for The House of Potter-Greengrass4/29 c7 envirosue
I love a well told story where Harry gets saved. This is beautifully written, complicated enough to be interesting. I’m looking forward to seeing how you connect Hermione and Blaize
I love a well told story where Harry gets saved. This is beautifully written, complicated enough to be interesting. I’m looking forward to seeing how you connect Hermione and Blaize
4/25 c49 Regtech
The amount of mercy from Harry and Minerva is getting ridiculous. Her rulling in giving students a free attempt at harming other students is beyond ridiculous. Nothing happened? She can only warn them on first attempt without visible damage? What has she even been doing to prevent these attacks? Nothing. The auror seems to be gone as well. Stupid.
How could harry possibly govern his own land/future town when he lets rabied dogs go?
The amount of mercy from Harry and Minerva is getting ridiculous. Her rulling in giving students a free attempt at harming other students is beyond ridiculous. Nothing happened? She can only warn them on first attempt without visible damage? What has she even been doing to prevent these attacks? Nothing. The auror seems to be gone as well. Stupid.
How could harry possibly govern his own land/future town when he lets rabied dogs go?
4/25 c34 Regtech
This chapter was cool. Any fanfic where Harry befriends a Basilisk or a big ass snake is cool in my book
This chapter was cool. Any fanfic where Harry befriends a Basilisk or a big ass snake is cool in my book
4/25 c31 Regtech
Y, Harrys security have always been bad. I did like how you mentioned how Harry kept checking the map, but unless you make it certain it kept doing it. I will assume he stopped after some time. Harry getting kidnapped was just a question of time and how lax Amelia security detail for Harry is.
Regarding Dumbledore. I kinda dislike how weak spirited you have portrayed him. Sirius was in Azkaban for far longer and he seemed way more grounded than him
Y, Harrys security have always been bad. I did like how you mentioned how Harry kept checking the map, but unless you make it certain it kept doing it. I will assume he stopped after some time. Harry getting kidnapped was just a question of time and how lax Amelia security detail for Harry is.
Regarding Dumbledore. I kinda dislike how weak spirited you have portrayed him. Sirius was in Azkaban for far longer and he seemed way more grounded than him
4/25 c11 FotoDi
While it is painful to read scenes where Harry’s emotions erupt unpredictably and he has bouts of irrational anger, I think your story is one of the most honest attempts to show realistic character development of an abused child. It is ridiculous to
read HP stories in which the protagonist has been victimized, abused, isolated, starved and exposed to multiple levels of trauma just miraculously accepts what Fate (as manipulated by APWBD) has dealt him and emerges whole, mature and balanced. Emotional growth is painful and time consuming and it is poor writing when such hurtles are either ignored or resolved almost overnight — “deus ex machina”.
So, congratulations on your complex plot which is enriched by a few characters who exhibit complex emotions.
Example: While the Weasleys have been socially, politically and economically marginalized due to choices made by their ancestors, their 6th son Ron is cosseted within his large family and can stay emotionally immature.
Example: Neville is similar to Harry in that he is basically an only child, orphaned in a war, and was present when his parents were struck down. While Neville was raised by his magical grandmother, she was angry, traumatized and paranoid so Neville was isolated during his childhood. Mme Longbottom was determined to raise Neville to be just like her son Frank, heaping expectations upon him and forcing him into a mold, e.g., she required him to use Frank’s (ill-suited) wand. Neville was not seen or allowed to grow as a unique individual producing a Scion who was by necessity observant and educated about magical society but sorely lacking in self esteem. Neville was quiet, awkward and self-deprecating. He didn’t know how to make friends. Ron aggressively staked his claim on “Harry is my best friend” and blocked most of his peers, including Neville, from forming a friendship with his own cousin! Not until your AU 3rd year….
EXAMPLE: Hermione Jean Granger is the only child of wealthy professional parents. She is bold, curious, passionate, and intellectually brilliant. As a child, she was isolated by her Genius, inexplicable magical gifts, and hyper maturity. She found companionship in Books and adults in positions of authority. Moreover, in HP Canon, Hermione is almost year older than her cadre at Hogwarts — far mor focused & intellectually mature. She is desperate to find acceptance and peers in the Magical World. Yet, shunned is horrified to learn that Professor McGonagall lied to her. No matter her brilliance, Hermione Granger is considered a second-class member of Magical Society due to her birth status. And despite Dumbledore’s and her teachers platitudes, Hermione will be marginalized by a rigid social caste system, traditional mores and legal statute. Being friends with Harry Potter may be her best strategy to find acceptance. Despite his fame, Harry is a Hot Mess and needs her loyalty. Hermione likes to be needed.
