for Out in the open2/17/2022 c2 
17Cypher DS
So I'm kinda digging the idea of Lailani being as aggressive as Abia... only in all things romantic. Abia will tie you down to the bed for red-hot love making but Lailani will handcuff you to the sofa for a Hallmark romcom marathon.
A very fun wrap-up to Lesley Crush's story. All the secluded grotto "speed dates" cracked me up and were awesome spots for showing off everyone's character. My favorites were Lillian's vampire questionaire and Suki blue screening at the thought of a world beyond anime.
For Abia's date, I liked the idea of hard cutting away and picking up after Lesley had been chased down and manhandled. I wonder if a quick glimpse of Lesley after Abia's chase (i.e. Zoey finds him shivering in the bushes or with his swimmsuit snatched) would have really amped up the punchline. Candy's quippy retort to Lesley's assailant was to the point and effective. It totally worked for the moment.
17Cypher DSSo I'm kinda digging the idea of Lailani being as aggressive as Abia... only in all things romantic. Abia will tie you down to the bed for red-hot love making but Lailani will handcuff you to the sofa for a Hallmark romcom marathon.
A very fun wrap-up to Lesley Crush's story. All the secluded grotto "speed dates" cracked me up and were awesome spots for showing off everyone's character. My favorites were Lillian's vampire questionaire and Suki blue screening at the thought of a world beyond anime.
For Abia's date, I liked the idea of hard cutting away and picking up after Lesley had been chased down and manhandled. I wonder if a quick glimpse of Lesley after Abia's chase (i.e. Zoey finds him shivering in the bushes or with his swimmsuit snatched) would have really amped up the punchline. Candy's quippy retort to Lesley's assailant was to the point and effective. It totally worked for the moment.
1/26/2022 c1 Cypher DS
I never thought I'd see the day where Lailani gives into her inner horndog and ogles a dude's butt, but here we are - Out in the Open! I figured Candace's brothers would be as desirable as catnip to the ladies of Inna de Poona, but I never saw that twist coming about his sexuality! I wonder who'll come out first, or who'll get caught in their lie.
I really dig the unique voice you've given each hunie, especially Lillian's over-the-top grouchiness and Zoey's mystical vibe. Polly seems to be describing Lesley for the first time, so I wonder if he came into the family after her babysitting days, or maybe he's changed so much that she doesn't remember him either. I can't wait to see him interact with Suki and the younger girls.
I never thought I'd see the day where Lailani gives into her inner horndog and ogles a dude's butt, but here we are - Out in the Open! I figured Candace's brothers would be as desirable as catnip to the ladies of Inna de Poona, but I never saw that twist coming about his sexuality! I wonder who'll come out first, or who'll get caught in their lie.
I really dig the unique voice you've given each hunie, especially Lillian's over-the-top grouchiness and Zoey's mystical vibe. Polly seems to be describing Lesley for the first time, so I wonder if he came into the family after her babysitting days, or maybe he's changed so much that she doesn't remember him either. I can't wait to see him interact with Suki and the younger girls.