruto adapts and changes but still feels like the same character. In DXD Naruto is a more surly and abrasive individual, happily throwing out curse words and snarky insults, which feels like a logical progression but you also get a sense of maturity from him even if most of the time he's still shown to be petty. In Street fighter Naruto is more mellow, he still loves to fight and crack skulls, but is also very playful and joking while also not being afraid to throw snappy insults thanks to having a more normal childhood and a good group of friends to bounce off of.
I'm just hoping you won't make Naruto into a clone of Kakashi or do one of those overpowered stories where Naruto is just amazing at eveything.
Anyway I've said most of what I want so looking forward to the next chapter.
6/18/2021 c6 12mastercheif1229
Great chapter! Incredible first arc! I can't wait for the next chapter!
12mastercheif1229Great chapter! Incredible first arc! I can't wait for the next chapter!
6/11/2021 c5 Apedreitor
Nice, even if I dislike the idea of that chakra and the force are one and the same, sorry but it's stuck on my head how Darth malleus did in "the good left undone" that chakra it's the counterpart to the force the yang the the yin that is the force, a shame that fic it's dead to me it's the Best crossover fanfiction in this section.
Your's it's shaping up quite well
Nice, even if I dislike the idea of that chakra and the force are one and the same, sorry but it's stuck on my head how Darth malleus did in "the good left undone" that chakra it's the counterpart to the force the yang the the yin that is the force, a shame that fic it's dead to me it's the Best crossover fanfiction in this section.
Your's it's shaping up quite well
6/10/2021 c5 Ninja40k
Hmm, pretty good chapter, and I am glad to see that unlike every other author on this site, you aren’t simply biased and like "EVIL AND SITH BEST! JEDI BAD! GREY JEDI FTW!"
Aside from that, I also appreciate this rather "nicer" Mace.
Hmm, pretty good chapter, and I am glad to see that unlike every other author on this site, you aren’t simply biased and like "EVIL AND SITH BEST! JEDI BAD! GREY JEDI FTW!"
Aside from that, I also appreciate this rather "nicer" Mace.
6/10/2021 c2 ThR1992
Interesting.
The only problem is because Kurama might know that they are in the future, I need to read your argument.
Otherwise it's intriguing, how will this play out?
If the toads were transported by their connection, it would also be possible that the other bijjus are at that time.
Interesting.
The only problem is because Kurama might know that they are in the future, I need to read your argument.
Otherwise it's intriguing, how will this play out?
If the toads were transported by their connection, it would also be possible that the other bijjus are at that time.
6/9/2021 c5 12Agurra of the Darkness
Not a terrible chapter, though I can't help but feel like some scenes are glossed over too quickly. Mainly with regards to the Jutsu demonstrations.
I mean Naruto's clone ability on top of Jiraiya producing other elements out of thin air should be seen as positively mind blowing and I feel we were denied an intriguing scene with that as it does certainly better help show why exactly the Jedi would be so willing to bend the rules for these two. I mean Naruto and Jiraiya can do things that would essentially be akin to magic to the Jedi, even more so than the witches of Dathomir and they can bring the dead back to life...sort of.
Seeing that should blow their freaking minds, not to mention the whole being from a time over 50,000 years in the past. I don't know, they just seem a little too chill about the whole thing.
The revelation Yoda has that their refusal to teach them is based on Fear is actually quite simple but also brilliant because it's true. At it's core the Jedi were willing to deny Anakin entry because they were afraid of what he could become, and the irony they never realized this really shows how far they had fallen.
That said I can't help but feel like this should've been something that was built up a little more, have the Council debate it a little more. Yoda is essentially telling all these wise Jedi master that they were guilty of the very thing they'd been judging others for for years and to change their ways in a drastic fashion. Granted with Naruto and Jiraiya it does make sense as both of them are immensely powerful and anyone would kill to get them on their side as they could easily be game changers. Plus since they aren't Republic Citizens, the Jedi technically can't force them to do anything.
Also this could just be because I'm used to emotionless Mace Windu, I can't help but feel the decision for him to be Naruto's master should've taken a little more time. Like Mace is hesitant to do so because he senses the dark side in Naruto which for the time is much stronger in him then Anakin and Mace, who has seen Jedi fall before, doesn't want to take the risk with him again. but perhaps, through a combination of getting to know Naruto along with the Force sending more clear signals that Mace is the only one to truly train him, makes Mace change his mind.
I don't know maybe I'm overthinking it a bit, just seems like the seemingly inflexible Jedi bent the knee a little too easily here.
Still it is fun to see some of the other Jedi we know be more involved, though it is hard to keep track of some of them since I'm more familiar with the Clone Wars Jedi Council.
12Agurra of the DarknessNot a terrible chapter, though I can't help but feel like some scenes are glossed over too quickly. Mainly with regards to the Jutsu demonstrations.
I mean Naruto's clone ability on top of Jiraiya producing other elements out of thin air should be seen as positively mind blowing and I feel we were denied an intriguing scene with that as it does certainly better help show why exactly the Jedi would be so willing to bend the rules for these two. I mean Naruto and Jiraiya can do things that would essentially be akin to magic to the Jedi, even more so than the witches of Dathomir and they can bring the dead back to life...sort of.
Seeing that should blow their freaking minds, not to mention the whole being from a time over 50,000 years in the past. I don't know, they just seem a little too chill about the whole thing.
The revelation Yoda has that their refusal to teach them is based on Fear is actually quite simple but also brilliant because it's true. At it's core the Jedi were willing to deny Anakin entry because they were afraid of what he could become, and the irony they never realized this really shows how far they had fallen.
That said I can't help but feel like this should've been something that was built up a little more, have the Council debate it a little more. Yoda is essentially telling all these wise Jedi master that they were guilty of the very thing they'd been judging others for for years and to change their ways in a drastic fashion. Granted with Naruto and Jiraiya it does make sense as both of them are immensely powerful and anyone would kill to get them on their side as they could easily be game changers. Plus since they aren't Republic Citizens, the Jedi technically can't force them to do anything.
Also this could just be because I'm used to emotionless Mace Windu, I can't help but feel the decision for him to be Naruto's master should've taken a little more time. Like Mace is hesitant to do so because he senses the dark side in Naruto which for the time is much stronger in him then Anakin and Mace, who has seen Jedi fall before, doesn't want to take the risk with him again. but perhaps, through a combination of getting to know Naruto along with the Force sending more clear signals that Mace is the only one to truly train him, makes Mace change his mind.
I don't know maybe I'm overthinking it a bit, just seems like the seemingly inflexible Jedi bent the knee a little too easily here.
Still it is fun to see some of the other Jedi we know be more involved, though it is hard to keep track of some of them since I'm more familiar with the Clone Wars Jedi Council.