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10/4 c88 Nikion
God, I just watched the first episode of DanDaDan and I definitely had enough insanity. But a story where the main character is a reasonable adult who thinks clearly and isn't afraid to call people out on their mistakes... a story where the girls around the main character are the ones who get the system and they have to court him... SHUT UP AND TAKE MY REVIEW!
P/S If you don't mind, crossedge-sensei, what Naruto fic was the idea taken from?
10/4 c88 Ragepingu
Dang, what a fresh take. Please continue.
10/4 c88 Uday Sra
Good
10/4 c88 Fernizer
This story looks interesting. I liked it. I definitely want to read at least few more chapters of this and hope that it will transform into the full story.

Though why didn't you drop the name of the fic you read? Now I'm going to wonder about it the whole day.
10/4 c88 HalfmoonSilver80
Other than the fact the system is essentially blackmailing the girls, this one is good
10/3 c88 ikusatsunagi
Ohohoh this gonna be fun
10/3 c46 Zahran
wish you or someone actually complete this one, it just too good for a wip
10/3 c88 Kalstorm99
interesting premise.
10/3 c88 Fanficer234
I wasn’t sure id like this chapter at first but as soon as i got to rias’ part thought it was hilarious.
Im really curious as to what that naruto fanfiction that inspired this story is, could you let me know please?
10/3 c88 RedThunderCloud
oh i like this
10/3 c88 1KnightBloom
What a fresh take on a pretty popular troupe, love the concept. Definitely need more Story 11 chapters asap
10/3 c88 ensothling
I don't dislike Sona, but this is definitely a scolding she required in the show.
10/3 c88 Anthurs Runeseeker
Thanks for the chapter and from what was here it would be something i would like to read more of
10/3 c88 ghrrrr
I was extremely disappointed when i saw the update was for a new story instead of one of your current stories which i almost always look forward to. Especially your recent Naruto story is something that pulled me back to fandom after a long hiatus. But after reading your new story (though i was very reluctant at first) i really loved the premise. I am glad i gave it a chance.

Anyway about the story itself, rom-com implies that the MC isn't going to learn about supernatural side for quite a while. It is funny for him to be out of the loop for a few chapters and I don't know what you planned but i think it would be boring to read if it is constantly the same things. As in girls going after him and him being a clueless harem protagonist who gives the impression of being determined to die a virgin. Still like i said, i don't know what you planned so maybe it is going to be great and this is my fears from other sources talking.

Additionally may i suggest that you give some quest rewards from the girls to strengthen Takashi without his knowledge at first. Likedo this so Takashi can gain this ability/power or that item/sacred gear" type of quests. As an isekai character who can not explain why he is suddenly able to lift a car or see better or run faster or where did the sword that looks like it belongs to a museum come from etc... while trying to hide it from all the "normal" people around him could be funny.

For the chapter itself i really liked the dressing down he gave to Sona. Both because he was 100% right and also it was probably the first time someone who took Sona's dream seriously told her why she is going about it the wrong way.

Also i would appreciate if Issei and his gang could dissapear forever via expulsion or something similar as soon as possible. I don't even care who ends up with Ddraig. As long as those annoying people are gone i would be happy. And please don't even think about reincarnating Issei even as a side character. Just take his sacred gear and give it some kendo girl, oc something if not the mc please.

Btw what is the name of the Naruto story that inspired this? I would like to take a look.
10/3 c88 CandyMaster
woww just wow, when i saw rias get the system i feel weird and thought this is not a good story, but after reading to the end wooww man just wooww this is great, the plot is just good. and can you share that naruto fic for the inspiration of this story, i think i wanna read it. and this story is great man, can you make chapter 2 of this before isekai restaurant because while isekai restaurant is good scratch that is great, i wanna read what happen to sona next
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