for Fairborn Adventures10/6/2023 c7 Regtech
So, how many "slight" mistakes will he make throughout thr story at the most convenient places? To maximize the wow factor?
Juggling that is tricky, but the amount of those moments have been to many in my opinion
So, how many "slight" mistakes will he make throughout thr story at the most convenient places? To maximize the wow factor?
Juggling that is tricky, but the amount of those moments have been to many in my opinion
10/6/2023 c4 Regtech
I hope we dont have to read about a both physically AND mentally regressed Harry. How could a 25 year old academically successful and goal oriented thrive around 15 year olds who has their heads far up their arses?
I hope we dont have to read about a both physically AND mentally regressed Harry. How could a 25 year old academically successful and goal oriented thrive around 15 year olds who has their heads far up their arses?
10/6/2023 c3 Regtech
Yeah, this chapter was straight up crap. You established magical vows is a thing, which means it makes it easy to establish truth as long as the question is worded properly.
Harry taking the Peverell name makes no sense. He was all about being careful and shit, but decided to pick such a high profile name and enter Hogwarts of all places. I want to save the world again, but lets do it from the best possible place! School! Where im going to waste X-amount of hours to do things i already know.
How a learned Harry never had the foresight to assume the Potter family didnt have wards didnt make sense either. What did he even do at the magical University. Let his brain rott? All those years of school and supposed top grades was for nothing?
Last, he actually believed decling a request is worse then having to answer the question the potter family asked? He is now on Dumbledores and Toms list now.
Yeah, this chapter was straight up crap. You established magical vows is a thing, which means it makes it easy to establish truth as long as the question is worded properly.
Harry taking the Peverell name makes no sense. He was all about being careful and shit, but decided to pick such a high profile name and enter Hogwarts of all places. I want to save the world again, but lets do it from the best possible place! School! Where im going to waste X-amount of hours to do things i already know.
How a learned Harry never had the foresight to assume the Potter family didnt have wards didnt make sense either. What did he even do at the magical University. Let his brain rott? All those years of school and supposed top grades was for nothing?
Last, he actually believed decling a request is worse then having to answer the question the potter family asked? He is now on Dumbledores and Toms list now.
9/28/2023 c100 
10Lord Cartwright
Damn that was good, really enjoyed it, a nice change of Harry going back in time and being as dark as needed to get his happy ending.
10Lord CartwrightDamn that was good, really enjoyed it, a nice change of Harry going back in time and being as dark as needed to get his happy ending.
9/16/2023 c1 Guest
Runes ruins. There's absolutely nothing magical about runes. About the only use for the subject is reading Saxon scrolls or carved objects. That's it. Anything else you've read in fanfiction is just a widely-copied, submongoloid idea, employed when a writer lacks sufficient imagination to make an idea work with canon magic.
And yes, the whole fanon thing with runes is my pet peeve. It wrecks stories.
Runes ruins. There's absolutely nothing magical about runes. About the only use for the subject is reading Saxon scrolls or carved objects. That's it. Anything else you've read in fanfiction is just a widely-copied, submongoloid idea, employed when a writer lacks sufficient imagination to make an idea work with canon magic.
And yes, the whole fanon thing with runes is my pet peeve. It wrecks stories.
9/9/2023 c100 Tomon
This was truly interesting. For once a real descent into, gray? Maybe even dark? But without a grandiose plan to take over the world, it was all really just to get their little sunset.
I liked how they both changed and was being changed by what they done and undertaken. Towards the end they really couldn't be considered as someone of the 'light'.
Funny thing too, as all everyone needed to do was to left them alone. Maybe they would even be able to pull themselves more towards the middle line instead of being pushed so far along.
I also liked how even Marlene recognized they may strayed a little too far, but was just unable to change it and afterwards was swept further along.
There are a lot of 'Dark Harry' stories and just few do it justice. Especially if they intend to portray him more like an anti-hero or end justify the means kind of guy, instead of new Dark Lord.
But here? Action had consequences.
Still they prevailed and didn't loose sight of the goal. And that, they did manage to achieve.
So excellent job.
Because while 'Power, Freedom and a French Flower' may be more to my taste and overall preferences.
This may have been even more interesting given everything that happened and what they did.
Thank you for your story.
This was truly interesting. For once a real descent into, gray? Maybe even dark? But without a grandiose plan to take over the world, it was all really just to get their little sunset.
I liked how they both changed and was being changed by what they done and undertaken. Towards the end they really couldn't be considered as someone of the 'light'.
Funny thing too, as all everyone needed to do was to left them alone. Maybe they would even be able to pull themselves more towards the middle line instead of being pushed so far along.
