for The Rise of the Last Potter7/28/2021 c13 
6thunderofdeath97
pretty sure susan has red hair
not giving him the peverell lordship really makes no sense, considering he has more claim to it than the black lordship, kind of dumb tbh
6thunderofdeath97pretty sure susan has red hair
not giving him the peverell lordship really makes no sense, considering he has more claim to it than the black lordship, kind of dumb tbh
7/27/2021 c1 scyfly
this is pretty terrible writing and while it is somewhat soon to say the impression i got so far is that you want an effect but fail to write a cause
this is pretty terrible writing and while it is somewhat soon to say the impression i got so far is that you want an effect but fail to write a cause
7/27/2021 c8 Guest
This is getting too "super powered Harry" for my taste.
This is getting too "super powered Harry" for my taste.
7/27/2021 c6 Guest
Author’s notes chapters are against ’s policies. They are usually only allowed to inform of delays or for post completion words to readers. I would advice you fix this issue.
Author’s notes chapters are against ’s policies. They are usually only allowed to inform of delays or for post completion words to readers. I would advice you fix this issue.
7/27/2021 c2 Guest
Parents, or at least good ones, don’t swear around their 12 year old children. Even if they are dead.
Parents, or at least good ones, don’t swear around their 12 year old children. Even if they are dead.
7/27/2021 c14 Me Myself and I
Whoever I am...? Well, I'm myself (and me and I as well, but that's another story)... But jokes aside, I didn't expect you to go with my suggestion, there is difference between a love triangle and a full blown harem, not to mention that having a meaningful relationship with someone takes time, two wives will be taxing already (that could be mitigated by making them bisexual, so they can entertain themselve among each other, but that is not the point we are discussing), any more and Harry would need to have multiple bodies to keep up with his wives and get anything done. That suggestion was more to show what I was envisioning for the inheritance rules than anything else.
Actually, the last part was the most relevant one, even if it was a joke. You said that Hermione will be like a sister to Harry, but if she straight wouldn't she develop a crush over a very alpha Harry? Having Harry turn her down is not very conductive any kind of positive relationship, a problem that would be dodged by making her a lesbian.
Anyway, this is your story... and I'm enjoying it, so keep it going.
Whoever I am...? Well, I'm myself (and me and I as well, but that's another story)... But jokes aside, I didn't expect you to go with my suggestion, there is difference between a love triangle and a full blown harem, not to mention that having a meaningful relationship with someone takes time, two wives will be taxing already (that could be mitigated by making them bisexual, so they can entertain themselve among each other, but that is not the point we are discussing), any more and Harry would need to have multiple bodies to keep up with his wives and get anything done. That suggestion was more to show what I was envisioning for the inheritance rules than anything else.
Actually, the last part was the most relevant one, even if it was a joke. You said that Hermione will be like a sister to Harry, but if she straight wouldn't she develop a crush over a very alpha Harry? Having Harry turn her down is not very conductive any kind of positive relationship, a problem that would be dodged by making her a lesbian.
Anyway, this is your story... and I'm enjoying it, so keep it going.
7/27/2021 c1 GreengrassRebel
Will Harry be in a polyamorous relationship with Daphne, Fleur and maybe Susan or simply have 3 wives? I found the first one more difficult to get right but a lot more rewarding when it does. The other can work but there is too much "Harry's too much for one woman" (barf). The "Harry needs multiple wives for multiple lordships" is a passable yet bland excuse that has been used too much.
Will Harry be in a polyamorous relationship with Daphne, Fleur and maybe Susan or simply have 3 wives? I found the first one more difficult to get right but a lot more rewarding when it does. The other can work but there is too much "Harry's too much for one woman" (barf). The "Harry needs multiple wives for multiple lordships" is a passable yet bland excuse that has been used too much.
7/27/2021 c14 5J2451
Loving the story with the sass from Harry and interaction between him, Salazar and Helga. However I would critique having him swearing since he was 12/13 and I doubt they’d know the words or at least use them. For Harry specifically he did not exactly grow up in an environment that would approve him using it plus the school professors wouldn’t have approved.
Sorry just a thing about age appropriate language, if he was 15 I could see the use of it.
Please keep going as enjoying and want more. Good luck!
5J2451Loving the story with the sass from Harry and interaction between him, Salazar and Helga. However I would critique having him swearing since he was 12/13 and I doubt they’d know the words or at least use them. For Harry specifically he did not exactly grow up in an environment that would approve him using it plus the school professors wouldn’t have approved.
Sorry just a thing about age appropriate language, if he was 15 I could see the use of it.
Please keep going as enjoying and want more. Good luck!
7/27/2021 c13 2Acheron Agrotera
Please add Susan bones to the Harry pairing.
I love the story so far.
2Acheron AgroteraPlease add Susan bones to the Harry pairing.
I love the story so far.