for Deathberry's Journey10/12/2023 c7 WirelessDown
So Ichigo went through all these years of training in sword fighting, shumpo, kido, etc., so that an ordinary Hollow could just... throw him away and actually give him a real fight? Or are you deliberately making a powerless fool out of your own character (and this is not Ichigo, but just another OC parody of Ichigo) for the sake of preserving canonical events? Why then write fanfic about a cool character if you don't really change anything? I would also understand if Ichigo pretended for a possible observer to be a completely new shinigami who couldn’t do anything better than simply swing a sword, but your Ichigo demonstrated kido. And not just one low-level kido, but several of quite different levels. Emotions cannot influence a trained person so much. I'm sure Kisuke and Yoruichi trained him to keep a clear mind and a cool head in battle. He could be angry, yes, but that didn't mean he would fight sloppily and let a mere Hollow dominate the battle so much. Besides, why shikai? Does Ichigo lack simple skills to resolve this situation? Then why is he stronger than canon Ichigo? That Ichigo, who knew how to analyze his battle on the fly and adapt to any situation on the fly, who knew how to suppress emotions and act with a cool head in battle, but did not have enough skills and normal training to fully realize his own potential. Your Ichigo has the necessary knowledge, skills and nothing prevents him from realizing his full potential, but still he looks pathetic because of ordinary emotions? what nonsense? They would have started beating him up long ago if he got out of order so easily! If you wanted to just keep this piece of canon, then you should have saved Rukia her powers up to this point and used her at this point, not Ichigo! I would still believe it if the hollow Sora could fight Rukia and dominate for a while! But not against Ichigo, who was trained by two captains and Zero Squad!
So Ichigo went through all these years of training in sword fighting, shumpo, kido, etc., so that an ordinary Hollow could just... throw him away and actually give him a real fight? Or are you deliberately making a powerless fool out of your own character (and this is not Ichigo, but just another OC parody of Ichigo) for the sake of preserving canonical events? Why then write fanfic about a cool character if you don't really change anything? I would also understand if Ichigo pretended for a possible observer to be a completely new shinigami who couldn’t do anything better than simply swing a sword, but your Ichigo demonstrated kido. And not just one low-level kido, but several of quite different levels. Emotions cannot influence a trained person so much. I'm sure Kisuke and Yoruichi trained him to keep a clear mind and a cool head in battle. He could be angry, yes, but that didn't mean he would fight sloppily and let a mere Hollow dominate the battle so much. Besides, why shikai? Does Ichigo lack simple skills to resolve this situation? Then why is he stronger than canon Ichigo? That Ichigo, who knew how to analyze his battle on the fly and adapt to any situation on the fly, who knew how to suppress emotions and act with a cool head in battle, but did not have enough skills and normal training to fully realize his own potential. Your Ichigo has the necessary knowledge, skills and nothing prevents him from realizing his full potential, but still he looks pathetic because of ordinary emotions? what nonsense? They would have started beating him up long ago if he got out of order so easily! If you wanted to just keep this piece of canon, then you should have saved Rukia her powers up to this point and used her at this point, not Ichigo! I would still believe it if the hollow Sora could fight Rukia and dominate for a while! But not against Ichigo, who was trained by two captains and Zero Squad!
10/10/2023 c1 H
I like your story please continue
I like your story please continue
9/22/2023 c5 darthkratos24
I'm pretty sure one can't use Shunpo in a body as no one ever does, and I don't think hollows can get into one do sonido probably doesn't work either but he is a Quincy... could of easily used the Quincy version, missed opportunity there I think
I'm pretty sure one can't use Shunpo in a body as no one ever does, and I don't think hollows can get into one do sonido probably doesn't work either but he is a Quincy... could of easily used the Quincy version, missed opportunity there I think
9/21/2023 c4 darthkratos24
This chapter got me thinking... could someone use kido in a human body? We know they can while in a Gigai but are they built for that or is it just a fake human body? a human with spiritual power could they actually use kido? The only person we have for reference is ichigo and he sucks at kido naturally. Though that also brings to question, would ichigo use kido or would he just use Quincy powers in his body?
This chapter got me thinking... could someone use kido in a human body? We know they can while in a Gigai but are they built for that or is it just a fake human body? a human with spiritual power could they actually use kido? The only person we have for reference is ichigo and he sucks at kido naturally. Though that also brings to question, would ichigo use kido or would he just use Quincy powers in his body?
9/21/2023 c3 darthkratos24
I remember this story and I remember why I thought it was dumb! Everything is just Khyber knives! God's I hate that. You couldn't think of anything original? Change things up? You have two completely new blades and you thought "let's make them all Zangetsu!" Booooring. And hence forth shall be ignored because that idea is dog shit. let's see what else you got
I remember this story and I remember why I thought it was dumb! Everything is just Khyber knives! God's I hate that. You couldn't think of anything original? Change things up? You have two completely new blades and you thought "let's make them all Zangetsu!" Booooring. And hence forth shall be ignored because that idea is dog shit. let's see what else you got
9/4/2023 c1 Guest
Please continue writing this incredible story
Please continue writing this incredible story
7/19/2023 c34 
21Yami Luna Kitsune
this is a pretty FANTASTIC chapter, so far, despite some spelling errors
pretty eager for the next chapter
21Yami Luna Kitsunethis is a pretty FANTASTIC chapter, so far, despite some spelling errors
pretty eager for the next chapter
3/17/2023 c34 4Karsap
Are you doing any work on Digimon Adventure 01? I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter for that story.
4KarsapAre you doing any work on Digimon Adventure 01? I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter for that story.
