for Misfortunate Memories9/7/2023 c1 Guest
Superlance 909 tienes que considerar dejar de plantear que personajes de 1 universo alternativo fueron transportados desde su universo nativo hasta el universo de otra serie diferente , estas copiando algo que demasiada gente ejecuta y que no lo ejecuta bien y que no es 1 concepto muy congruente
O coherente o consistente o que tenga mucha logica
No quiero ofenderte pero tal vez no has considerado que esa es la verdad
Tienes que considerar que tal vez tienes que reescribir esto
Superlance 909 tienes que considerar dejar de plantear que personajes de 1 universo alternativo fueron transportados desde su universo nativo hasta el universo de otra serie diferente , estas copiando algo que demasiada gente ejecuta y que no lo ejecuta bien y que no es 1 concepto muy congruente
O coherente o consistente o que tenga mucha logica
No quiero ofenderte pero tal vez no has considerado que esa es la verdad
Tienes que considerar que tal vez tienes que reescribir esto
4/16/2022 c1 Mangareader13
Biohacker, Mental Out, Railgun, gravational bomb and Index are what I recall the audience being aware of pre-mind wipe Touma (after this chapter).
So yeah, this shouldn't be too long.
Biohacker, Mental Out, Railgun, gravational bomb and Index are what I recall the audience being aware of pre-mind wipe Touma (after this chapter).
So yeah, this shouldn't be too long.
4/11/2022 c1 Zatil Hidayah Spensa
Ah. A new reaction fic for Toaru. How wonderful.
Its a good first chapter (even tho you took some of it from MNOS,UN). I'll be waiting for the next one. Im guessing its either about Touma's first day in AC, or his encounter with Misaki or Ayu.
Ah. A new reaction fic for Toaru. How wonderful.
Its a good first chapter (even tho you took some of it from MNOS,UN). I'll be waiting for the next one. Im guessing its either about Touma's first day in AC, or his encounter with Misaki or Ayu.
4/11/2022 c1 Shield Enforcer
That was more enjoyable than I expected. Really looking forward to the next one.
That was more enjoyable than I expected. Really looking forward to the next one.
4/10/2022 c1 
4SkyChaser17
No wonder it felt familiar... I'm not him so I can't spoke about this as he does. Permission first before all else, though his style does make sense less we got the real version from Kamachi himself.
Gotta say, what's best way to let character know their past but let them see on their own. Lazy writing? Damn right, but it's so fun to see it. Especially from Touma himself. Do as you intended but would there be more? Gotta remind you that cause many would instantly thought so cause there's gap in Touma story before reaching Academy City as kids.
Though really, his present tasting his own medicine is best way to drill it is okay for him to be his own person even though he is never going to change in the end.
Oh ya, you didn't make him see reason he's one dense son of a gun I'm kicking you in the face XD No one should be that ignorant of other's affection towards their sorry ass even it was in form of bodily harm! XD Though on different note he's going to have mixed thoughts with Misaki and Kumokawa wasn't he?...
4SkyChaser17No wonder it felt familiar... I'm not him so I can't spoke about this as he does. Permission first before all else, though his style does make sense less we got the real version from Kamachi himself.
Gotta say, what's best way to let character know their past but let them see on their own. Lazy writing? Damn right, but it's so fun to see it. Especially from Touma himself. Do as you intended but would there be more? Gotta remind you that cause many would instantly thought so cause there's gap in Touma story before reaching Academy City as kids.
Though really, his present tasting his own medicine is best way to drill it is okay for him to be his own person even though he is never going to change in the end.
Oh ya, you didn't make him see reason he's one dense son of a gun I'm kicking you in the face XD No one should be that ignorant of other's affection towards their sorry ass even it was in form of bodily harm! XD Though on different note he's going to have mixed thoughts with Misaki and Kumokawa wasn't he?...
4/10/2022 c1 man1580
Cool idea. I always wondered how the current Kamijou would feel if he recovered his memories.
Cool idea. I always wondered how the current Kamijou would feel if he recovered his memories.
4/9/2022 c1 Fuyuky
Hmm, interesting…
Hmm, interesting…
4/9/2022 c1 AzurePheonix101
ooh. looking good so far. Can't wait to see what's up. hmm if Touma is seeing his memories, I wonder how he'll react to the whole mental out situation.
either way, cool chapter
ooh. looking good so far. Can't wait to see what's up. hmm if Touma is seeing his memories, I wonder how he'll react to the whole mental out situation.
either way, cool chapter