Well done
While it is painful to read scenes where Harry’s emotions erupt unpredictably and he has bouts of irrational anger, I think your story is one of the most honest attempts to show realistic character development of an abused child. It is ridiculous to
read HP stories in which the protagonist has been victimized, abused, isolated, starved and exposed to multiple levels of trauma just miraculously accepts what Fate (as manipulated by APWBD) has dealt him and emerges whole, mature and balanced. Emotional growth is painful and time consuming and it is poor writing when such hurtles are either ignored or resolved almost overnight — “deus ex machina”.
So, congratulations on your complex plot which is enriched by a few characters who exhibit complex emotions.
Example: While the Weasleys have been socially, politically and economically marginalized due to choices made by their ancestors, their 6th son Ron is cosseted within his large family and can stay emotionally immature.
Example: Neville is similar to Harry in that he is basically an only child, orphaned in a war, and was present when his parents were struck down. While Neville was raised by his magical grandmother, she was angry, traumatized and paranoid so Neville was isolated during his childhood. Mme Longbottom was determined to raise Neville to be just like her son Frank, heaping expectations upon him and forcing him into a mold, e.g., she required him to use Frank’s (ill-suited) wand. Neville was not seen or allowed to grow as a unique individual producing a Scion who was by necessity observant and educated about magical society but sorely lacking in self esteem. Neville was quiet, awkward and self-deprecating. He didn’t know how to make friends. Ron aggressively staked his claim on “Harry is my best friend” and blocked most of his peers, including Neville, from forming a friendship with his own cousin! Not until your AU 3rd year….
EXAMPLE: Hermione Jean Granger is the only child of wealthy professional parents. She is bold, curious, passionate, and intellectually brilliant. As a child, she was isolated by her Genius, inexplicable magical gifts, and hyper maturity. She found companionship in Books and adults in positions of authority. Moreover, in HP Canon, Hermione is almost year older than her cadre at Hogwarts — far mor focused & intellectually mature. She is desperate to find acceptance and peers in the Magical World. Yet, shunned is horrified to learn that Professor McGonagall lied to her. No matter her brilliance, Hermione Granger is considered a second-class member of Magical Society due to her birth status. And despite Dumbledore’s and her teachers platitudes, Hermione will be marginalized by a rigid social caste system, traditional mores and legal statute. Being friends with Harry Potter may be her best strategy to find acceptance. Despite his fame, Harry is a Hot Mess and needs her loyalty. Hermione likes to be needed.
Well done
4/25 c28 Regtech
The question is now - how bad will the big bad guy be? Harry and co is in such a seemingly position of strength?
The question is now - how bad will the big bad guy be? Harry and co is in such a seemingly position of strength?
4/24 c11 Regtech
So that partly solves why Amelia didnt find him the first 10 or 11 years, but what about then he started at hogwarts? Should we just chalk it up as it became routine for Amelia to forget about Harry?
I cant help but feel OG movie Harry was more mature, grounded, accepting and more emotionally stable. Maybe it is because let Harry explore his issues that opened up these problems? That him being allowed to explore his traumas made him less accepting of finding people he can connect with, who knew his parents?
So that partly solves why Amelia didnt find him the first 10 or 11 years, but what about then he started at hogwarts? Should we just chalk it up as it became routine for Amelia to forget about Harry?
I cant help but feel OG movie Harry was more mature, grounded, accepting and more emotionally stable. Maybe it is because let Harry explore his issues that opened up these problems? That him being allowed to explore his traumas made him less accepting of finding people he can connect with, who knew his parents?
4/24 c10 Regtech
Him having issues with Remus is understandable, but how could Harry not connect mind magic? He knows Pomfrey was subjected to it, so why didnt he assume Sirius was as well, especially when Dumbledore was there?
Again with Amelia here, why was she so easily forgiven? There is a reason for why she was in the will of all people. You dont entrust for your child to you dont trust, family or not. A certain attachment must have been placed there. So again, why didnt she go and check herself? Her "not being aware" is the most sorry excuse you could have given.
Him having issues with Remus is understandable, but how could Harry not connect mind magic? He knows Pomfrey was subjected to it, so why didnt he assume Sirius was as well, especially when Dumbledore was there?
Again with Amelia here, why was she so easily forgiven? There is a reason for why she was in the will of all people. You dont entrust for your child to you dont trust, family or not. A certain attachment must have been placed there. So again, why didnt she go and check herself? Her "not being aware" is the most sorry excuse you could have given.
4/24 c8 Regtech
And there we have it, Amelia and James wre never close. Still weird how she ended up in their contract tho. So some relation must have been developed.
