for Naruto: The Leveling Shinobi7/14/2022 c8 Ahtu
Aaand story bloody fkn ruined... The most boring element, and he doesn't even bother to ask Kakashi any leading questions.
There were some shaky things up until now, like some very questionable grammar. But they were annoyances, not deal breakers. This however? This is a blatant deal breaker. On its own, it has no redeeming qualities. No interesting jutsu. Its only value lies in how it interacts with other elements to create bloodlines. Also cuts away from his canon talents so harshly, that it loses all consistency. He might as well not have been Kushina's/Minato's son, not been a Jinchuriki, or even been training to be a ninja.
To justify this move/make it work, you're gonna have to break the original lore so badly, that you have to make it bend over backwards.
The only reason it makes sense in the story, is because Naruto is an idiot and a fool. And I should have realized it was gonna go to shit when he was picked as the MC.
I don't usually vent like this, but you had the temerity to get readers hope up just slightly(where he seemed to be improving). Only to then pull the rug out from under us. He was warned that this choice was crucial, he was given the choice, and he didn't even think to ask for details. And had him make the dumbest choice in the book, after a long line of questionable choices.
Naruto MC novels with questionable grammar? NEVER AGAIN. I never want to feel pushed into writing another review like this.
Aaand story bloody fkn ruined... The most boring element, and he doesn't even bother to ask Kakashi any leading questions.
There were some shaky things up until now, like some very questionable grammar. But they were annoyances, not deal breakers. This however? This is a blatant deal breaker. On its own, it has no redeeming qualities. No interesting jutsu. Its only value lies in how it interacts with other elements to create bloodlines. Also cuts away from his canon talents so harshly, that it loses all consistency. He might as well not have been Kushina's/Minato's son, not been a Jinchuriki, or even been training to be a ninja.
To justify this move/make it work, you're gonna have to break the original lore so badly, that you have to make it bend over backwards.
The only reason it makes sense in the story, is because Naruto is an idiot and a fool. And I should have realized it was gonna go to shit when he was picked as the MC.
I don't usually vent like this, but you had the temerity to get readers hope up just slightly(where he seemed to be improving). Only to then pull the rug out from under us. He was warned that this choice was crucial, he was given the choice, and he didn't even think to ask for details. And had him make the dumbest choice in the book, after a long line of questionable choices.
Naruto MC novels with questionable grammar? NEVER AGAIN. I never want to feel pushed into writing another review like this.
7/10/2022 c21 
2SonJubbi
I’d like to see a necromancy enchantment or upgrade of some kind, like use some of your shadows abilities for yourself. Also I think in this moment in time get iron touch and some soft form of weaponry that he can change into iron, he could just say he hardens the weapon the same as himself as he gets ‘better’ with it. Lastly I would love to see Naruto finding some type of dungeon in the future be it a natural one found in the world or something that a quest gifts him whatever the case may be. I look forward to your next chapter and have a good one!
2SonJubbiI’d like to see a necromancy enchantment or upgrade of some kind, like use some of your shadows abilities for yourself. Also I think in this moment in time get iron touch and some soft form of weaponry that he can change into iron, he could just say he hardens the weapon the same as himself as he gets ‘better’ with it. Lastly I would love to see Naruto finding some type of dungeon in the future be it a natural one found in the world or something that a quest gifts him whatever the case may be. I look forward to your next chapter and have a good one!
7/6/2022 c7 3LoudOpinions
If it's not lightning, I'll vomit. (not actually true but lightning IS cool)
3LoudOpinionsIf it's not lightning, I'll vomit. (not actually true but lightning IS cool)
7/6/2022 c3 LoudOpinions
Kunai are sharp regardless of who throws them. He couldn't move one of his arms, his body (too much), and his other arm was occupied with the fuma shuriken (if I'm not mistaken). If the kunai had his Zabuza, that could've been a serious wound.
Kunai are sharp regardless of who throws them. He couldn't move one of his arms, his body (too much), and his other arm was occupied with the fuma shuriken (if I'm not mistaken). If the kunai had his Zabuza, that could've been a serious wound.
7/5/2022 c21 The Ouroboros Guild
I honestly went in expecting an OP Naruto within a few chapters. While I wouldn't have minded if it was, I also find myself pleased it wasn't. Can't wait for more.
I honestly went in expecting an OP Naruto within a few chapters. While I wouldn't have minded if it was, I also find myself pleased it wasn't. Can't wait for more.
7/4/2022 c4 madstack
Talk about being railroaded. Unless there's an Ashborn in this world, too, I don't see any reason for this to happen outside of 'it happened in Solo Leveling'.
