for A World Away11/29 c34 KingSayan
Hi, I have raed all of your stories. And they are pretty good. specially "Blood Stained", " The Swallow And The Dragon" & "Let's Try This Again". I also love this story. Your writing in this story is the best work you have put out so far.
My only problem with this story so far is that it's pacing is too slow. I mean even after 250k words Harry still hasn't manage to go to Ciri's world and their relationship still hasn't passed the puppy love stage.
If you are reading this post, please SPEED UP PACE A BIT.
Good bye. Have a good day.
Hi, I have raed all of your stories. And they are pretty good. specially "Blood Stained", " The Swallow And The Dragon" & "Let's Try This Again". I also love this story. Your writing in this story is the best work you have put out so far.
My only problem with this story so far is that it's pacing is too slow. I mean even after 250k words Harry still hasn't manage to go to Ciri's world and their relationship still hasn't passed the puppy love stage.
If you are reading this post, please SPEED UP PACE A BIT.
Good bye. Have a good day.
11/26 c34 vswey
arrgghhh, I skipped ahead a bit but is chapter 34 and they're still only 12? that's just too many words for not enough forward progress for me.
arrgghhh, I skipped ahead a bit but is chapter 34 and they're still only 12? that's just too many words for not enough forward progress for me.
11/25 c3 vswey
I like the story so far, but I can't help but feel the way you have harry interact with magic is a bit silly. granted, I've always found the shouting of spells to feel a little silly. however, you have harry speaking out whole sentences as spells like he is giving coands to an AI or something. I get that he is just in the learning phase, so maybe how he interacts with magic will change? I'm just imagining him in some conflict down the line, it'd be pretty ridiculous if he had to speak out a whole paragraph of instructions for a 'spell'.
I like the story so far, but I can't help but feel the way you have harry interact with magic is a bit silly. granted, I've always found the shouting of spells to feel a little silly. however, you have harry speaking out whole sentences as spells like he is giving coands to an AI or something. I get that he is just in the learning phase, so maybe how he interacts with magic will change? I'm just imagining him in some conflict down the line, it'd be pretty ridiculous if he had to speak out a whole paragraph of instructions for a 'spell'.
11/15 c28 reptoholic
Hope he makes sure their mind shields are strong and has oaths so they don't steal hid ideas!
Hope he makes sure their mind shields are strong and has oaths so they don't steal hid ideas!
11/15 c27 reptoholic
keep up the great work! Really hope he heals the longbottoms soon and gains some credit. If they are using his rune sequence He should have some credit with ron's work
keep up the great work! Really hope he heals the longbottoms soon and gains some credit. If they are using his rune sequence He should have some credit with ron's work
11/3 c5 John
Incredible so far!
Incredible so far!