for Pray For The Wicked7/1 c116 Sunny JS
God, I hope Harry's trim isn't too out there! Also, can we plz get rid of the worst duo in existence, in Cornelius & Dolores.
God, I hope Harry's trim isn't too out there! Also, can we plz get rid of the worst duo in existence, in Cornelius & Dolores.
6/30 c116 Guest
That was…one hell of a eulogy. Admittedly, I’m a beer in but that brought a tear to my eye. Well written and a good story to it.
That was…one hell of a eulogy. Admittedly, I’m a beer in but that brought a tear to my eye. Well written and a good story to it.
7/1 c116 
1DeadFish37
Brilliant funeral service. But now I'm left wondering where Harry has gone, if not to the ministry hearing. The ministry has messed up by leaving Harry under Augusta's guardianship. When did that even become official?
1DeadFish37Brilliant funeral service. But now I'm left wondering where Harry has gone, if not to the ministry hearing. The ministry has messed up by leaving Harry under Augusta's guardianship. When did that even become official?
7/1 c116 Rayga
oh man
if you cut out 400-500k of words from this story it would be at least five times better
oh man
if you cut out 400-500k of words from this story it would be at least five times better
6/18 c115 2Gabilian
I don't think you thought through the whole obliviation thing. Three and a half million dead according to this chapter (which seems far too high based on previous chapters though I suppose there could have been a lot going on "off screen"). So the obliviators are going to change the memories of every person who knew each dead victim, i.e. tens of millions, in dozens of countries all over the world. Presumably there may be a few hundred obliviators, which may actually be high depending on what the magical population is in the UK. It would take decades to track down every person to change their memories, even with time turners. Magic or no magic, they would never find everyone. Not even close. They would need to have some sort of wide scale obliviation, something in the water supply for example, but something like that would be pretty ridiculous as well.
Other than that glaring absurdity, these past few chapters have been enjoyable. Better than the ones before. G.
2GabilianI don't think you thought through the whole obliviation thing. Three and a half million dead according to this chapter (which seems far too high based on previous chapters though I suppose there could have been a lot going on "off screen"). So the obliviators are going to change the memories of every person who knew each dead victim, i.e. tens of millions, in dozens of countries all over the world. Presumably there may be a few hundred obliviators, which may actually be high depending on what the magical population is in the UK. It would take decades to track down every person to change their memories, even with time turners. Magic or no magic, they would never find everyone. Not even close. They would need to have some sort of wide scale obliviation, something in the water supply for example, but something like that would be pretty ridiculous as well.
Other than that glaring absurdity, these past few chapters have been enjoyable. Better than the ones before. G.
6/1 c96 DisgruntledReadr
Ugh, I just can't anymore with this, and damn if that doesn't suck to say. After falling in love with the first half of this story it's taken me several hundred thousand words to fall back out, but here we are.
Harry flip flopping every two chapters on whether he's a monster or not is so tired at this point I'm afraid my eyes will roll out of my head if read about it one more time. Like I was with it for quite a while, but at this point he's literally like, oh no, I killed someone who was going on an indiscriminate murder/torture spree! I'm just like them! Get the fuck out of here with that already. It's so tiring to watch him find and then lose his resolve every couple chapters, often for no fucking reason. You can only write the same thing so many times before it loses all meaning - kind of like how the blood, gore, and torture are so cartoony now. I get that you think its super cool, but blasting us with a firehose of it just takes away all the impact. This is the most horiffic thing! No, wait, THIS IS! NO NO, guys, look, this is even WORSE! GTFO with the cheap shock value, if shit's that common in this world then why the fuck is everyone so shocked by it?
Also, I literally thought I misunderstood Zeus's plan at first since it didn't make any sense, but nope, his strategy is literally just total fucking war against Hogwarts, half a dozen cities, and the ministry itself. Like holy fuck, if they are able to get such a force together then how the hell have they not already taken over? They have overwhelming strength, overwhelming numbers, the ability to perfectly predict everyone's movements from Remus to Harry to Neville to Bones, and they're able to breach Hogwarts no problem? It literally makes no sense at all - if they are capable of all this, why the hell haven't they long since taken over? They're just having a full on war with the law and winning, after all. The answer is plot contrivance, of course. How does it make sense that 'All of the Death Eaters couldn't take on Voldemort together', 'Dumbledore is the only one more powerful than Voldemort', AND 'Dumbledore is no deterrent against the Death Eaters' are all true? It's nonsensical, and every chapter you pulled out more and more Death Eaters from you infinite bag and said, 'Oh, they're also attacking THIS place to a stunning degree of effect', I found it harder and harder to wrap my head around it.