3/13/2023 c34 GHETTOKINGKAI
ok so im starting to warm up more to this story now, you've actually made ichigo somewhat more badass and actually more confident here in this version of the soul society arc, so far i commend you for that, and his powers are actually really well though out here especially with him having the addition of elemental zanpakuto that rival even the head captains and surpass hitsugyas in pure capability, so i do really like that addition to his zanpakuto spirits. Im really hoping that this fight with zaraki is not gonna be some stagnated stalemate or some bullshit handicap with ichigo where hes afraid of his own powers and gets his ass beat till he realizes his need to use his powers, cause in all honesty that was such weak and bullshit aspect of his character in canon. Also really hoping to see some slight romantic interaction between ichigo and his harem chicks soon. Specifically yoruichi as shes the only one aside from nel and harribel that i prefer to all the other chicks in the harem, rukia and orhime and even rangiku are all honestly so fucking boring and downright overused in so many harem fanfics and its pretty damn cancerous trying to find a fanfic where neither one of em are in a fucking harem or relationship with ichigo. Yoruichi and harribel on the other hand are honestly very hard to find in harem/pairing fanfics, especially when it comes to pairings with ichigo...anyway aside from that side rant, i do hope you plan on continuing this story, as i hope im not discouraging your writing or story here, i just really would prefer to see a good fucking bleach story thats for once not a complete copy and paste of canon with no unique changes or added character development, but despite me skimming through alot of the first half of this story, i really am hopeful that this story wont be sorry af or super boring.
ok so im starting to warm up more to this story now, you've actually made ichigo somewhat more badass and actually more confident here in this version of the soul society arc, so far i commend you for that, and his powers are actually really well though out here especially with him having the addition of elemental zanpakuto that rival even the head captains and surpass hitsugyas in pure capability, so i do really like that addition to his zanpakuto spirits. Im really hoping that this fight with zaraki is not gonna be some stagnated stalemate or some bullshit handicap with ichigo where hes afraid of his own powers and gets his ass beat till he realizes his need to use his powers, cause in all honesty that was such weak and bullshit aspect of his character in canon. Also really hoping to see some slight romantic interaction between ichigo and his harem chicks soon. Specifically yoruichi as shes the only one aside from nel and harribel that i prefer to all the other chicks in the harem, rukia and orhime and even rangiku are all honestly so fucking boring and downright overused in so many harem fanfics and its pretty damn cancerous trying to find a fanfic where neither one of em are in a fucking harem or relationship with ichigo. Yoruichi and harribel on the other hand are honestly very hard to find in harem/pairing fanfics, especially when it comes to pairings with ichigo...anyway aside from that side rant, i do hope you plan on continuing this story, as i hope im not discouraging your writing or story here, i just really would prefer to see a good fucking bleach story thats for once not a complete copy and paste of canon with no unique changes or added character development, but despite me skimming through alot of the first half of this story, i really am hopeful that this story wont be sorry af or super boring.
3/13/2023 c31 GHETTOKINGKAI
ok so i take back what i said about you not having ichigo one shot renji, and i am also glad that you made it a more versatile fight despite it being one-sided in ichigos favor, i thought from the last chapter this was going to be some bullshit even battle and im glad it wasn't, so hopefully when ichigo fights kenpachi, it wont be like it was in canon where ichigo was running away like a bitch. I hope he fucks kenpachi up big time, also really hoping to see if ichigo gets some surprising lick's in with aizen before he retreats to hueco mundo instead of being one shot like in canon. I'm still giving this story a chance despite having some harsh criticism towards it cause like i said, i have a deep love/hate relationship with anything strongly pertaining to canon bleach. So im really hoping your story is a hell of alot better than the canon fodder we had from kubo.
ok so i take back what i said about you not having ichigo one shot renji, and i am also glad that you made it a more versatile fight despite it being one-sided in ichigos favor, i thought from the last chapter this was going to be some bullshit even battle and im glad it wasn't, so hopefully when ichigo fights kenpachi, it wont be like it was in canon where ichigo was running away like a bitch. I hope he fucks kenpachi up big time, also really hoping to see if ichigo gets some surprising lick's in with aizen before he retreats to hueco mundo instead of being one shot like in canon. I'm still giving this story a chance despite having some harsh criticism towards it cause like i said, i have a deep love/hate relationship with anything strongly pertaining to canon bleach. So im really hoping your story is a hell of alot better than the canon fodder we had from kubo.
3/13/2023 c30 GHETTOKINGKAI
ok im seriously not convinced in ANY WAY that ichigo would be having prolonged fucking fights with both ikkaku and renji here again, ESPECIALLY if you've given him the training that hes had in this story from the time he was basically a child. WTF? How is Ichigo not one shotting these guys with the amount of abilities he has here, not to mention the fact that hes essentially mastered kido which more than amplifies his skill level way above that of someone like renji, yet you've got him in a gridlock fight against him? That makes zero fucking sense. This story has been nothing but one long fucking drag through everything we saw in canon with minimal changes to the story so far with the exception being that ichigo has most of his powers here, his heritage is known as a shiba and he has a barely ok harem. Thats it, everything else here is basic af and has zero nuance to the story so far. So far nothing oustanding.
ok im seriously not convinced in ANY WAY that ichigo would be having prolonged fucking fights with both ikkaku and renji here again, ESPECIALLY if you've given him the training that hes had in this story from the time he was basically a child. WTF? How is Ichigo not one shotting these guys with the amount of abilities he has here, not to mention the fact that hes essentially mastered kido which more than amplifies his skill level way above that of someone like renji, yet you've got him in a gridlock fight against him? That makes zero fucking sense. This story has been nothing but one long fucking drag through everything we saw in canon with minimal changes to the story so far with the exception being that ichigo has most of his powers here, his heritage is known as a shiba and he has a barely ok harem. Thats it, everything else here is basic af and has zero nuance to the story so far. So far nothing oustanding.