I also liked how even Marlene recognized they may strayed a little too far, but was just unable to change it and afterwards was swept further along.
There are a lot of 'Dark Harry' stories and just few do it justice. Especially if they intend to portray him more like an anti-hero or end justify the means kind of guy, instead of new Dark Lord.
But here? Action had consequences.
Still they prevailed and didn't loose sight of the goal. And that, they did manage to achieve.
So excellent job.
Because while 'Power, Freedom and a French Flower' may be more to my taste and overall preferences.
This may have been even more interesting given everything that happened and what they did.
Thank you for your story.
9/8/2023 c100 Supreme Nurkey
Your oddball finish was consistent with JKR’s epilogue: entirely unwarranted and undermining the rest of an excellent story. It knocked your work from my list of top tier favorites to my list of unfortunate stories that trigger a self-obliviate. It also convinced me not to consider anything else you might write, since the time I spent reading this otherwise delightful story was squandered by the foul after taste.
Your oddball finish was consistent with JKR’s epilogue: entirely unwarranted and undermining the rest of an excellent story. It knocked your work from my list of top tier favorites to my list of unfortunate stories that trigger a self-obliviate. It also convinced me not to consider anything else you might write, since the time I spent reading this otherwise delightful story was squandered by the foul after taste.
9/8/2023 c25 Supreme Nurkey
Why would James snatch the snitch that Harry gave Marlene? Unless it was from a slytherin game in a prior yearand that just introduces needless complexity.
Also, why would the book being master of death for more than half a decade be at all impressive?
Why would James snatch the snitch that Harry gave Marlene? Unless it was from a slytherin game in a prior yearand that just introduces needless complexity.
Also, why would the book being master of death for more than half a decade be at all impressive?
9/8/2023 c99 wewe1212
Harry basically turnes darker and darker, and ends up evil.
If I was dumbledore I also would try to kill him. He truly did not deserve to live after all the things that he did.
Really I love how this author writes, as seen in POWER FREEDOME FRENCH FLOWER, but this story and its morals are truly messed up.
Harry basically turnes darker and darker, and ends up evil.
If I was dumbledore I also would try to kill him. He truly did not deserve to live after all the things that he did.
Really I love how this author writes, as seen in POWER FREEDOME FRENCH FLOWER, but this story and its morals are truly messed up.
9/6/2023 c79 santos.luis.contato
all this shit about Voldermort wanting Harry to become strong... Is bulshit... Voldermort would never do that... Why make some stronger that could kill him? Even more so because there is someone out there hunting his Horcrux... And author making Harry losing all his friends and family, will only make this great story, a shit story, in my opnion... Why bring hin back, if all he did till now is let his family and friend die?
all this shit about Voldermort wanting Harry to become strong... Is bulshit... Voldermort would never do that... Why make some stronger that could kill him? Even more so because there is someone out there hunting his Horcrux... And author making Harry losing all his friends and family, will only make this great story, a shit story, in my opnion... Why bring hin back, if all he did till now is let his family and friend die?
9/6/2023 c79 santos.luis.contato
dude... I getting nervous with this author... Harry is shit... He cant save even the same people he claimed to save! What good he did until now? he didnt save even 1 person until now...
dude... I getting nervous with this author... Harry is shit... He cant save even the same people he claimed to save! What good he did until now? he didnt save even 1 person until now...
9/4/2023 c50 santos.luis.contato
what I am feeling from Marlene is that she is manipulating Harry somehow... Dont know if its true or not...
what I am feeling from Marlene is that she is manipulating Harry somehow... Dont know if its true or not...
9/4/2023 c42 santos.luis.contato
dude... I was expecting a lot more from Harry... After all 42 chapters until now, of him being a lot more powerful than in Canon, and still, this is all he is capable of? Voldermort could just kill him right there, and he still think he is his equal? If not for MacKinnon sacrifice, his grampa wiould have being killed... I was expecting a lot more... Its a disappointment that author didnt make Harry a lot more powerful to battle Voldermort in equal stand...
dude... I was expecting a lot more from Harry... After all 42 chapters until now, of him being a lot more powerful than in Canon, and still, this is all he is capable of? Voldermort could just kill him right there, and he still think he is his equal? If not for MacKinnon sacrifice, his grampa wiould have being killed... I was expecting a lot more... Its a disappointment that author didnt make Harry a lot more powerful to battle Voldermort in equal stand...
9/3/2023 c31 santos.luis.contato
I told you so... it was a bad idea of putting the books there... what a moron...
I told you so... it was a bad idea of putting the books there... what a moron...