
7/8/2022 c1
4R8handman
A good start for a story, the grammar could be tweaked a bit, though I am not one talk about that.
Creating a OC that's the main character, I really hope you flesh out your OC well, Genma is a fav of mine... I want him to help and teach the the girl to speak again. A mute girl raised by Genma should be intresting!

A good start for a story, the grammar could be tweaked a bit, though I am not one talk about that.
Creating a OC that's the main character, I really hope you flesh out your OC well, Genma is a fav of mine... I want him to help and teach the the girl to speak again. A mute girl raised by Genma should be intresting!
2/13/2022 c2 Masaya Daiji
Wait! we still have not got her name yet, a good name for the strong child.
Wait! we still have not got her name yet, a good name for the strong child.
2/13/2022 c1 Masaya Daiji
now we have two babysitters Lol I want to see her train ninja with her nin ken already.
now we have two babysitters Lol I want to see her train ninja with her nin ken already.
2/9/2022 c3 Otto Morris
interesting story so far, the grammar could be refined a bit more but it's nothing too big. Keep up the great work but don't rush yourself. I'll be looking forward to more chapters
interesting story so far, the grammar could be refined a bit more but it's nothing too big. Keep up the great work but don't rush yourself. I'll be looking forward to more chapters