for A Magical Journey4/29 c34 Tony McNucklz
Yup, your writing dialogue and interpersonal interactions has definitely improved since this.
Yup, your writing dialogue and interpersonal interactions has definitely improved since this.
4/29 c31 Tony McNucklz
Sidenote, it still amazes me when HP stories that started after covid lockdowns trash wearing robes and hold muggle clothes as somehow better. I thought lockdowns made it very clear that getting to wear robes most of the time is actually pretty great, and if it was socially and culturally acceptable to do so in public most of us would gladly Dr. Strange it the fuck up on the daily.
Sidenote, it still amazes me when HP stories that started after covid lockdowns trash wearing robes and hold muggle clothes as somehow better. I thought lockdowns made it very clear that getting to wear robes most of the time is actually pretty great, and if it was socially and culturally acceptable to do so in public most of us would gladly Dr. Strange it the fuck up on the daily.
4/29 c33 Tony McNucklz
I gotta say, there's a lot about this story that makes it feel like it was written by a different author. Outsider's Resolve seems like a much more well thought out world build with deeper analysis of the setting. I wonder if this story made a lot of difference in your experience and by the end if you were a much better author. Reading your other story makes me wonder if/how the writer you are now would write this story if you did it over. What changes you would make.
I think I'd like to see your take on a second shot at a Potterverse story with your improved writing skills, especially since Hogwarts Legacy might play a role in how you shaped the new story. Maybe even what you'd make of a Potter/MCU crossover, without the Ancient One and the masters of mystic arts existing, or folding them into being witches and wizards or something like that. Also, not a crossover with anything from after Endgame when the franchise just became a shitty corporate activist fanfic from writers and producers that openly and proudly know nothing about marvel comics.
Tldr, I'm curious to see what your take on a HP fic from you would look like if you wrote it now. If it would be very different crafting of the setting from Magical Journey, and how Hogwarts Legacy lore might factor into it.
I gotta say, there's a lot about this story that makes it feel like it was written by a different author. Outsider's Resolve seems like a much more well thought out world build with deeper analysis of the setting. I wonder if this story made a lot of difference in your experience and by the end if you were a much better author. Reading your other story makes me wonder if/how the writer you are now would write this story if you did it over. What changes you would make.
I think I'd like to see your take on a second shot at a Potterverse story with your improved writing skills, especially since Hogwarts Legacy might play a role in how you shaped the new story. Maybe even what you'd make of a Potter/MCU crossover, without the Ancient One and the masters of mystic arts existing, or folding them into being witches and wizards or something like that. Also, not a crossover with anything from after Endgame when the franchise just became a shitty corporate activist fanfic from writers and producers that openly and proudly know nothing about marvel comics.
Tldr, I'm curious to see what your take on a HP fic from you would look like if you wrote it now. If it would be very different crafting of the setting from Magical Journey, and how Hogwarts Legacy lore might factor into it.
4/29 c31 Tony McNucklz
Major flaw in the story is wanking over the muggle world being somehow worth admiring. Conveniently focussing on blue jeans, movies, and fast food while skipping over rwandan genocides, polpotish exterminations, North Korean 6th generation punishments, and all the other horrors of muggle kind. Conveniently glossing over the first instinct of docile suburbanites to demand control of things that frighten them, by one means or another. Utterly ignoring that every criminal on the planet would immediately start claiming a wizard mind controlled them into their behavior, from purse snatching to serial killers. 'i was mind controlled' would become a new standard catch-all legal defense if the wizarding world became known. All the crazies we dismiss that rant about illuminaty controlling the world and world leaders being part of a conspiracy would immediately start claiming the small wizarding community literally has dozens of forms of mind control they could be using to control world leaders, and there would never be any evidence that could dispute such accusations that doesn't come from wizards, which could never be percieved as an unbiased report.
If I woke up a wizard, my life as a muggle and knowledge of our world would immediately make me militantly against muggles knowing my kind exists, and I certainly wouldn't want blue jeans, malls, and general corporatism infecting the magical world i was now apart of.
Also, personally I've always thought Snape gets a bum rap as a teacher. It's the single most dangerous class in the school, where mistakes can LITERALLY have explosive and other lethal consequences, and he's expected to keep prepubescent and adolescent humans from doing anything stupid, whether by carelessness or other reasons. I'd be a tyrannical asshole too if I had to literally keep a roomful of teens from killing everybody in the room with a poorly followed recipe.
Major flaw in the story is wanking over the muggle world being somehow worth admiring. Conveniently focussing on blue jeans, movies, and fast food while skipping over rwandan genocides, polpotish exterminations, North Korean 6th generation punishments, and all the other horrors of muggle kind. Conveniently glossing over the first instinct of docile suburbanites to demand control of things that frighten them, by one means or another. Utterly ignoring that every criminal on the planet would immediately start claiming a wizard mind controlled them into their behavior, from purse snatching to serial killers. 'i was mind controlled' would become a new standard catch-all legal defense if the wizarding world became known. All the crazies we dismiss that rant about illuminaty controlling the world and world leaders being part of a conspiracy would immediately start claiming the small wizarding community literally has dozens of forms of mind control they could be using to control world leaders, and there would never be any evidence that could dispute such accusations that doesn't come from wizards, which could never be percieved as an unbiased report.