Talk about being railroaded. Unless there's an Ashborn in this world, too, I don't see any reason for this to happen outside of 'it happened in Solo Leveling'.
7/3/2022 c21 suckstobeacritic
I honestly thought you dropped the story before I noticed this chapter... Then I read the whole thing and see you did, simply promoting a different one at the end...
I honestly thought you dropped the story before I noticed this chapter... Then I read the whole thing and see you did, simply promoting a different one at the end...
6/29/2022 c18 2Areyem Meyera
This doesn’t feel like Naruto. He feels more like an OC.
He has a bit of Naruto’s personality, but the lying part is so not him.
I get it, it’s a mission and a test, he had to lie to kurotsuchi to achive his goal. But it’s not so like him not to feel guilt, compassion or pity. This is the boy that have been lied to whole his life right? He doesn’t hesitate, knor stutter when lying, feel not even the slightest of guilt. That and many other things make him more like your OC than Naruto.
2Areyem MeyeraThis doesn’t feel like Naruto. He feels more like an OC.
He has a bit of Naruto’s personality, but the lying part is so not him.
I get it, it’s a mission and a test, he had to lie to kurotsuchi to achive his goal. But it’s not so like him not to feel guilt, compassion or pity. This is the boy that have been lied to whole his life right? He doesn’t hesitate, knor stutter when lying, feel not even the slightest of guilt. That and many other things make him more like your OC than Naruto.
6/28/2022 c21 JFJ123
This is so good! I’m so glad it had so many updates in such a short time! Keep up the amazing work, you have some real talent for story writing!
This is so good! I’m so glad it had so many updates in such a short time! Keep up the amazing work, you have some real talent for story writing!
6/26/2022 c4 wstiglet
I didn't realize he was gonna be a necromancer too. That doesn't fit Naruto in the slightest. Sure his schtik is one man army but that's just clones.
I didn't realize he was gonna be a necromancer too. That doesn't fit Naruto in the slightest. Sure his schtik is one man army but that's just clones.
6/26/2022 c1 wstiglet
To be honest I never really understood gamer fics that try to nerf the progression and MC would have. Naruto with the right guidance can be an utter monster without Kurama. But with him he should devastate the opposition with actual help. He just never gets that until the middle of Shippuden. Jiraiya Gives him the bare minimum in advanced technique but he hammers in the Basics that he should have gotten before, he comes back almost an S rank ninja just from the basics and two jutsu, Shadow clone and the Rasengan. Then he learns sage mode and Frog Kata and can go toe to toe with six paths of Pain. Sure he loses but Pain has the Rinnegan and years of experience.
If you have Naruto up his INT a little he'll probably notice the trick to Shadow Clones and it's game over for that world. Naruto can SKYROCKET his skill and power with a gamer system even a nerfed one and shadow Clones.
To be honest I never really understood gamer fics that try to nerf the progression and MC would have. Naruto with the right guidance can be an utter monster without Kurama. But with him he should devastate the opposition with actual help. He just never gets that until the middle of Shippuden. Jiraiya Gives him the bare minimum in advanced technique but he hammers in the Basics that he should have gotten before, he comes back almost an S rank ninja just from the basics and two jutsu, Shadow clone and the Rasengan. Then he learns sage mode and Frog Kata and can go toe to toe with six paths of Pain. Sure he loses but Pain has the Rinnegan and years of experience.
If you have Naruto up his INT a little he'll probably notice the trick to Shadow Clones and it's game over for that world. Naruto can SKYROCKET his skill and power with a gamer system even a nerfed one and shadow Clones.
6/26/2022 c21 guestinator
Scribe Of Death - That happened because the author can't correctly write a gamer story. He doesn't want OP Naruto which is what would happen with a non constantly nerfed Gamer Naruto.
Instead he adds power ups to others to counteract Gamer but he then nerfs Gamer along with intelligence and grind which sghpuld have only been done if no one got buffs.
At this point it needs a rewrite to fix the stupidity. Worse he has levels to buy chapters which is illegal and no doubt been reported by now.
Trying that with good stories is shameful, doing so with this? Outright disgusting.
Scribe Of Death - That happened because the author can't correctly write a gamer story. He doesn't want OP Naruto which is what would happen with a non constantly nerfed Gamer Naruto.
Instead he adds power ups to others to counteract Gamer but he then nerfs Gamer along with intelligence and grind which sghpuld have only been done if no one got buffs.
At this point it needs a rewrite to fix the stupidity. Worse he has levels to buy chapters which is illegal and no doubt been reported by now.
Trying that with good stories is shameful, doing so with this? Outright disgusting.