for The Fallen and The Rise5/14/2022 c1 Airalin
This is...a total disaster. Please learn how to write a story first. I suggest getting a beta, and reading more books to get the hang of it. Good luck
This is...a total disaster. Please learn how to write a story first. I suggest getting a beta, and reading more books to get the hang of it. Good luck
3/1/2022 c1 
5RiseOfDespair
Hey for anyone leaving comments I do read them, and I will always take the criticism and I will try to make it more enjoyable for you to read if you have any suggestions on top of what I have written please feel free to message me and give me more details on what you are thinking if you do not want to post how you feel about the story in the comments
5RiseOfDespairHey for anyone leaving comments I do read them, and I will always take the criticism and I will try to make it more enjoyable for you to read if you have any suggestions on top of what I have written please feel free to message me and give me more details on what you are thinking if you do not want to post how you feel about the story in the comments
2/23/2022 c1 kill xi jinping
oh, don't forget to add punctuations, it's very confusing. i hope u READ my comments, and if u can fix all of those problems and make it more "appealing" i will try to read this fic again without torturing myself.
oh, don't forget to add punctuations, it's very confusing. i hope u READ my comments, and if u can fix all of those problems and make it more "appealing" i will try to read this fic again without torturing myself.
2/23/2022 c1 kill xi jinping
another typical mediocre cringe fanfic that looks like written by an elementary student, but atleast u tried. u can be good at writing with a lot of practice, try make the conversation between characters not boring, add some stuff, don't make it "straight to the point" if u know wat i mean, read other good quality fic and try to learn from it, a little bit of tweaking and you're good. 3
another typical mediocre cringe fanfic that looks like written by an elementary student, but atleast u tried. u can be good at writing with a lot of practice, try make the conversation between characters not boring, add some stuff, don't make it "straight to the point" if u know wat i mean, read other good quality fic and try to learn from it, a little bit of tweaking and you're good. 3