for DxD: Solomon's Game1/20 c61 Goodsend
You know, having basically read this story from chapter 1 to now in like a month, I remember some author notes where you claim not to use plot armor for your characters. Looking at this arc, it feels you are not just using plot armor but also bashing other pantheons (you did disregard loki).
Other than that, it's an interesting read, and I await to reading the repercussions of this side-arc.
Also how come Ignium is so afraid of the boosted gear, but is strong enough to fight gods. You would think he would have let Issei and Vali kill each other instead of stopping them. Its not like he knew issei had a way of reviving her.
You know, having basically read this story from chapter 1 to now in like a month, I remember some author notes where you claim not to use plot armor for your characters. Looking at this arc, it feels you are not just using plot armor but also bashing other pantheons (you did disregard loki).
Other than that, it's an interesting read, and I await to reading the repercussions of this side-arc.
Also how come Ignium is so afraid of the boosted gear, but is strong enough to fight gods. You would think he would have let Issei and Vali kill each other instead of stopping them. Its not like he knew issei had a way of reviving her.
1/21 c61 ZenithSerac
1. Ignium has a crazy line up in his army my head snapped up when I heard Adolf fucking Hitler
2. I feel there's no reason for Ignium to be this powerful I get he's supposed to be the final boss or something but I feel he's too powerful I hope an explanation for his power comes up later on
3. I just realised Issei's Seal of Solomon ability is maxed out so he can use it instantly on any unholy Abrahamic being no matter how strong they are so technically he could just defeat Ignium like that and he also could of used it on Vali as well
Theory: As the creators for the void system exist out of time theoretically Issei could be the I in the V.O.I.D system and he just sent it into the past of his timeline. I know it's realistically not the case but I just thought of it randomly didn't really put mush thought into it
1. Ignium has a crazy line up in his army my head snapped up when I heard Adolf fucking Hitler
2. I feel there's no reason for Ignium to be this powerful I get he's supposed to be the final boss or something but I feel he's too powerful I hope an explanation for his power comes up later on
3. I just realised Issei's Seal of Solomon ability is maxed out so he can use it instantly on any unholy Abrahamic being no matter how strong they are so technically he could just defeat Ignium like that and he also could of used it on Vali as well
Theory: As the creators for the void system exist out of time theoretically Issei could be the I in the V.O.I.D system and he just sent it into the past of his timeline. I know it's realistically not the case but I just thought of it randomly didn't really put mush thought into it
1/19 c61 Guest
gotta admit I kinda support Ignium and his goals, at least partially and especially here in the war to return the sacred gears that Indra stole
gotta admit I kinda support Ignium and his goals, at least partially and especially here in the war to return the sacred gears that Indra stole
1/19 c61 Yetsush
Bit ridiculous that the Snakes could actually go toe to toe with the Gods, even if the Gods were weakened. Ignium is far too powerful as he is no different from Michael and Azazel as being an original angel and yet becoming a demon enhanced him this far. Also that fear ability, they are Gods so why do they need to see to fight? They could just close their eyes at the few times they looked away and used their senses. Buy whatever, plot armor for the Snakes it is.
Bit ridiculous that the Snakes could actually go toe to toe with the Gods, even if the Gods were weakened. Ignium is far too powerful as he is no different from Michael and Azazel as being an original angel and yet becoming a demon enhanced him this far. Also that fear ability, they are Gods so why do they need to see to fight? They could just close their eyes at the few times they looked away and used their senses. Buy whatever, plot armor for the Snakes it is.
1/20 c61 PTYN
Good chapter, I really liked the fight scenes.
But I can't help but feel a lot of this 'war' was asspull after asspull. No offense, a lot is good, but it seems like a lot of the focus is being put on this OC, when Issei barely even knows of them. Like nothing in these recent chapters, pretty much any of the main cast knows of it.
