for Holiday Hijinx12/31/2021 c1 
3s0uleater564
My honest review: you have some good parts. This feels like a rough draft. Like the plotting section of a story. The conversations were hard to get through. You have some dialogues with supporting descriptions but most of them were just floating and it was hard to follow. I know it’s hard to make it seem chaotic if the dialogue is broke up with details but it really does make the story when the little details are there. Also what happened to Patty? And what exactly was going through their minds juggling all their families around. The story kinda feels like one of those dreams that are all over the place but still just one dream.
3s0uleater564My honest review: you have some good parts. This feels like a rough draft. Like the plotting section of a story. The conversations were hard to get through. You have some dialogues with supporting descriptions but most of them were just floating and it was hard to follow. I know it’s hard to make it seem chaotic if the dialogue is broke up with details but it really does make the story when the little details are there. Also what happened to Patty? And what exactly was going through their minds juggling all their families around. The story kinda feels like one of those dreams that are all over the place but still just one dream.