for Unlikely4/29 c89 jonbomb007
HOLY COOK, THE GREATEST OUTCOME
HOLY COOK, THE GREATEST OUTCOME
3/30 c65 Gwynbleidd99
I loved this story up until this last arc, and I think im stopping here. It feels like the story just took a strange turn and the momentum just completely dropped. Im not lying when I say the first 30 so chapters are some of my favourite reading and characterisation, I genuinely love Midoriyas slow growth and his relationships. But the constant back and forth with him is too much - he feels weaker, both emotionally and physically, than he did in canon. and even less has gone through the same emotional loop too much, and pushing away Set is the most tired story cliche imaginable, and with the length of the story I know it isnt going to be completed satisfyingly. It feels like some characters are utilised almost for no reason in the story, and then almost completely ignored for 20 chapters, while Midoriya just goes in circles and a convoluted villain plot plays in the background. I understand you want to show how realistic the struggle is in his circumstance, but his arc with one for all has gone basically no where in 30 chapters, he's had float since the beginning but i doubt he will ever use it, let alone the strength. I think you spent plenty of time showing his struggle, but at a certain point we need to feel like he's actually moving forward. I will genuinely come back to reread some of the earlier parts, but I think the pacing and the plot direction got out of hand- the villains are sadly the least interesting part of the story, and i think focusing more on Midoriya and 1A/1Zs interactions with the world and normal villains would have worked better. Really glad i read this, but yeah sad to be dropping it here.
I loved this story up until this last arc, and I think im stopping here. It feels like the story just took a strange turn and the momentum just completely dropped. Im not lying when I say the first 30 so chapters are some of my favourite reading and characterisation, I genuinely love Midoriyas slow growth and his relationships. But the constant back and forth with him is too much - he feels weaker, both emotionally and physically, than he did in canon. and even less has gone through the same emotional loop too much, and pushing away Set is the most tired story cliche imaginable, and with the length of the story I know it isnt going to be completed satisfyingly. It feels like some characters are utilised almost for no reason in the story, and then almost completely ignored for 20 chapters, while Midoriya just goes in circles and a convoluted villain plot plays in the background. I understand you want to show how realistic the struggle is in his circumstance, but his arc with one for all has gone basically no where in 30 chapters, he's had float since the beginning but i doubt he will ever use it, let alone the strength. I think you spent plenty of time showing his struggle, but at a certain point we need to feel like he's actually moving forward. I will genuinely come back to reread some of the earlier parts, but I think the pacing and the plot direction got out of hand- the villains are sadly the least interesting part of the story, and i think focusing more on Midoriya and 1A/1Zs interactions with the world and normal villains would have worked better. Really glad i read this, but yeah sad to be dropping it here.
3/29 c94 Evalarian
Coming off of chapter 94, having binge-read the entire fic post chapter 32 in just two weeks after giving it a second go, I must admit 'Unlikely' has left me with a mixed bag of emotions. Don't know if you still check the reviews -probably not - but I want to unload my thoughts and opinions into this review before I go to sleep.
First of all, the writing undeniably blew my expectations aside. Your ability to lead the individual story arcs into spectacular climaxes is something I feel everybody should aspire to learn from and incorporate into their own writing, and your prose, while incessantly hyperbolic at times, truly shined during the story's most emotional moments.
Nedzu, Shouta and the supporting cast of 1A were truly a delight to read about-and I swear, my love for Shouta doubled with how you characterised him in the Quirk Assessment. "When the man's mouth opened, it was like the cracking of granite rather than the parting of lips." Chef's kiss. That whole chapter didn't just immerse me in the story: it sunk me in it. The villains, especially Tomura and Overhaul, were a breath of fresh air and I love how they brought out the brutal, lawless reality of MHA's world.
Honestly, This story would have risen to the top of the fandom if not for the array of problems that tank the whole thing down. And there's a lot to talk about and criticise.
Pacing. For the love of god, I nearly quit this fic halfway through the USJ arc because I couldn't stand slogging my way through the SEA of exposition dumps. There's a place for fully deconstructing a character's thoughts and emotions, and it's not everywhere (please). Not to mention how each chapter got unnecessarily bogged down in the viewpoints of several people - the interrogation part was just awful because of this. It's no wonder that this fic has 643k words and only ends right after the sports festival.
The decision to put Izuku in 1A was non-sensical. I don't get why you spent 32 chapters building up Tokage and Shoto just to then isolate them from Izuku and barely use them in the USJ arc. I don't get why you made 1Z just for it to then never have any meaningful impact on the story. Above all, I don't get why you then started going in circles with Izuku's character, making him bold and confident then turning him into a trauma case several chapters later. No, I'm just not buying the explanation that he 'thought One for All forced him to be silent but it was him all along.'
