for A World Away11/26 c1 Lawhai
i would like to congratulate you on your membership in the, quite exclusive, club for authors that can write a first chapter/prologue that is actually interesting.
i would like to congratulate you on your membership in the, quite exclusive, club for authors that can write a first chapter/prologue that is actually interesting.
10/30 c16 Nai Darkor
like something Augustus would do
- Augusta
which means of it is ever compromised,
- if it is
Too sad it isn’t July anymore. Then I would have wished everyone a merry Christmas!
like something Augustus would do
- Augusta
which means of it is ever compromised,
- if it is
Too sad it isn’t July anymore. Then I would have wished everyone a merry Christmas!
10/30 c36 
35Zeromaru Chaos Mode
Reasonable and interesting Dumbledore, strong but not OP or really terribly OOC Harry, Ron's stupidity cut off at the knees before it could fester, Hermione constrained reasonably, Neville taking his grandmother to task and getting his own wand, just the right amount of "High Society" bullshit to be interesting and not overbearing or boring...
Definitely have a rare treasure here. Was honestly expecting timeskips and summary chapters here and there to push Harry to Ciri's side sooner but given they have at least most of a day to see each other basically every day, and they're parallel improving even if its in differing directions...works just as well.
Very palatable, especially for those who know little to nothing of The Witcher. Well done so far. Hope you dont hit a burn-out point before this is done, this is very good.
35Zeromaru Chaos ModeReasonable and interesting Dumbledore, strong but not OP or really terribly OOC Harry, Ron's stupidity cut off at the knees before it could fester, Hermione constrained reasonably, Neville taking his grandmother to task and getting his own wand, just the right amount of "High Society" bullshit to be interesting and not overbearing or boring...
Definitely have a rare treasure here. Was honestly expecting timeskips and summary chapters here and there to push Harry to Ciri's side sooner but given they have at least most of a day to see each other basically every day, and they're parallel improving even if its in differing directions...works just as well.
Very palatable, especially for those who know little to nothing of The Witcher. Well done so far. Hope you dont hit a burn-out point before this is done, this is very good.
10/30 c15 1Nai Darkor
"You get no points for subtly."
- subtlety
Poor Harry tortured himself. Truly a great friend.
1Nai Darkor"You get no points for subtly."
- subtlety
Poor Harry tortured himself. Truly a great friend.
10/30 c13 Nai Darkor
He would to
- too
'You seemed
- wrong quotation mark
Dumbledore as watcher for a club is rare.
He would to
- too
'You seemed
- wrong quotation mark
Dumbledore as watcher for a club is rare.
10/30 c11 Nai Darkor
None should be able to see you though."
- you, though.
"that's not right.
- That’s
Time to destroy the classic Harry Potter plot.
None should be able to see you though."
- you, though.
"that's not right.
- That’s
Time to destroy the classic Harry Potter plot.
10/30 c6 35Zeromaru Chaos Mode
huh. a reasonable and seemingly non-maliciously manipulative Dumbledore.
dont see *that* very often in crossovers...
since Harry cant read too well (or maybe a charm is on the document obscuring its legibility) he's gotta rely on Good Faith but...well, here's hoping, since Dumbledore instantly and in detail owned up to his massive oversighted screwup; he's one of the Good Dumbledores.
35Zeromaru Chaos Modehuh. a reasonable and seemingly non-maliciously manipulative Dumbledore.
dont see *that* very often in crossovers...
since Harry cant read too well (or maybe a charm is on the document obscuring its legibility) he's gotta rely on Good Faith but...well, here's hoping, since Dumbledore instantly and in detail owned up to his massive oversighted screwup; he's one of the Good Dumbledores.
10/30 c8 Nai Darkor
'I was hoping you could tell me.
- wrong quotation mark
I think that Harry will most likely be unable to gain his canon friendship with Ron. Hermione might be hard as well…
'I was hoping you could tell me.
- wrong quotation mark
I think that Harry will most likely be unable to gain his canon friendship with Ron. Hermione might be hard as well…
10/30 c7 Nai Darkor
Many of them blame you for their master death
- master’s
as he took a few steps away and closed her eyes
- his eyes
Harry will learn to break dimensional barriers to reach his bestest friend (and nothing else).
Many of them blame you for their master death
- master’s
as he took a few steps away and closed her eyes
- his eyes
Harry will learn to break dimensional barriers to reach his bestest friend (and nothing else).
10/30 c6 Nai Darkor
with such sensitivity too magic
- to
Let’s hope this won’t go into an inheritance arc.
with such sensitivity too magic
- to
Let’s hope this won’t go into an inheritance arc.