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1/23 c3 Ecuadoor
I would have liked to see the scene of Lily (before the deletion of memories, and maybe it wouldn't have been necessary if she had seen it) seeing Harry vulnerable and crying on the floor. The following is already my fiction.) Then Lily partially forgives him, Elpis learns about Dumbledore's manipulation through mind reading and unlocking the deleted memories. Then there's a lot of text... In the end, Lily, Elpis, and Harry are together. Happy end))
1/2 c3 HellsMaji
Would have liked a final scene in the ror of Harry and Elpis making love, but oh well.
11/20/2022 c3 Mari Wollsch
great xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
10/30/2022 c3 Kamori I'm The Infinity
Meh, many promises and none fulfilled...I have read darker stories that it is.
10/30/2022 c2 Kamori I'm The Infinity
that shit is diabolical.
This Harry is all crazy.
10/22/2022 c3 SMB
Well, I was right. No real torture, just simulated pain. If you showed the Dursleys actually being mutilated, it might have been classed as torture. Just mentioning what they looked like afterwards? Easily could have been done after death. Mishandling of a corpse doesn't count.
I'm disappointed you had Harry be raped by Vernon. To make the punishment fitting, Vernon should have been buggered by a kitchen knife or barbed wire bat. I mean, if you're supposedly writing a horror story for shock value with tragedy in it, use some imagination. Having Harry do Petunia was not original at all.
You should have had Noah and James die, too. They hurt Harry. Hell, toss Dumbledore in there, too. We all know he was involved in separating Harry.
Now that I've wasted so much time picking this crap apart, I'm out.
Last bit of advice: Don't claim to be writing dark unless you actually write dark. Do your homework and go back to school. You have an early day tomorrow.
10/22/2022 c2 SMB
Like the first chapter, I thought it was pretty boring. After your warnings, I expected a lot of horrible things and all he did was violate her. Yes, it's morally reprehensible. Tragic? Possibly. Happened thousands of times in history? Absolutely. It's not that shocking, really. I mean, the story blurb said he was going to. The delivery is completely lacking, however. No style or pizazz. Where's the gore and torture you claimed would be happening? I suppose you might do something for the final chapter.
10/22/2022 c1 SMB
I thought it was pretty boring, actually.
9/18/2022 c3 Guest
That was pretty tame considering the warnings, it's a shame you let the potters and dumbles get away Scott free for the horrible life he had tho, should of let Lilly keep her memory or something, he still has his from Vernon after all.
8/9/2022 c3 1setokayba2n
Nothing like a Overpowered Yandere Little Girl to make a happy ending
7/30/2022 c3 Spazzman29
Not a great story. The worst psrt was how Harry spoke, no 14-15 year old talks like that. You made him dound to much like a fictional wise sorcerer who has been around for decades at the very least.
7/23/2022 c1 r99smith
Hello, I tried to find the story an the links you put in the notes. Unfortunately, the pages have not been “found”. I have been rereading many of your stories as you are one of my favorite fan fiction authors. If you have a moment, would you send the the updated url, if one exists? As always, thank your for writing and sharing your talent with the readers.
6/4/2022 c3 DeathLock
if a shout is shouted in a forest and noone hear's it was there ever a shout?
4/17/2022 c2 4Hadrian von Eveschatten
The hellspawn is weak and pathetic.
4/17/2022 c3 Hadrian von Eveschatten
Your refusal to kill the hellspawn suggests you're on his side to whatever extent you're willing to acknowledge.
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