I suppose trying to fill up time in between Issei losing Solomon and his gears power and getting it back is important, but straight up skipping over any and all interaction with the main people in the story? I'll keep reading but it seems that the Snake of Adam and Ignuim are too OP for what they're worth. I get people losing faith in their deities, but a demon, alibiet a really powerful one, but allowing him to go toe to toe with some of the most powerful deities, albiet weakened, in the Hindu pantheon, with little repercussions? Wtf?
They seem to be too big for their britches. Some explanation or more explanation would be helpful imo.
Good chapter overall tho, liked the creative powers.
Good chapter, I really liked the fight scenes.
But I can't help but feel a lot of this 'war' was asspull after asspull. No offense, a lot is good, but it seems like a lot of the focus is being put on this OC, when Issei barely even knows of them. Like nothing in these recent chapters, pretty much any of the main cast knows of it.
I suppose trying to fill up time in between Issei losing Solomon and his gears power and getting it back is important, but straight up skipping over any and all interaction with the main people in the story? I'll keep reading but it seems that the Snake of Adam and Ignuim are too OP for what they're worth. I get people losing faith in their deities, but a demon, alibiet a really powerful one, but allowing him to go toe to toe with some of the most powerful deities, albiet weakened, in the Hindu pantheon, with little repercussions? Wtf?
They seem to be too big for their britches. Some explanation or more explanation would be helpful imo.
Good chapter overall tho, liked the creative powers.
1/20 c61 Devilscreed
I commend you for trying to use German but as a native speaker I have a few corrections to make:
"Aufladung! Lassen Sie ihnen keine Sekunde Zeit, sich zu organisieren und so viel Boden wie möglich zu erobern!"
"Aufladung" is a hilarious mistranslation to me because it is the electrical translation of "Charge" and not used in this context. The second part is more grammar related since the part after "...zu organisieren und ..." would keep the opponents as the subject and doesn't tell his own soldiers to take as much ground as they can. A better way to get the intention across would be:
"Vorwärts! Lassen Sie ihnen keine Sekunde Zeit, sich zu organisieren und erobern Sie so viel Boden wie möglich!"
The second part is simpler. All the words are correct but a native speaker would use the noun "Bewegung!" instead of the verb "Bewegen!". As such the correct way would be:
"Sergeant! Los geht's! There is no time to waste! Bewegung! Bewegung! Bewegung!"
I commend you for trying to use German but as a native speaker I have a few corrections to make:
"Aufladung! Lassen Sie ihnen keine Sekunde Zeit, sich zu organisieren und so viel Boden wie möglich zu erobern!"
"Aufladung" is a hilarious mistranslation to me because it is the electrical translation of "Charge" and not used in this context. The second part is more grammar related since the part after "...zu organisieren und ..." would keep the opponents as the subject and doesn't tell his own soldiers to take as much ground as they can. A better way to get the intention across would be:
"Vorwärts! Lassen Sie ihnen keine Sekunde Zeit, sich zu organisieren und erobern Sie so viel Boden wie möglich!"
The second part is simpler. All the words are correct but a native speaker would use the noun "Bewegung!" instead of the verb "Bewegen!". As such the correct way would be:
"Sergeant! Los geht's! There is no time to waste! Bewegung! Bewegung! Bewegung!"
1/20 c61 
2Xerzo LotCN
I mean that was way over done and way too much lol
Sorry
But uh taking a part of the god system back and restoring a large part of it probably you know is good at least
Also sorry but a massive slog to read
2Xerzo LotCNI mean that was way over done and way too much lol
Sorry
But uh taking a part of the god system back and restoring a large part of it probably you know is good at least
Also sorry but a massive slog to read
1/19 c61 8Heliel42
as Hindu i didn't know what Blasphemy was until i read this. I agree that Deva are easy to defeat with enough power but you seriously underestimated powers of Vishnu and Shiva, you straight up ignoring many passive hax and weapons like Brhmaastra or Third Eyes.
