5/15 c12 HeartsGlow
You stated that Tonks was 19. Are you giving her a late summer birthday? She left Hogwarts the June before Harry started so she should be 20 by now, or at least within a month from when this takes place.

5/13 c1 HeartsGlow
There should be SIX games for all of them to play each other. G/S, G/H, G/R. S/H, S/R, R/H.

5/11 c47 12mastercheif1229
Pretty good chapter! Looking forward to the next one! I was in the middle of rereading this story when you updated it.

4/22 c8 addybuddy9
Okay major 4th wall breaks in this chapter and in a bad way, While we are readers to this chapter, the letter that is written by Regulas Black is written for Sirius/ the next hier likely here while you ready this Regulus rambles on to you the reader about his morals and thoughts, which could also go to "Harry" but it clearly seems to be written to us the readers.[Basicaly this gives us the reader of the mentality of Regulus black but it is basically substittuting the idea of The mystry or Regulues and just gives us the Answer that this is regules and this is what he thinks]

THe letter should have been more personalised and more vague to keep the mystry of Regulus.

But its cool, other parts of the book is good

4/6 c46 6TigerSwarm9122
Dumbledore is such an arrogant, self-righteous hypocrite. All he cares about is his damn plans for the greater good; he doesn't care who he uses and is so eager to have everything under his control that once things don't go his way he becomes angry and uses others. Who the hell made Dumbledore a god to decide what should and should not happen? People are not weapons or chess pieces for him to move around when he likes. He and Voldemort are no different from each other.

I say Dumbledore doesn't die in Book 6. When Voldemort is defeated, Harry and Sirius force him to take a magical vow that stipulates he leaves them alone and never talks to them again. Also, Harry and Daphne leave Hogwarts and forbid their children from attending the school to punish Dumbledore for all he's done. Blacken his name.

I like how Harry is becoming independent and powerful. Keep it up! The boy must grow more powerful than Dumbledore and Voldemort. . .it is the only way he will truly be free. Once they are no longer a problem and out of the picture, he will be free to live his life. As for the Dursleys, I say you punish them. Put tha fat waste of space Vernon and his horseneck bitch of a wife in prison. Send that useless piece of shit they call a son to St. Brutus and have him put on a diet.

3/18 c10 1AiyaKnight
i see you involved the weasleys for no reason. why would they even be on the muggle side. telling stranfers all his house buisness and personal goals. talking to adults like hes sipping whiskey at a cigar bar.

3/18 c37 Smutley Do-Wrong
Well, maybe not have that spiderman "with great power comes great responsibility", but Sirius has that "spidey sense" family magic thing going.

Interesting side details, upgraded Ron AND Sirius(including prior, how he'd handle the now dead Fawley, differently)