The biggest problem is how this story is BARELY about Harry anymore. You give us like 400,000 words with 85-90% of the scenes written from his perspective or at least featuring him, but now it feels like we're lucky if even half the story has anything to do with him. I don't want to read about Albus having a pointless duel with no consequences with Ares. I don't care about Rufus one fuck, every time he has some scene where he hmms and haas over how Harry's such a bad boy I skim at best. And, as funny as it was reading Nott Sr. hit Bones with the 'teleports behind you, nothing personal kid' meme, I don't really give a shit if Harry isn't there to see it, never mind how dumb that whole thing was anyway. Do you really think 2K word long fight scenes between side characters Harry doesn't care about are interesting to read? They aren't. This damn thing would be done if you'd stop widening out the perspective so much that it's impossible to give one shit about the characters.
Splitting Harry up from any of the characters we know to go play strictly with OCs you made up has really been a turning point here, and not for the better. I was invested before because he had interesting relationships with the people around him and did interesting things, but for the last I don't know how long it's just been one long series of 'Will Harry make it out of this situation against X number of no-names!?' scenes, and like duh, of course he will. The risk of him getting humiliated felt WAY more intense in the first half than this will he live/escape BS, especially since he always does so right away. The exception here was his stay at Grimmauld Place, which isn't a surprise since, again, there were actually characters we cared about INTERACTING with Harry there. Him sharing snark with a painting or meeting with old man Parkinson has none of that.
In conclusion, you've lost the plot here. What was a story that focused the overwhelming majority of its time following one character as he struggled towards finding the balance between the horrible things he's suffered and the good person he wants to see himself as, now we have endless scenes rehashing the same beats over and over, side plots focusing on characters nobody gives a shit about, events that abandon all sensibility in trade for cheap shock value & which are so wide as to move at a glacial pace yet so shallow that even when things do happen they feel totally without set up, and a plot which has stagnated as you've become too enamored with your villains to let Harry just fucking kill them already - seriously, after all that, he gets his hands on Dolohov and PUNCHES him a bunch? It feels like you've fallen in love with the OCs and super OOC characters you've made up, manually retarded everyone on one side of this conflict, and decided having Harry constantly flip flop on every conviction he's struggled towards is a suitable replacement for ACTUAL development of his character or relationships.
TLDR: The last third of this has been a shitshow & I miss when the story was about the main character interacting with people we care about rather than a Michael Bay film that uses buckets of blood and teenage levels of edge to mask the lack of meaningful moments.
Ugh, I just can't anymore with this, and damn if that doesn't suck to say. After falling in love with the first half of this story it's taken me several hundred thousand words to fall back out, but here we are.
Harry flip flopping every two chapters on whether he's a monster or not is so tired at this point I'm afraid my eyes will roll out of my head if read about it one more time. Like I was with it for quite a while, but at this point he's literally like, oh no, I killed someone who was going on an indiscriminate murder/torture spree! I'm just like them! Get the fuck out of here with that already. It's so tiring to watch him find and then lose his resolve every couple chapters, often for no fucking reason. You can only write the same thing so many times before it loses all meaning - kind of like how the blood, gore, and torture are so cartoony now. I get that you think its super cool, but blasting us with a firehose of it just takes away all the impact. This is the most horiffic thing! No, wait, THIS IS! NO NO, guys, look, this is even WORSE! GTFO with the cheap shock value, if shit's that common in this world then why the fuck is everyone so shocked by it?
