for Under the Hunters Moon5/3 c4 
7Teufel1987
Nice work so far
Your capitalisation of letters is a bit random though, and you tend to flit between present continuous and simple past
Although, I find your use of the word wixen to be both tragic and hilarious.
I get that it’s supposed to be a word to represent a neutral term for witches and wizards
But it’s also a German word for masturbate
7Teufel1987Nice work so far
Your capitalisation of letters is a bit random though, and you tend to flit between present continuous and simple past
Although, I find your use of the word wixen to be both tragic and hilarious.
I get that it’s supposed to be a word to represent a neutral term for witches and wizards
But it’s also a German word for masturbate
4/29 c7 9Sargon Dorsai
This was a nice clean chapter. Well written and easy to read. Then again, it's from Hermione's perspective and she would allow nothing else.
Thank you for the insight into her mind and what she thinks about her other almost best friend.
9Sargon DorsaiThis was a nice clean chapter. Well written and easy to read. Then again, it's from Hermione's perspective and she would allow nothing else.
Thank you for the insight into her mind and what she thinks about her other almost best friend.
4/29 c6 Sargon Dorsai
There are a fair amount of punctuation errors. Sentences combining because they're missing a period, or using a comma instead of a period to separate things. Hopefully this gets fixed in future chapters but it's something I've noticed in all the chapters thus far.
Also, Hedwig is awesome!
There are a fair amount of punctuation errors. Sentences combining because they're missing a period, or using a comma instead of a period to separate things. Hopefully this gets fixed in future chapters but it's something I've noticed in all the chapters thus far.
Also, Hedwig is awesome!
4/29 c3 Sargon Dorsai
It's hard to argue with the Voldemort connection, when choosing the wand, especially when you have a piece of Voldemort lingering in your skull. I like the thought of a different Harry having a different wand.
Interesting fight with the basilisk. I equated the ability to the ones rogues/thiefs get in Grimgar that lets them target weak points, mostly because I haven't watched Demon Slayer yet. It's on my Crunchylist though so I'll get to it eventually.
It's hard to argue with the Voldemort connection, when choosing the wand, especially when you have a piece of Voldemort lingering in your skull. I like the thought of a different Harry having a different wand.
Interesting fight with the basilisk. I equated the ability to the ones rogues/thiefs get in Grimgar that lets them target weak points, mostly because I haven't watched Demon Slayer yet. It's on my Crunchylist though so I'll get to it eventually.
4/29 c1 Sargon Dorsai
Interesting premise. I'm curious if Harry will look like James since he's actually Artemis's kid... or maybe she used him as a sample as well. Onto the next chapter!
Interesting premise. I'm curious if Harry will look like James since he's actually Artemis's kid... or maybe she used him as a sample as well. Onto the next chapter!
4/23 c6 1DrollPaladin
You know, i never understood how Sirius got labled a “mass murderer”. We have serial killers in the states that dwarf that sum let alone mass shooters. Also wouldn’t the aurors be able to tell that the explosion that killed the 13 muggles was not magical, but caused by magic ignighting a gass line? Its always been so disbelievable. Especially when comparing Sirius to the likes of the Lestrange brothers or Fenrir Greyback, actual mass murdering psychopaths
1DrollPaladinYou know, i never understood how Sirius got labled a “mass murderer”. We have serial killers in the states that dwarf that sum let alone mass shooters. Also wouldn’t the aurors be able to tell that the explosion that killed the 13 muggles was not magical, but caused by magic ignighting a gass line? Its always been so disbelievable. Especially when comparing Sirius to the likes of the Lestrange brothers or Fenrir Greyback, actual mass murdering psychopaths
4/7 c10 juan.gar
so snape is actually robbing harry of his hunt? he literallynis going to give the most precious resources of a 1000 years old basilisk in exchange from a EE in potions? in his 3er year were grades doesnt matter?
so snape is actually robbing harry of his hunt? he literallynis going to give the most precious resources of a 1000 years old basilisk in exchange from a EE in potions? in his 3er year were grades doesnt matter?
3/30 c32 emotional damage
shlong long blood mage 3.5e (best edition dm it) as a fellow dm be fine TKO ing your party and saig F you (next setion make them fight out of hades from tartarus to asphodel... fine you got me youl host a hades campain) best of luck and give EMOTIANAL DAMAGE
shlong long blood mage 3.5e (best edition dm it) as a fellow dm be fine TKO ing your party and saig F you (next setion make them fight out of hades from tartarus to asphodel... fine you got me youl host a hades campain) best of luck and give EMOTIANAL DAMAGE
3/30 c30 emotional damage
nooooooo not sireous
nooooooo not sireous
3/30 c23 emotional damage
im not in the danger i am the danger
-technoblade orfan slayer god destroyer army conquerer man who never dies wizard who has asended to a higher plane (intentional pun) of existence
im not in the danger i am the danger
-technoblade orfan slayer god destroyer army conquerer man who never dies wizard who has asended to a higher plane (intentional pun) of existence
3/29 c10 emotional damage
nooo not my OPT! :(((((((((((((((((((((((((((
nooo not my OPT! :(((((((((((((((((((((((((((
3/11 c19 Son Of Fellblood
after been very very busy in life and completely loosing track of where I was in the series overall I am starting fresh again.
I just want to say... you sly fuck you planted the seeds for SO MUCH so early its crazy.
absolutely astounding, I'm glad I'm starting over and I can't wait to catch up.
"Walk TO death" indeed.
after been very very busy in life and completely loosing track of where I was in the series overall I am starting fresh again.
I just want to say... you sly fuck you planted the seeds for SO MUCH so early its crazy.
absolutely astounding, I'm glad I'm starting over and I can't wait to catch up.
"Walk TO death" indeed.
2/6 c30 BookishPotat
Do you really have to not let him have anything? I really don't like this story and I hate that I can't stop reading it because I can't help but hope that Harry gets something
Do you really have to not let him have anything? I really don't like this story and I hate that I can't stop reading it because I can't help but hope that Harry gets something
10/31/2024 c6 Guest
He's entering 3rd year but it's like i'm reading from 1st year Harry Potter.. he's 13 but act like 10... it's weirding me out.
He's entering 3rd year but it's like i'm reading from 1st year Harry Potter.. he's 13 but act like 10... it's weirding me out.