for A Tale of Wings and Fangs8/16/2021 c5 N. A. Wennerholm
So Harry's animagus worms at Quetzalcoatl. Which is a mythological creature from Central American Native Americans.
So Harry's animagus worms at Quetzalcoatl. Which is a mythological creature from Central American Native Americans.
8/16/2021 c5 Glitner
i really hope you make him do some rituals like making him see with out glasses and maybe some health rituals like making him like he was supposed to look like ? if he grew up healthy ? maybe handsome rituals haha ? xD always fancied when harry is looking superior to others .. get him some new cloths ! :D
anyways love the story keep em coming !
i really hope you make him do some rituals like making him see with out glasses and maybe some health rituals like making him like he was supposed to look like ? if he grew up healthy ? maybe handsome rituals haha ? xD always fancied when harry is looking superior to others .. get him some new cloths ! :D
anyways love the story keep em coming !
8/15/2021 c5 
4Manetail
I must say, excellent work so far! I have been keeping up with this story since you first posted it and it flows well while also showing good promise for the future.
I am waiting anxiously to see how you will have Harry meet Gabrielle and hope you keep up the good work!
4ManetailI must say, excellent work so far! I have been keeping up with this story since you first posted it and it flows well while also showing good promise for the future.
I am waiting anxiously to see how you will have Harry meet Gabrielle and hope you keep up the good work!
8/15/2021 c3 2A10riddick
Good chapter!
I was half expecting the Dursley's to be petrified because of his glasses being in the way.
2A10riddickGood chapter!
I was half expecting the Dursley's to be petrified because of his glasses being in the way.
8/15/2021 c3 Smutley Do-Wrong
There's a semi cliché writing advice/goal: "to show, not tell a story".
You might attempt pondering and trying to implement this in your narrative.
A lot so far, kind of reads like an introduction/summary.
My opinion is, that "showing"(action) than "telling" is more time consuming and more "work".
So considering fanfics are not paying authors, I feel they are allowed to go into a summary kind of style in places where the content is needed to inform readers but not worthy of the extra time for authors to write it out in a full action sort of writing style.
It only helps a tiny bit half step toward "showing" not "telling", perhaps more so in simply reading a tiny bit less like author narrating/summarizing.
But in one sentence where you referred to "Harry". I oddly read it while my brain switched back and forth between reading "he" vs "Harry".
It's but a tiny difference, but for my mind, "he" in that sentence made it feel little more active(showing) vs summary/passive (telling).
While I'm generally not a fan of first person writing style. I suppose it might push the prose more into "showing not telling".
Although I favor uses of first person POV, but not from beginning to end of entire story stuck in first person.
An analogy of my gist above:
Try picturing your text like you're filming it, you're the director(story teller/show-er) slash camera operator cinematographer. You're the camera fly-drone on the wall (or anywhere), showing the characters in action, so POV can change (camera the eyes of a character) including switching from character to character(POV changes), or camera POV can be off to the side, pointed toward actor(s)/character(s).
There's a semi cliché writing advice/goal: "to show, not tell a story".
You might attempt pondering and trying to implement this in your narrative.
A lot so far, kind of reads like an introduction/summary.
My opinion is, that "showing"(action) than "telling" is more time consuming and more "work".
So considering fanfics are not paying authors, I feel they are allowed to go into a summary kind of style in places where the content is needed to inform readers but not worthy of the extra time for authors to write it out in a full action sort of writing style.
It only helps a tiny bit half step toward "showing" not "telling", perhaps more so in simply reading a tiny bit less like author narrating/summarizing.
But in one sentence where you referred to "Harry". I oddly read it while my brain switched back and forth between reading "he" vs "Harry".
It's but a tiny difference, but for my mind, "he" in that sentence made it feel little more active(showing) vs summary/passive (telling).
While I'm generally not a fan of first person writing style. I suppose it might push the prose more into "showing not telling".
Although I favor uses of first person POV, but not from beginning to end of entire story stuck in first person.
An analogy of my gist above:
Try picturing your text like you're filming it, you're the director(story teller/show-er) slash camera operator cinematographer. You're the camera fly-drone on the wall (or anywhere), showing the characters in action, so POV can change (camera the eyes of a character) including switching from character to character(POV changes), or camera POV can be off to the side, pointed toward actor(s)/character(s).
8/14/2021 c4 soulofarthur
This was a good chapter, if a bit dull. That’s more so to do with you having to build up to it first though. Anyways, interesting story so far. Looking forward to reading it.
This was a good chapter, if a bit dull. That’s more so to do with you having to build up to it first though. Anyways, interesting story so far. Looking forward to reading it.
8/14/2021 c4 5Irish Cris
My guess is a toss up either a Occamy or a Quetzalcoatl I'm honestly leaning more towards an Occamy as they can magically alter their size which would seem more benifical in the long run. But that's just me.
5Irish CrisMy guess is a toss up either a Occamy or a Quetzalcoatl I'm honestly leaning more towards an Occamy as they can magically alter their size which would seem more benifical in the long run. But that's just me.
8/14/2021 c3 Otagema
Man, I am looking forward to seeing this story turn out since we don't get that many HarryxGabrielle fics, nor do we see much completed. If you are looking for inspiration, go look at "Hope" by Jeconais—it is one of the greatest, if not the greatest, HarryxGabrielle fic out there.
Man, I am looking forward to seeing this story turn out since we don't get that many HarryxGabrielle fics, nor do we see much completed. If you are looking for inspiration, go look at "Hope" by Jeconais—it is one of the greatest, if not the greatest, HarryxGabrielle fic out there.
8/13/2021 c3 1TheLastPeverell
I’m enjoying the start to this story and am intrigued to see how it plays out. I particularly enjoyed the scene with Harry’s eyes turning feline. Nice touch. Keep up the good work.
1TheLastPeverellI’m enjoying the start to this story and am intrigued to see how it plays out. I particularly enjoyed the scene with Harry’s eyes turning feline. Nice touch. Keep up the good work.