for An Archer's Promise2h c60 Mugen-Blade
Oh look, is the Jobber Bolg, the red spear that cannot do the job.
Truly, this body's brain must have some wires crossed and some screws loose because i cannot conceive the idea EMIYA would be this... Attached to this stupid weapon to the point he would rather used it than literaly any other weapon that could have done the job.
Like for example, a Dragon Slaying NP for it is painfuly obvious that Draco has draconic traits.
Balmung, Gram, Ascalon, etc. Would have been leagues more effective than the shit he used to attack her here and they certanly would have done a ton more of damage by calling their true names to her than the ever wasteful Jobber Bolg anti-army attack.
My guy, i know you like the weapon but stop bending EMIYA backward to use it every chance he gets. He is suposed to be a smart and experienced fighter but every time he uses it, when he has better and less costly options in his arsenal, it just makes him look like an idiot obssesed with a weapon that it is far from being an universal answer for every problem.
Oh look, is the Jobber Bolg, the red spear that cannot do the job.
Truly, this body's brain must have some wires crossed and some screws loose because i cannot conceive the idea EMIYA would be this... Attached to this stupid weapon to the point he would rather used it than literaly any other weapon that could have done the job.
Like for example, a Dragon Slaying NP for it is painfuly obvious that Draco has draconic traits.
Balmung, Gram, Ascalon, etc. Would have been leagues more effective than the shit he used to attack her here and they certanly would have done a ton more of damage by calling their true names to her than the ever wasteful Jobber Bolg anti-army attack.
My guy, i know you like the weapon but stop bending EMIYA backward to use it every chance he gets. He is suposed to be a smart and experienced fighter but every time he uses it, when he has better and less costly options in his arsenal, it just makes him look like an idiot obssesed with a weapon that it is far from being an universal answer for every problem.
9/10 c52 
12JensenDaniels32
Most of this chapter was completely unnecessary since it was completely since it was completely unrelated to Archer, or at least that's how I feel, anyway, since the story's supposed to be focused on Archer.
12JensenDaniels32Most of this chapter was completely unnecessary since it was completely since it was completely unrelated to Archer, or at least that's how I feel, anyway, since the story's supposed to be focused on Archer.
9/9 c35 JensenDaniels32
...OMG, YES! I take back EVERYTHING bad that I ever said about certain chapters. of this story! . This is beautiful!
...OMG, YES! I take back EVERYTHING bad that I ever said about certain chapters. of this story! . This is beautiful!
9/8 c27 12JensenDaniels32
Why can't I stop imagining Archer telling Ana to stop with the long-winded explanation and to explain it in 20 words or less? X'D
12JensenDaniels32Why can't I stop imagining Archer telling Ana to stop with the long-winded explanation and to explain it in 20 words or less? X'D
9/8 c25 JensenDaniels32
Ah, right, fishes refers. to a school of fish. If you're referring to multiple fish, as in plural, it's just called fish, same as the. singular, as in one, fish.
Ah, right, fishes refers. to a school of fish. If you're referring to multiple fish, as in plural, it's just called fish, same as the. singular, as in one, fish.
9/8 c17 JensenDaniels32
...Thank God that we're out of that arc! Ugh...I hate that Archer let himself get caught when he could just wipe out everyone in Eostia and be done with it. Makes him look like a weakling. Well...hopefully I can enjoy the rest f the story from here on out.
...Thank God that we're out of that arc! Ugh...I hate that Archer let himself get caught when he could just wipe out everyone in Eostia and be done with it. Makes him look like a weakling. Well...hopefully I can enjoy the rest f the story from here on out.
9/8 c60 Angeles22
Think you are going to have to rewrite the first section, dear author.
At the end of the first section, your wrote that Olga, Brynn and Radomira only saw a flash of light and then proceeded to the court yard, only to find it empty.
But then after the EMIYA Vs Draco section, suddenly Olga and Radomira are both inside UBW (with Brynn missing).
It seems you accidentally pasted two different versions of this chapter together. As cool as the fight was, the chapter is extremely haphazard and clunky.
Think you are going to have to rewrite the first section, dear author.
At the end of the first section, your wrote that Olga, Brynn and Radomira only saw a flash of light and then proceeded to the court yard, only to find it empty.
But then after the EMIYA Vs Draco section, suddenly Olga and Radomira are both inside UBW (with Brynn missing).
It seems you accidentally pasted two different versions of this chapter together. As cool as the fight was, the chapter is extremely haphazard and clunky.