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1Darknessdawns
The start of this chapter is just confusing. Earlier it was mentioned that Harry and his family were goinf to have his parents remains moved to the actual Potter crypt. Why are they still in the Godric's Hollow cemetery? And what is this about James's middle name being changed to his real father's name? This is the first its been mentioned. Before this the understanding was that Fleamont and Euphemia Black were James parents and Charlus and Dorea his uncle and aunt. Admittedly I was rather confused with both Euphemia and Dorea being from the House of Black, but the Blacks were once a large family and they could have been from different lines of it. Anyway I more than a bit confused at the moment.
1DarknessdawnsThe start of this chapter is just confusing. Earlier it was mentioned that Harry and his family were goinf to have his parents remains moved to the actual Potter crypt. Why are they still in the Godric's Hollow cemetery? And what is this about James's middle name being changed to his real father's name? This is the first its been mentioned. Before this the understanding was that Fleamont and Euphemia Black were James parents and Charlus and Dorea his uncle and aunt. Admittedly I was rather confused with both Euphemia and Dorea being from the House of Black, but the Blacks were once a large family and they could have been from different lines of it. Anyway I more than a bit confused at the moment.
5/26 c35 Darknessdawns
There is an error here. How can both Neville and Harry be 5th year male prefect?
There is an error here. How can both Neville and Harry be 5th year male prefect?
5/25 c26 Darknessdawns
Earlier in the story, during the Abbott's ball, Hannah's brother was called Charlie I do believe. In chapter 26 hes called George.
Earlier in the story, during the Abbott's ball, Hannah's brother was called Charlie I do believe. In chapter 26 hes called George.
5/21 c1 DaveC
Well i enjoyed that…..thanks
Well i enjoyed that…..thanks
5/22 c10 Pegueng
Wow. How can I have missed this story before? Incredibly well written and enticing.. Must read on. Up the iron's / Slaintë
Wow. How can I have missed this story before? Incredibly well written and enticing.. Must read on. Up the iron's / Slaintë
5/20 c34 Thereil
Crazy! I actually knew a Danielle Danforth in grade school in Milwaukee. She would have been born around 1984...DID SHE GO TO HOGWARTS?!
Crazy! I actually knew a Danielle Danforth in grade school in Milwaukee. She would have been born around 1984...DID SHE GO TO HOGWARTS?!
5/17 c42 Guest
I am sorry but I quit You just keep going on and on and on even though you finished the story chapters ago, Bye.
I am sorry but I quit You just keep going on and on and on even though you finished the story chapters ago, Bye.
5/14 c5 William L Simpson Jr
An excellent coverage of Harry’s. Negligent and recovery and treatment, etc?
An excellent coverage of Harry’s. Negligent and recovery and treatment, etc?
5/10 c11 Adenbadens
“That made Harry the only male eligible for inheriting the House of Black, unless Sirius was to have a child.”
This is incorrect. If Alice is James’ sister in this story then Neville would be in line as well, and still closer than Draco. Here and earlier you have Malfoys antagonize Harry but not Neville over this issue. Not a big deal just something I noticed.
“That made Harry the only male eligible for inheriting the House of Black, unless Sirius was to have a child.”
This is incorrect. If Alice is James’ sister in this story then Neville would be in line as well, and still closer than Draco. Here and earlier you have Malfoys antagonize Harry but not Neville over this issue. Not a big deal just something I noticed.
5/9 c58 thingsandstuff13
Enjoyed the fic overall, especially the build up of the Harry/Daphne pairing! I also liked seeing the entire friend group growing and improving rather than Harry (and maybe also Daphne) being leaps and bounds ahead of them, it felt like they were actually friends rather than just Harry and Daphne's entourage.
Enjoyed the fic overall, especially the build up of the Harry/Daphne pairing! I also liked seeing the entire friend group growing and improving rather than Harry (and maybe also Daphne) being leaps and bounds ahead of them, it felt like they were actually friends rather than just Harry and Daphne's entourage.
5/3 c58 BlissfulCatalina
Very anticlimatic. Good read though, with well thought out and developed characters.
Very anticlimatic. Good read though, with well thought out and developed characters.
5/2 c40 thingsandstuff13
Didnt love this chapter tbh, it felt like Daphne only stopped being mad at him after she heard he was filthy rich…
Didnt love this chapter tbh, it felt like Daphne only stopped being mad at him after she heard he was filthy rich…