8Heliel42as Hindu i didn't know what Blasphemy was until i read this. I agree that Deva are easy to defeat with enough power but you seriously underestimated powers of Vishnu and Shiva, you straight up ignoring many passive hax and weapons like Brhmaastra or Third Eyes.
1/19 c61 1Ezoren
This Demon really picked up historical figures in Human History like Palworld/Pokemon. (He even got Mustache Man?)
As much as I like seeing the ongoings of what's happening of events in the world beyond Issei's POV, I still would've liked to see just his progression in the chapter and what he would be doing/done to overcome his weakened state.
I guess the short of it: we have a ton of Story Progression, but not enough "Character Progression". The main party did have down-time, but we can't really call it a 'Break' chapter to settle down from the previous events since we're privy to a war-event before our eyes.
Then again, it is called 'The Snake that bit India' so I can only guess of some After-Action Report from our party's side.
1EzorenThis Demon really picked up historical figures in Human History like Palworld/Pokemon. (He even got Mustache Man?)
As much as I like seeing the ongoings of what's happening of events in the world beyond Issei's POV, I still would've liked to see just his progression in the chapter and what he would be doing/done to overcome his weakened state.
I guess the short of it: we have a ton of Story Progression, but not enough "Character Progression". The main party did have down-time, but we can't really call it a 'Break' chapter to settle down from the previous events since we're privy to a war-event before our eyes.
Then again, it is called 'The Snake that bit India' so I can only guess of some After-Action Report from our party's side.
1/12 c60 Snake Eyes
After binge reading this fanfic, I can only say this, I WANT MORE!
After binge reading this fanfic, I can only say this, I WANT MORE!
1/12 c60 Goodsend
Gotta be honest, I am having trouble getting past the fact 70 million people have been killed by the virus and the only thing we have seen so far is about other countries sending aid and borders getting shut down.
You would think the world would be up in arms about that sort of tragedy. Not to mention how neighbouring countries would be reacting to it.
And even the supernatural world would be alert. Even enemy factions would be weary.
Interested to see how our protagonist will react to this event, as well as the fact he is going to need help from Ignium. The similarity between his parents getting killed because of something out of their control and Indians now going through the same horror in the millions would certainly shake him.
Gotta be honest, I am having trouble getting past the fact 70 million people have been killed by the virus and the only thing we have seen so far is about other countries sending aid and borders getting shut down.
You would think the world would be up in arms about that sort of tragedy. Not to mention how neighbouring countries would be reacting to it.
And even the supernatural world would be alert. Even enemy factions would be weary.
Interested to see how our protagonist will react to this event, as well as the fact he is going to need help from Ignium. The similarity between his parents getting killed because of something out of their control and Indians now going through the same horror in the millions would certainly shake him.
1/7 c60 ZenithSerac
How depressing. I wonder if Jesus will have an important role in this story because he was mentioned a lot early on and I'm still wondering what that Boosted Gear ability is that that he got after beating Vali but you never told us; as his Sacred Gear was sealed. Oh and I'm also excited for Issei to use any of the DLC perks there is just so much to look forward too I really am glad I found this amazing Fanfic.
How depressing. I wonder if Jesus will have an important role in this story because he was mentioned a lot early on and I'm still wondering what that Boosted Gear ability is that that he got after beating Vali but you never told us; as his Sacred Gear was sealed. Oh and I'm also excited for Issei to use any of the DLC perks there is just so much to look forward too I really am glad I found this amazing Fanfic.
1/6 c60 2Xerzo LotCN
Bulk of the chapter was oc world building but ok
I thought this would be you know crafting or growth to go beyond himself for when his power returned i mean sure he said he would so i guess off screen lol
2Xerzo LotCNBulk of the chapter was oc world building but ok
I thought this would be you know crafting or growth to go beyond himself for when his power returned i mean sure he said he would so i guess off screen lol