It also hurts that the villains were an afterthought in the grand scheme of things and that their storylines were left on frayed ends. You cannot just leave Tomura's fate on a cliffhanger like that man. I can only guess that burnout or irl responsibilities got to you, forcing you to cap off the main storyline at the sports festival, but still, you might as well have had them killed or arrested at the end of the USJ instead.
All in all, this fic has some great moments but sadly everything in-between is a real chore to get through. I don't blame the people who left at chapter 32. The sheer length of the story is enough to put anyone's attention span through the paces; but if you become invested enough, I think the pay-off at the end is enough to make the journey worth it.
Coming off of chapter 94, having binge-read the entire fic post chapter 32 in just two weeks after giving it a second go, I must admit 'Unlikely' has left me with a mixed bag of emotions. Don't know if you still check the reviews -probably not - but I want to unload my thoughts and opinions into this review before I go to sleep.
First of all, the writing undeniably blew my expectations aside. Your ability to lead the individual story arcs into spectacular climaxes is something I feel everybody should aspire to learn from and incorporate into their own writing, and your prose, while incessantly hyperbolic at times, truly shined during the story's most emotional moments.
Nedzu, Shouta and the supporting cast of 1A were truly a delight to read about-and I swear, my love for Shouta doubled with how you characterised him in the Quirk Assessment. "When the man's mouth opened, it was like the cracking of granite rather than the parting of lips." Chef's kiss. That whole chapter didn't just immerse me in the story: it sunk me in it. The villains, especially Tomura and Overhaul, were a breath of fresh air and I love how they brought out the brutal, lawless reality of MHA's world.
Honestly, This story would have risen to the top of the fandom if not for the array of problems that tank the whole thing down. And there's a lot to talk about and criticise.
Pacing. For the love of god, I nearly quit this fic halfway through the USJ arc because I couldn't stand slogging my way through the SEA of exposition dumps. There's a place for fully deconstructing a character's thoughts and emotions, and it's not everywhere (please). Not to mention how each chapter got unnecessarily bogged down in the viewpoints of several people - the interrogation part was just awful because of this. It's no wonder that this fic has 643k words and only ends right after the sports festival.
The decision to put Izuku in 1A was non-sensical. I don't get why you spent 32 chapters building up Tokage and Shoto just to then isolate them from Izuku and barely use them in the USJ arc. I don't get why you made 1Z just for it to then never have any meaningful impact on the story. Above all, I don't get why you then started going in circles with Izuku's character, making him bold and confident then turning him into a trauma case several chapters later. No, I'm just not buying the explanation that he 'thought One for All forced him to be silent but it was him all along.'
It also hurts that the villains were an afterthought in the grand scheme of things and that their storylines were left on frayed ends. You cannot just leave Tomura's fate on a cliffhanger like that man. I can only guess that burnout or irl responsibilities got to you, forcing you to cap off the main storyline at the sports festival, but still, you might as well have had them killed or arrested at the end of the USJ instead.
All in all, this fic has some great moments but sadly everything in-between is a real chore to get through. I don't blame the people who left at chapter 32. The sheer length of the story is enough to put anyone's attention span through the paces; but if you become invested enough, I think the pay-off at the end is enough to make the journey worth it.
2/26 c32 devmax777
I read the author note, and I won't say that im not mad or frustrated, because frankly, i am frustrated. honestly your writing is a little bit complicated for me to read (or maybe i just cant comprehend without reading twice? idk.) but izuku really doesnt deserve this at all, but more than that, it states your skill as an author to evoke such strong emotions. you got me fucking going through the fucking stages of grief, soo fuck you for being a good writer. :(
I read the author note, and I won't say that im not mad or frustrated, because frankly, i am frustrated. honestly your writing is a little bit complicated for me to read (or maybe i just cant comprehend without reading twice? idk.) but izuku really doesnt deserve this at all, but more than that, it states your skill as an author to evoke such strong emotions. you got me fucking going through the fucking stages of grief, soo fuck you for being a good writer. :(
1/18 c20 R
Nice chap
Nice chap
11/18/2024 c10 Zetsubo-67
I don't know much about literature and I never read before. But the formatting of your work makes reading fluid. I devour chapter after chapter and I'm already on the tenth. It's good work, maybe I'll start reading more often ? Congrats
I don't know much about literature and I never read before. But the formatting of your work makes reading fluid. I devour chapter after chapter and I'm already on the tenth. It's good work, maybe I'll start reading more often ? Congrats
10/9/2024 c91 mxxl
peak, its so peak
peak, its so peak
78/6/2024 c32 Guest
Ni thus did not feel good
Ni thus did not feel good