I wonder who knows about the soul shards tho? Not necessarily the term horcruxes, but just items with soul shards. Amelia has already screwed up majorly with Harry, so why wouldnt she screw up again? Dumbledores worries is completely warranted
Sirius possibly getting out as a free man and given the opportunity to get healthy properly is a boon tho. He gets to train Harry and teach him about life
And there we have it, Amelia and James wre never close. Still weird how she ended up in their contract tho. So some relation must have been developed.
I wonder who knows about the soul shards tho? Not necessarily the term horcruxes, but just items with soul shards. Amelia has already screwed up majorly with Harry, so why wouldnt she screw up again? Dumbledores worries is completely warranted
Sirius possibly getting out as a free man and given the opportunity to get healthy properly is a boon tho. He gets to train Harry and teach him about life
4/24 c7 Regtech
So how will they find the horcruxes this time around? It was thx to Dumbledore and pure luck that got them through last time around. But given how easy they removed Harrys, i would assume the search will be easier
So how will they find the horcruxes this time around? It was thx to Dumbledore and pure luck that got them through last time around. But given how easy they removed Harrys, i would assume the search will be easier
4/24 c6 Regtech
So everything happened because a senile and careless Dumbledore thought it best? The guy was presented like a god in the OG, where you just couldnt beat him. Yes he could make mistakes, but he was always prepared for other possibilities. How he even got caught in the first place was weird and kinda out of character.
Everyone in this story seems to have made assumptions or forgotten things.
So everything happened because a senile and careless Dumbledore thought it best? The guy was presented like a god in the OG, where you just couldnt beat him. Yes he could make mistakes, but he was always prepared for other possibilities. How he even got caught in the first place was weird and kinda out of character.
Everyone in this story seems to have made assumptions or forgotten things.
4/24 c5 Regtech
This chapter reinforced my annoyanve regarding Amelia. See was so adamant on taking Harry, regardless his issue against herself and susan, so why didnt she check in on him earlier? Is she also compromised? Did Dumbledore have a hand in Alice being tortured into a coma or could the coma be artificial extended/induced?
In some stories, they make it so that when an animagus gets killed in their animal form. Then they will remain in the animal form, so what happened to voldemorts wand then? Did the house elfs clean it uo and throw the body somewhere? Did some other animal eat pettigrews corpse?
While i would love for Harry to leave Hogwarts to france or something, i guess that would be too much
This chapter reinforced my annoyanve regarding Amelia. See was so adamant on taking Harry, regardless his issue against herself and susan, so why didnt she check in on him earlier? Is she also compromised? Did Dumbledore have a hand in Alice being tortured into a coma or could the coma be artificial extended/induced?
In some stories, they make it so that when an animagus gets killed in their animal form. Then they will remain in the animal form, so what happened to voldemorts wand then? Did the house elfs clean it uo and throw the body somewhere? Did some other animal eat pettigrews corpse?
While i would love for Harry to leave Hogwarts to france or something, i guess that would be too much
4/24 c4 Regtech
The reason for Amelia to never come and check up on Harry falls flat. With her experience and position, one would expect certain things from her. Like being cautious and inquisitive.
The thing about the scar and his parents protection is on another much more believable
The reason for Amelia to never come and check up on Harry falls flat. With her experience and position, one would expect certain things from her. Like being cautious and inquisitive.
The thing about the scar and his parents protection is on another much more believable
4/24 c3 Regtech
So what is the reason that no one, no one, came in and checked on him? Supposed family or whatever? Minervas excuse could possibly be Dumbledore gaslighting her, but what about everyone else? Didnt his parents have any friends that could check in on him, except the core friends?
Why didnt Amelia ever bother checking in on him? She should jave been politically savy enough to take a look everything is well herself.
So what is the reason that no one, no one, came in and checked on him? Supposed family or whatever? Minervas excuse could possibly be Dumbledore gaslighting her, but what about everyone else? Didnt his parents have any friends that could check in on him, except the core friends?
Why didnt Amelia ever bother checking in on him? She should jave been politically savy enough to take a look everything is well herself.
4/23 c23 Adriaan De Belge
You'll find the platypus reference in following stories:
Granger we need to talk Ch 35
Harry and Luna against the high Inquisitor Ch 12
Harry Potter and the Game Ch 29
Harry Potter and the price of being noble Ch 34,46,50
Harry Potter and the Smallest Change Ch 9,14,16
The Lust of Gryffindors Ch 47
Maybe your story is amongst them?
Best Regards, Adriaan
You'll find the platypus reference in following stories:
Granger we need to talk Ch 35
Harry and Luna against the high Inquisitor Ch 12
Harry Potter and the Game Ch 29
Harry Potter and the price of being noble Ch 34,46,50
Harry Potter and the Smallest Change Ch 9,14,16
The Lust of Gryffindors Ch 47
Maybe your story is amongst them?
Best Regards, Adriaan