Also, I literally thought I misunderstood Zeus's plan at first since it didn't make any sense, but nope, his strategy is literally just total fucking war against Hogwarts, half a dozen cities, and the ministry itself. Like holy fuck, if they are able to get such a force together then how the hell have they not already taken over? They have overwhelming strength, overwhelming numbers, the ability to perfectly predict everyone's movements from Remus to Harry to Neville to Bones, and they're able to breach Hogwarts no problem? It literally makes no sense at all - if they are capable of all this, why the hell haven't they long since taken over? They're just having a full on war with the law and winning, after all. The answer is plot contrivance, of course. How does it make sense that 'All of the Death Eaters couldn't take on Voldemort together', 'Dumbledore is the only one more powerful than Voldemort', AND 'Dumbledore is no deterrent against the Death Eaters' are all true? It's nonsensical, and every chapter you pulled out more and more Death Eaters from you infinite bag and said, 'Oh, they're also attacking THIS place to a stunning degree of effect', I found it harder and harder to wrap my head around it.
The biggest problem is how this story is BARELY about Harry anymore. You give us like 400,000 words with 85-90% of the scenes written from his perspective or at least featuring him, but now it feels like we're lucky if even half the story has anything to do with him. I don't want to read about Albus having a pointless duel with no consequences with Ares. I don't care about Rufus one fuck, every time he has some scene where he hmms and haas over how Harry's such a bad boy I skim at best. And, as funny as it was reading Nott Sr. hit Bones with the 'teleports behind you, nothing personal kid' meme, I don't really give a shit if Harry isn't there to see it, never mind how dumb that whole thing was anyway. Do you really think 2K word long fight scenes between side characters Harry doesn't care about are interesting to read? They aren't. This damn thing would be done if you'd stop widening out the perspective so much that it's impossible to give one shit about the characters.
Splitting Harry up from any of the characters we know to go play strictly with OCs you made up has really been a turning point here, and not for the better. I was invested before because he had interesting relationships with the people around him and did interesting things, but for the last I don't know how long it's just been one long series of 'Will Harry make it out of this situation against X number of no-names!?' scenes, and like duh, of course he will. The risk of him getting humiliated felt WAY more intense in the first half than this will he live/escape BS, especially since he always does so right away. The exception here was his stay at Grimmauld Place, which isn't a surprise since, again, there were actually characters we cared about INTERACTING with Harry there. Him sharing snark with a painting or meeting with old man Parkinson has none of that.
In conclusion, you've lost the plot here. What was a story that focused the overwhelming majority of its time following one character as he struggled towards finding the balance between the horrible things he's suffered and the good person he wants to see himself as, now we have endless scenes rehashing the same beats over and over, side plots focusing on characters nobody gives a shit about, events that abandon all sensibility in trade for cheap shock value & which are so wide as to move at a glacial pace yet so shallow that even when things do happen they feel totally without set up, and a plot which has stagnated as you've become too enamored with your villains to let Harry just fucking kill them already - seriously, after all that, he gets his hands on Dolohov and PUNCHES him a bunch? It feels like you've fallen in love with the OCs and super OOC characters you've made up, manually retarded everyone on one side of this conflict, and decided having Harry constantly flip flop on every conviction he's struggled towards is a suitable replacement for ACTUAL development of his character or relationships.
TLDR: The last third of this has been a shitshow & I miss when the story was about the main character interacting with people we care about rather than a Michael Bay film that uses buckets of blood and teenage levels of edge to mask the lack of meaningful moments.
6/3 c114 17griffin blackwood
Love that Molly is continuing to be Harry’s champion while andromeda is Continuing to be clouded by her emotions as most fics reverse those roles
17griffin blackwoodLove that Molly is continuing to be Harry’s champion while andromeda is Continuing to be clouded by her emotions as most fics reverse those roles
5/31 c113 ToeJam
This story sucks. Author brags about being 12 chapters ahead and yet hardly posts anything. You can skip 10 chapters at a time and still not miss anything.
This story sucks. Author brags about being 12 chapters ahead and yet hardly posts anything. You can skip 10 chapters at a time and still not miss anything.
5/24 c109 Volunteer Insomniac
idk if it's just me but this arc is gonna be hard for me to read if it's just Harry acting like this is his his timeline or a dream and ignoring the consequences of acting like his normal self and jumping onto all tge people hes lost or never got to meet
idk if it's just me but this arc is gonna be hard for me to read if it's just Harry acting like this is his his timeline or a dream and ignoring the consequences of acting like his normal self and jumping onto all tge people hes lost or never got to meet