for Remastered: The Way Back To Family Book 16/20/2022 c1 Guest
if this is remastered, i cant imagine how bad was the original. You need a Beta ASAP.
if this is remastered, i cant imagine how bad was the original. You need a Beta ASAP.
6/14/2022 c1 iTyncWithReality
Can’t read it. Found myself jumping entire chapters after deciphering the first few paragraphs to get a gist of what’s happening because I want to know what happens, but I don’t want the headache that comes with trying to translate this into understandable scenes.
Great hook though. Time travel is of course overdone (though I still like it), but there is something different about your plot that I just can’t put my finger on. Something special here-not that I’m likely to ever find out what that is until you get a very dedicated beta. Gods luck though. You have potential and your work is certainly not boring! (boring being the worst of insults I can think of for a fantasy/sci-fi genre story)
Can’t read it. Found myself jumping entire chapters after deciphering the first few paragraphs to get a gist of what’s happening because I want to know what happens, but I don’t want the headache that comes with trying to translate this into understandable scenes.
Great hook though. Time travel is of course overdone (though I still like it), but there is something different about your plot that I just can’t put my finger on. Something special here-not that I’m likely to ever find out what that is until you get a very dedicated beta. Gods luck though. You have potential and your work is certainly not boring! (boring being the worst of insults I can think of for a fantasy/sci-fi genre story)
4/2/2022 c12 Kitten Arina
I don’t get why that this chapter was repeated. This is the exact same one as the one before it.
I don’t get why that this chapter was repeated. This is the exact same one as the one before it.
4/1/2022 c6 Durruti
if this is a remastered versión i dont wanna to know how IS the original. this is a good idea but the ways IS written its soo bad that i want to drop the novel, but at the same time i want to know what happen, pls update the ways j write the novel.
dont have space, and its really confused how IS written, i want guión and space... in the first chapters i know the novel have a problem but only after reading a bit i see that the problem of the novel IS the format (writing this shit in a cellphone with autocorrector un spanish)
if this is a remastered versión i dont wanna to know how IS the original. this is a good idea but the ways IS written its soo bad that i want to drop the novel, but at the same time i want to know what happen, pls update the ways j write the novel.
dont have space, and its really confused how IS written, i want guión and space... in the first chapters i know the novel have a problem but only after reading a bit i see that the problem of the novel IS the format (writing this shit in a cellphone with autocorrector un spanish)
3/30/2022 c7 Prayag Raj Rai
Nice concept, always love time travel,no matter how many times u read.
Please use quotation marks for conversations, its very confusing. It'll take little effort to put quotation marks and start a new line after every sentence in the conversation, but it'll make it readable.
Nice concept, always love time travel,no matter how many times u read.
Please use quotation marks for conversations, its very confusing. It'll take little effort to put quotation marks and start a new line after every sentence in the conversation, but it'll make it readable.
3/16/2022 c23 Guest
Sorry man, but i think you need to stop and TRY to read your own history. It is not good, try to get some help and rewrite this.
Sorry man, but i think you need to stop and TRY to read your own history. It is not good, try to get some help and rewrite this.
3/15/2022 c22 nokeyunderscore
What about the Vienna royal zoo started in 1780’s? Overall the story is nice.
What about the Vienna royal zoo started in 1780’s? Overall the story is nice.
3/8/2022 c4 Guest
Your idea seems to be interesting. But please use beta to improve your writing. No one can read this shi5
Your idea seems to be interesting. But please use beta to improve your writing. No one can read this shi5
3/8/2022 c22 
9mysweetkat
Glad to stop and read this HP do-over fix-it story. Looking forward to the next chapters ahead.
9mysweetkatGlad to stop and read this HP do-over fix-it story. Looking forward to the next chapters ahead.