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5/26 c1 Grammar Police
You meant "sound of her name." "Out" isn't grammatically correct.
10-year-old, not 10 year old.
You need a comma after "by" before the quote.
Again, you need a comma after "said" before the quote.
The comma after "up" is not necessary.
You are missing a comma after "later."
reddish-brown, not reddish brown.
A comma after "windows."
You don't need the word "that" between 'library' and 'you.'

You are not a perfect writer. You have grammatical mistakes. They don't take away from the story or hinder my understanding of its meaning. Pointing out the errors is rude and disrespectful. "People who live in glass houses shouldn't throw stones."
12/27/2022 c1 25fvdv123
Too bad, the reviews you write are longer than your stories.
2/1/2022 c1 39Rico Perrien
There has got to be more of this story. As the guy at the sushi bar said, 'I am sitting here with bait on my breath'.

By the way, thanks for your reviews.
8/23/2021 c1 51Gottahavemyncis
This is wonderful and now I want more, please? I love the imagery! Kudos!
7/10/2021 c1 18RobSt
Talking to a horse in a hoarse whisper is genius, and certainly something I would ‘borrow’ if I had a similar situation

Robert
7/8/2021 c1 noreenklose
Johannesburg, South Africa? ? ?
Isn't gender flipping enough change for you?
Sorry, I cannot buy it.
Harriet Potter-no thanks.
Johannesburg, South Africa- WAY TOO FAR AWAY from canon for my comfort. Heaven forbid that Moldyshorts wants to take over a continent instead of an island nation. ;-))

I wish you luck with your new job.
7/8/2021 c1 12The Ghostly Minion
MV,

I think this is a fun story!. I’m certain it all turns out right!

TGM

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