for Fairborn Adventures2/6/2022 c1 Premedicated
I'm a sucker for time travel fics, but I've never read Harry/Marlene story. It's never been a huge interest of mine, but since I loved your other fic so much, I'll happily follow along!
I'm a sucker for time travel fics, but I've never read Harry/Marlene story. It's never been a huge interest of mine, but since I loved your other fic so much, I'll happily follow along!
2/6/2022 c2 oaab
Well, good start. I like the story till now.
And here comes my personal opinions :-)
The name choice absolutely sucks, I absolutely hate the name “Harry”. It’s so lame! Magicals more often then not have quite unique names… I understand when it would be shorter version for another normal name, but this… in the past I wrote something similar in a review, and I got a reply that “if the name is good enough for the British Prince then it is a good name for the MC” or something like that. Well, that British Prince name is in fact “Henry” and is only called Harry (probably for the PR or something like that). I thought it is common knowledge, but apparently outside Britain it isn’t?
I would prefer if his first name in this story would be something else.
Another thing is that, this story takes place in the UK right? So British English should be used… in this chapter he used “elevator” but in British English it’s “lift”. Many fanfic authors use “pants” when they write/talk about “trousers”, but “pants” in Brit mean underwear…
I personally find it very slightly irritating… it looses the charm in some ways for me. And when someone actually dare to use “soccer” for football then I really want to smash the screen…
But damn, I would love a story where “Harry” doesn’t actually like his parents. Not hate or anything, but simply doesn’t like them as people. People generally don’t talk negatively about the dead (besides Snape), so he could find very different people than he expected.
I also prefer when he doesn’t tell anyone who he really is (maybe beside his wife).
And it would be absolutely hilarious if Lily actually tried to seduce him, and he is like “eww my mum wants to shag me!”. LOL
I don’t really like when Lily and James have this feeling that they want to protect him for some (in their opinion) weird reason. I hope it not like that in this fic. There is one story in which Harry told Lily who he really is, and that was when she still hated James. And because of that things happened and they never got together.
Ok, in general good start of the story, and author can’t please everyone. And I probably will keep reading (if you will not call football by a different weird name).
But I have a question, so in the Peverell vault there isn’t anything else? Only some money? No books? No nothing? They didn’t own any land or something?
Well, good start. I like the story till now.
And here comes my personal opinions :-)
The name choice absolutely sucks, I absolutely hate the name “Harry”. It’s so lame! Magicals more often then not have quite unique names… I understand when it would be shorter version for another normal name, but this… in the past I wrote something similar in a review, and I got a reply that “if the name is good enough for the British Prince then it is a good name for the MC” or something like that. Well, that British Prince name is in fact “Henry” and is only called Harry (probably for the PR or something like that). I thought it is common knowledge, but apparently outside Britain it isn’t?
I would prefer if his first name in this story would be something else.
Another thing is that, this story takes place in the UK right? So British English should be used… in this chapter he used “elevator” but in British English it’s “lift”. Many fanfic authors use “pants” when they write/talk about “trousers”, but “pants” in Brit mean underwear…
I personally find it very slightly irritating… it looses the charm in some ways for me. And when someone actually dare to use “soccer” for football then I really want to smash the screen…
But damn, I would love a story where “Harry” doesn’t actually like his parents. Not hate or anything, but simply doesn’t like them as people. People generally don’t talk negatively about the dead (besides Snape), so he could find very different people than he expected.
I also prefer when he doesn’t tell anyone who he really is (maybe beside his wife).
And it would be absolutely hilarious if Lily actually tried to seduce him, and he is like “eww my mum wants to shag me!”. LOL
I don’t really like when Lily and James have this feeling that they want to protect him for some (in their opinion) weird reason. I hope it not like that in this fic. There is one story in which Harry told Lily who he really is, and that was when she still hated James. And because of that things happened and they never got together.
Ok, in general good start of the story, and author can’t please everyone. And I probably will keep reading (if you will not call football by a different weird name).
But I have a question, so in the Peverell vault there isn’t anything else? Only some money? No books? No nothing? They didn’t own any land or something?
2/6/2022 c1 ddsurvivor
Interesting. Very detailed and wonderful "college background" for Harry Potter, I mean apprentice ship. And then the last 250-500 words was the famous Potter luck that brings him to the 1975! I love it so far. Just like your last novel "Power, Freedom and a French Flower", it is going on my favorites. Even though I usually wait for a novel to hit 100,000 words or 15 chapters before I put it in my favorites. Usually leave it pinned up in a web tab.
Thanks for the dramatic prologue!
Interesting. Very detailed and wonderful "college background" for Harry Potter, I mean apprentice ship. And then the last 250-500 words was the famous Potter luck that brings him to the 1975! I love it so far. Just like your last novel "Power, Freedom and a French Flower", it is going on my favorites. Even though I usually wait for a novel to hit 100,000 words or 15 chapters before I put it in my favorites. Usually leave it pinned up in a web tab.
Thanks for the dramatic prologue!
2/6/2022 c2 
4LordeBruno
Thank you very much! Thank you so much...
You have no idea how your stories helped me overcome my depression in the year 2021, I was feeling really bad, I didn't feel like doing anything, but thanks to you, I managed to entertain myself for hours and more hours reading your fanfic. It was thanks to you that I was probably able to get the bad thoughts out of my head.
And I'm loving your new story, please don't give up!
(I am still not fluent in English, ignore some mistakes, I tried to write the best I could).
4LordeBrunoThank you very much! Thank you so much...
You have no idea how your stories helped me overcome my depression in the year 2021, I was feeling really bad, I didn't feel like doing anything, but thanks to you, I managed to entertain myself for hours and more hours reading your fanfic. It was thanks to you that I was probably able to get the bad thoughts out of my head.
And I'm loving your new story, please don't give up!
(I am still not fluent in English, ignore some mistakes, I tried to write the best I could).
2/6/2022 c2 Hraicene
Hello. Great first two chapters. I already like where it's going to. As english isn't my native language, i won't write for too long. Just know that your first story was a blast and it will be a pleasure to read this one too.
Thanks a lot.
Hello. Great first two chapters. I already like where it's going to. As english isn't my native language, i won't write for too long. Just know that your first story was a blast and it will be a pleasure to read this one too.
Thanks a lot.
2/6/2022 c2 TheHiddenWookie
As I followed your last story so shall I follow this one. Truly your stories are among the best I've read on this site and I read each the moment I get the notification it has been updated.
Keep up the amazing work!
As I followed your last story so shall I follow this one. Truly your stories are among the best I've read on this site and I read each the moment I get the notification it has been updated.
Keep up the amazing work!
2/6/2022 c1 Vansmoke
You make him have 50 galleons plus 1 galleon in Gringotts vault, but he magically can buy 20% nimbus share for 100 galleons.
Better fix it mate.
You make him have 50 galleons plus 1 galleon in Gringotts vault, but he magically can buy 20% nimbus share for 100 galleons.
Better fix it mate.
2/6/2022 c2 2Penny is wise
Awesome story so far. You are moving into my favorite genre lol. I love having Harry go to his parents era and finding someone to settle with and kicking the shit out of Voldy a few decades early.
2Penny is wiseAwesome story so far. You are moving into my favorite genre lol. I love having Harry go to his parents era and finding someone to settle with and kicking the shit out of Voldy a few decades early.
2/6/2022 c2 sanbeegoldiewhitey
This story might be similar to "Stepping Back" by "TheBlack'sresurgence". This has the potential to be even better.
This story might be similar to "Stepping Back" by "TheBlack'sresurgence". This has the potential to be even better.