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The giggling kid ignoring all advice and triggering something dangerous? Yeah, super fucking cliche. It kind of disgusts me. Oh, cryptic haphaestus inspiration. How daring~~~~
Oh noooo~~~~~
ancient crafts of a god, given to clueless heroes, with a riddle to boot warning him not to trust the goblins or croaker~
If it wasnt obvious, the current story direction sucks imo. Very boring.
The giggling kid ignoring all advice and triggering something dangerous? Yeah, super fucking cliche. It kind of disgusts me. Oh, cryptic haphaestus inspiration. How daring~~~~
Oh noooo~~~~~
ancient crafts of a god, given to clueless heroes, with a riddle to boot warning him not to trust the goblins or croaker~
If it wasnt obvious, the current story direction sucks imo. Very boring.
9/13 c42 bleachorange
I could smell the game fix from across the atlantic. Honestly, it bothers me a lot. But I guess thats why I'm bad with newbies. I just really am unable to sandbag in anything. I dont have to try my absolute hardest, but intentionally making mistakes bothers me on a fundamental level. I would rather explain everything and teach the entire way while doing my best still.
I could smell the game fix from across the atlantic. Honestly, it bothers me a lot. But I guess thats why I'm bad with newbies. I just really am unable to sandbag in anything. I dont have to try my absolute hardest, but intentionally making mistakes bothers me on a fundamental level. I would rather explain everything and teach the entire way while doing my best still.
9/13 c34 bleachorange
I'm a bit late to this, but I am glad youve extended the story out a bit. Its pretty unique amongst the fanons I have read that still cover the main plot and dont wildly diverge right from the beginning. The argument could be made this this one does, but I feel it does not truly do so.
I'm a bit late to this, but I am glad youve extended the story out a bit. Its pretty unique amongst the fanons I have read that still cover the main plot and dont wildly diverge right from the beginning. The argument could be made this this one does, but I feel it does not truly do so.
9/12 c26 bleachorange
Still calling out your earlier statement that champions cant be on the quidditch events as well. Clearly the harry-krum match caused you to forget all about your own tournament rules.
Madam Pomfrey is retired... its Healer Tonks now...
I do appreciate the focus on the story the author is putting forth here rather than being stuck on the original.
Still calling out your earlier statement that champions cant be on the quidditch events as well. Clearly the harry-krum match caused you to forget all about your own tournament rules.
Madam Pomfrey is retired... its Healer Tonks now...
I do appreciate the focus on the story the author is putting forth here rather than being stuck on the original.
9/12 c25 bleachorange
How is Krum their seeker? Triwizard Champions arent allowed to compete in the quidditch events.
How is Krum their seeker? Triwizard Champions arent allowed to compete in the quidditch events.
9/12 c58 
25Miriam1
This was an intense ride. I enjoyed your twists and turns.
This is a satisfying conclusion to a wonderful story.
Sincerely,
Miriam
25Miriam1This was an intense ride. I enjoyed your twists and turns.
This is a satisfying conclusion to a wonderful story.
Sincerely,
Miriam
9/12 c18 bleachorange
"My aurors were IMPERISHED". What the fuck? I think its means Imperiused, but man is that a weird one.
"My aurors were IMPERISHED". What the fuck? I think its means Imperiused, but man is that a weird one.
9/12 c16 bleachorange
This story is an interesting departure, but training everyone to act super formal all the time is weird, even for elites. Maybe thats my american attitude, but its honestly become a bit of an onerous hassle to read.
On another note, I recognize that astoria has dark hair in the movie, and thus its likely daphne does as well due to how hair genetics usually work, but man is it off putting after reading so many fics where daphne is a blonde and tracy a brunette. It makes me pause every time I see it.
This story is an interesting departure, but training everyone to act super formal all the time is weird, even for elites. Maybe thats my american attitude, but its honestly become a bit of an onerous hassle to read.
On another note, I recognize that astoria has dark hair in the movie, and thus its likely daphne does as well due to how hair genetics usually work, but man is it off putting after reading so many fics where daphne is a blonde and tracy a brunette. It makes me pause every time I see it.
9/12 c15 bleachorange
Ok, I thought the author was going AU here, but this is just a mistake. Harry was in his 3rd year at the start of the story, meaning the last time he saw his Uncle Vernon was when he threatened him as he was leaving Privet Drive after blowing up Marge - not when the Weasleys broke him out of his room 2nd year.
Ok, I thought the author was going AU here, but this is just a mistake. Harry was in his 3rd year at the start of the story, meaning the last time he saw his Uncle Vernon was when he threatened him as he was leaving Privet Drive after blowing up Marge - not when the Weasleys broke him out of his room 2nd year.
9/11 c10 bleachorange
Ah, its coming together. Dumbledore's goal was to use Harry (and likely examine the boy who lived for unusual magical properties) as a tool against Voldemort. How does he create and shape this tool into a weapon of his making if he has godparents? He confunds Sirius so he goes haring off after Pettigrew, leaks the information about the Longbottoms to the death eaters somehow so they will be attacked and killed, and forges and hides records so that he becomes harrys guardian and can place him in an environment he controls and begin crafting his weapon. Clearly, he had to modify memories of people along the way, making them unwitting accessories to his crimes.
All for the Greater Good, of course.
This fic has an interesting take on how Dumbledore might act if he didnt possess the capacity for the small kindnesses or his (however small and dodgy) mistrust of giving himself power.
Ah, its coming together. Dumbledore's goal was to use Harry (and likely examine the boy who lived for unusual magical properties) as a tool against Voldemort. How does he create and shape this tool into a weapon of his making if he has godparents? He confunds Sirius so he goes haring off after Pettigrew, leaks the information about the Longbottoms to the death eaters somehow so they will be attacked and killed, and forges and hides records so that he becomes harrys guardian and can place him in an environment he controls and begin crafting his weapon. Clearly, he had to modify memories of people along the way, making them unwitting accessories to his crimes.
All for the Greater Good, of course.
This fic has an interesting take on how Dumbledore might act if he didnt possess the capacity for the small kindnesses or his (however small and dodgy) mistrust of giving himself power.