for A Tale of Wings and Fangs9/10 c22 Omnomphone
Something that confuses me greatly here. Two things actually.
1: Harry KNOWS McLaggen was the fourth student that jumped him when he lost his wand, but now he conveniently doesn’t? Hmm, alright, possibly forgot their name bc McLaggen is canonically both a douche and extremely forgettable.
However
2: Harry literally spent time going over Blood Feuds with Neville prior to the first task. That is a VERY big thing to just conveniently forget, and he seems to know enough about them to threaten Fudge with one, so why does he conveniently forget them to the point Gabrielle is now explaining them to him?
Honestly, I like the story, but #2 alone tellers me that everything after Ch.22 needs to be rewritten, or heavily edited, because forgetting something that big, which itself could actually be a major plot device, seems short-sighted.
Something that confuses me greatly here. Two things actually.
1: Harry KNOWS McLaggen was the fourth student that jumped him when he lost his wand, but now he conveniently doesn’t? Hmm, alright, possibly forgot their name bc McLaggen is canonically both a douche and extremely forgettable.
However
2: Harry literally spent time going over Blood Feuds with Neville prior to the first task. That is a VERY big thing to just conveniently forget, and he seems to know enough about them to threaten Fudge with one, so why does he conveniently forget them to the point Gabrielle is now explaining them to him?
Honestly, I like the story, but #2 alone tellers me that everything after Ch.22 needs to be rewritten, or heavily edited, because forgetting something that big, which itself could actually be a major plot device, seems short-sighted.
9/4 c13 mrmayortheiv
Man, until now I was enjoying this story, but how many terrible fanfiction cliches and tropes can you fit in one chapter? It's just too much.
Man, until now I was enjoying this story, but how many terrible fanfiction cliches and tropes can you fit in one chapter? It's just too much.
8/23 c4 Hi
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7/30 c27 Guest
I hope you're able to break through your blocks and continue with this amazing story, luck be with you,
I hope you're able to break through your blocks and continue with this amazing story, luck be with you,
7/26 c1 Fox Sage 1
I agree with you on the Animagus thing. There really isn't a lot of stories where Harry is an Animagus (and I think I have found almost if not all of them).
And the reason I agree with you is because Animagus is my favorite piece of magic from the Harry Potter world.
I agree with you on the Animagus thing. There really isn't a lot of stories where Harry is an Animagus (and I think I have found almost if not all of them).
And the reason I agree with you is because Animagus is my favorite piece of magic from the Harry Potter world.
46/19 c12 Soul Sendant
the wand breaking after getting jumped would by itself be blood feud worth easily.
the wand breaking after getting jumped would by itself be blood feud worth easily.
6/19 c10 Soul Sendant
fuck the trash ministry and there registration requirements for animagus dont be a sheep for fucks sake
fuck the trash ministry and there registration requirements for animagus dont be a sheep for fucks sake
6/19 c5 Soul Sendant
500 galleons is nothing, and his trust vault had thousands if not hundreds of thousands of galleons
500 galleons is nothing, and his trust vault had thousands if not hundreds of thousands of galleons
6/19 c4 Soul Sendant
magicals dont get sick like normal people lol so no one is going to buy that excuse for not going
magicals dont get sick like normal people lol so no one is going to buy that excuse for not going