for Fairborn Adventures1/15/2023 c56 god eater
i know that they love each other, but their personalities really are them being together and that's it. no offence though, because harry i get it, but marlene i think is just as attracted to power as it is in his body and his chivalry thing. but nothing else, her only friend here is flo and acquaintances in the quidditich team but nothing else. but at least she has something to fight for! that's a plus i think and the grief gave a little bit more personality than just harry is my boyfriend
i know that they love each other, but their personalities really are them being together and that's it. no offence though, because harry i get it, but marlene i think is just as attracted to power as it is in his body and his chivalry thing. but nothing else, her only friend here is flo and acquaintances in the quidditich team but nothing else. but at least she has something to fight for! that's a plus i think and the grief gave a little bit more personality than just harry is my boyfriend
1/15/2023 c55 god eater
your characterization of dumbledore is getting one dimensional here and he's not getting any more productive i think it would have been great if they just come clean but if only dumbledore shows an ounce of trust to harry it's so tiring after a while for a manipulative dumbledore to accomplish absolutely nothing
your characterization of dumbledore is getting one dimensional here and he's not getting any more productive i think it would have been great if they just come clean but if only dumbledore shows an ounce of trust to harry it's so tiring after a while for a manipulative dumbledore to accomplish absolutely nothing
1/13/2023 c43 god eater
i think the reason why the romance i s unbearable for ME is that it was too fast like, i didnt expect a pure romance fic where she was hard to get but she just a crush so fast that harry needed to get to her and his saving people thing would not have allowed her to be abused by lestrange ergo they are overcompensating for their lost time in the romance. theyre so dependent on each other that it's unhealthy, but maybe it's intended because harry was so deprived of personal love in his old life i guess we can count that but it still remains that the romance is insufferable for me personally, no offence author.
i think the reason why the romance i s unbearable for ME is that it was too fast like, i didnt expect a pure romance fic where she was hard to get but she just a crush so fast that harry needed to get to her and his saving people thing would not have allowed her to be abused by lestrange ergo they are overcompensating for their lost time in the romance. theyre so dependent on each other that it's unhealthy, but maybe it's intended because harry was so deprived of personal love in his old life i guess we can count that but it still remains that the romance is insufferable for me personally, no offence author.
1/13/2023 c42 god eater
damn voldemort is great in this one
damn voldemort is great in this one
1/13/2023 c40 god eater
god i cant stand a simpering romantic harry with a good plot it's just too much but perhaps it's something id have to suffer through
god i cant stand a simpering romantic harry with a good plot it's just too much but perhaps it's something id have to suffer through
1/13/2023 c34 God eater
This is why tom riddle will always be a piece of shit to me no matter what redeeming shit people do in fics, unless of course theyre raised by harry or others. His bigoted hatred is a part of him that will not let go
This is why tom riddle will always be a piece of shit to me no matter what redeeming shit people do in fics, unless of course theyre raised by harry or others. His bigoted hatred is a part of him that will not let go
1/5/2023 c90 Soham
Was that a reference to the Cadmean Victory Fanfiction?
Was that a reference to the Cadmean Victory Fanfiction?
1/5/2023 c85 
1DreamRiders
This is getting to dark man. I like it. But it seems that Marlene has become a weakness to Harry. She has made him into someone that does not care and his love for her will destroy the Magical World.
1DreamRidersThis is getting to dark man. I like it. But it seems that Marlene has become a weakness to Harry. She has made him into someone that does not care and his love for her will destroy the Magical World.
1/4/2023 c5 4Pen NameG
good fucking god is that one hell of a cliche introduction to the female protagonist.
when the author screams at the reader that two characters are going to get together it's very off putting.
and that is this entire chapter.
new chapter name "THESE TWO GONNA FUCK EXPRESS"
4Pen NameGgood fucking god is that one hell of a cliche introduction to the female protagonist.
when the author screams at the reader that two characters are going to get together it's very off putting.
and that is this entire chapter.
new chapter name "THESE TWO GONNA FUCK EXPRESS"
1/4/2023 c3 Pen NameG
that's a long ass speech about Hogwarts houses for a guy who was supposedly raised on the continent in a completely different culture
that's a long ass speech about Hogwarts houses for a guy who was supposedly raised on the continent in a completely different culture
1/4/2023 c3 Pen NameG
"that's awfully fucking convenient" should be the title for this entire chapter
"that's awfully fucking convenient" should be the title for this entire chapter
1/2/2023 c99 Stormzy
Decent work and the horcrux revival ending was a nice touch. However your whole "the wizarding world hates us" idea didn't really make much sense.
Decent work and the horcrux revival ending was a nice touch. However your whole "the wizarding world hates us" idea didn't really make much sense.
1/2/2023 c90 Stormzy
Writing quality improves as the chapters go on. Not in my top 5 HP works but this one is still unique and well done. The foundation was a little shaky but it got better as it continued.
Writing quality improves as the chapters go on. Not in my top 5 HP works but this one is still unique and well done. The foundation was a little shaky but it got better as it continued.
1/1/2023 c3 Stormzy
This work just feels rushed. Weird seeing as the word count is high in itself but this chapter for sure is rushed. It's like you have a good plot idea and quality writing. But you squander it by rushing the main plot forward without making it sound realistic. "Oh you're living by yourself random stranger we don't know, come live with us." If you actually took the time to develop the main plot realistically this work could be amazing.
This work just feels rushed. Weird seeing as the word count is high in itself but this chapter for sure is rushed. It's like you have a good plot idea and quality writing. But you squander it by rushing the main plot forward without making it sound realistic. "Oh you're living by yourself random stranger we don't know, come live with us." If you actually took the time to develop the main plot realistically this work could be amazing.
1/1/2023 c1 Stormzy
You have Harry going back in time. Was there really a point in the Weasley and Hermione bashing before he time travels? I like the set up to Harry "becoming more powerful" before he goes but the needless bashing definitely makes me question you as the author's plot decisions further down the line.
You have Harry going back in time. Was there really a point in the Weasley and Hermione bashing before he time travels? I like the set up to Harry "becoming more powerful" before he goes but the needless bashing definitely makes me question you as the author's plot decisions further down the line.