for Fleur De Lis5/3/2024 c1 lukeanimelover
Id have prefered if you made prequals to give some back up information. Also isnt 7th year the last year at hogwarts? Get your facts right.
Id have prefered if you made prequals to give some back up information. Also isnt 7th year the last year at hogwarts? Get your facts right.
3/28/2024 c8 Nimbus2023
The plot for this is decently interesting but the characters just feel like robots and their dialogue feels so stilted. I could overlook the fact that at least three characters in the story are supposed to have finished Hogwarts the previous year but I find the whole Grindlewald mentor arc a bit hard to accept. There is also the fact that this version of Harry seems to be better than everyone around him and everyone in the supporting cast seems to either revere or fear him, to be honest, it just seems so cliche. I think I'm going to stop reading here.
The plot for this is decently interesting but the characters just feel like robots and their dialogue feels so stilted. I could overlook the fact that at least three characters in the story are supposed to have finished Hogwarts the previous year but I find the whole Grindlewald mentor arc a bit hard to accept. There is also the fact that this version of Harry seems to be better than everyone around him and everyone in the supporting cast seems to either revere or fear him, to be honest, it just seems so cliche. I think I'm going to stop reading here.
3/18/2024 c21 Naiden
I hope your Harry learns how to be humble. Seriously every time he's talking to someone he's always talking to them as if they're his lesser.
He always has to bring up his own skill in each subject as someone else is doing something. That's the type of behaviour that in real life makes someone undesirable to talk to.
I hope your Harry learns how to be humble. Seriously every time he's talking to someone he's always talking to them as if they're his lesser.
He always has to bring up his own skill in each subject as someone else is doing something. That's the type of behaviour that in real life makes someone undesirable to talk to.
3/13/2024 c33 
1Jeremiah Malkai
This was an excellent story, and the first I've read of Grindy being a mentor figure.
I really liked how Justin wasn't an afterthought and was a little badass in his own right.
Thank you for all the hard work.
1Jeremiah MalkaiThis was an excellent story, and the first I've read of Grindy being a mentor figure.
I really liked how Justin wasn't an afterthought and was a little badass in his own right.
Thank you for all the hard work.
3/4/2024 c7 Z0d
Yeah, 16 years of hate and neglect so strong that Harry wants to remove the Potter from his name and be a full-fledged back, just gets tossed aside and overwritten with Pettigrew’s death lmao… very beliveable
Yeah, 16 years of hate and neglect so strong that Harry wants to remove the Potter from his name and be a full-fledged back, just gets tossed aside and overwritten with Pettigrew’s death lmao… very beliveable
1/12/2024 c33 Guest
What a greqt story.
What a greqt story.
1/5/2024 c11 Guest
This is a really great and truly different story. Glad I found it. Be proud of your ideas and writing
This is a really great and truly different story. Glad I found it. Be proud of your ideas and writing
1/4/2024 c1 Guest
“Mon and me,” not “Mom and I.”
“Mon and me,” not “Mom and I.”
1/5/2024 c34 tiran187
What a show! I hope Harry and Justin also get some tutelage from Dumbledore as well I think they could see each other being friends after fighting together.
What a show! I hope Harry and Justin also get some tutelage from Dumbledore as well I think they could see each other being friends after fighting together.