If I woke up a wizard, my life as a muggle and knowledge of our world would immediately make me militantly against muggles knowing my kind exists, and I certainly wouldn't want blue jeans, malls, and general corporatism infecting the magical world i was now apart of.
Also, personally I've always thought Snape gets a bum rap as a teacher. It's the single most dangerous class in the school, where mistakes can LITERALLY have explosive and other lethal consequences, and he's expected to keep prepubescent and adolescent humans from doing anything stupid, whether by carelessness or other reasons. I'd be a tyrannical asshole too if I had to literally keep a roomful of teens from killing everybody in the room with a poorly followed recipe.
24/19 c17 kirosyamcha
Isnt MC a year older than Harry? I know Hermione was 12 in her first year, are you making MC 12 also?
Isnt MC a year older than Harry? I know Hermione was 12 in her first year, are you making MC 12 also?
4/13 c439 Guest
And the best author award goes to FictionOnlyReader. I finished this novel in 3 days I read it word to word taking no breaks and I can say with no regrets that this novel is in the top tier list of the novels that I have read and would like for others to give it a chance too. I had some problems when I read ch 349 in which Quinn got both ivy and Daphne as girlfriends but I got over it as the romance wasn’t shown too much. As the author said that some more story lines could have been explored too and I also believe so however, then it wouldn’t have had this ending which I loved.
And the best author award goes to FictionOnlyReader. I finished this novel in 3 days I read it word to word taking no breaks and I can say with no regrets that this novel is in the top tier list of the novels that I have read and would like for others to give it a chance too. I had some problems when I read ch 349 in which Quinn got both ivy and Daphne as girlfriends but I got over it as the romance wasn’t shown too much. As the author said that some more story lines could have been explored too and I also believe so however, then it wouldn’t have had this ending which I loved.
4/12 c329 2 gfs on ch329
Yeah this novel was going the best way for me and then you dropped this shit about quinn accepting ivy along with daphne. Now that has me disappointed and my good sir I will be leaving this novel for when I am not so angry with your decision.
Yeah this novel was going the best way for me and then you dropped this shit about quinn accepting ivy along with daphne. Now that has me disappointed and my good sir I will be leaving this novel for when I am not so angry with your decision.
4/11 c439 averywoods53
i have never been so engrossed in a story in my whole life.i started reading this Tuesday when you didn't post an update to the Naruto fanfiction, and now i have read 1.2 million words. from the moment i woke up to the second i fell asleep, i was reading this story. Bravo.
i have never been so engrossed in a story in my whole life.i started reading this Tuesday when you didn't post an update to the Naruto fanfiction, and now i have read 1.2 million words. from the moment i woke up to the second i fell asleep, i was reading this story. Bravo.
4/4 c106 averywoods53
Nice reference to dimension 20. it took me a minute to remember where i have heard the chronomancy rant from but i remembered it
Nice reference to dimension 20. it took me a minute to remember where i have heard the chronomancy rant from but i remembered it
3/21 c439 Guest
This was excellent. You had me addicted to reading this.
It was well written and a great undertaking. I'm glad it was my first HP fan fiction.
Keep up the great work!
This was excellent. You had me addicted to reading this.
It was well written and a great undertaking. I'm glad it was my first HP fan fiction.
Keep up the great work!
3/9 c203 MagnusAeon
As somebody who does have an Eidetic memory this is a pretty close guess to how it works, however a few things are different than this. First are the different levels a photograph memory is slightly less powerful than a Eidetic memory, which in turn is slightly less than Total Recall, most people think these are the same but in truth they are different levels of a similar thing, such as Autism has different levels and names but are all collectively all called Autism. For example a photograph memory is just being able to remember one almost anything from just one sense and doesn't just have to be eyesight, but could be remembering anything you've tasted or anything that you've touched; where as an eidetic memory is able to remember up to three senses and Total Recall is able to remember four to five of the senses, by that count I technically have Total Recall as I personally can remember all five sense
As somebody who does have an Eidetic memory this is a pretty close guess to how it works, however a few things are different than this. First are the different levels a photograph memory is slightly less powerful than a Eidetic memory, which in turn is slightly less than Total Recall, most people think these are the same but in truth they are different levels of a similar thing, such as Autism has different levels and names but are all collectively all called Autism. For example a photograph memory is just being able to remember one almost anything from just one sense and doesn't just have to be eyesight, but could be remembering anything you've tasted or anything that you've touched; where as an eidetic memory is able to remember up to three senses and Total Recall is able to remember four to five of the senses, by that count I technically have Total Recall as I personally can remember all five sense
3/2 c1 transi
one of the best HP fanfics on the site, still am stunned at the detail and utter span of the story being written over a ~14 month period. be proud of this.
at some point, you should have someone go back thru to fix the small spelling and formatting mistakes.
one of the best HP fanfics on the site, still am stunned at the detail and utter span of the story being written over a ~14 month period. be proud of this.
at some point, you should have someone go back thru to fix the small spelling and formatting mistakes.