for Under the Hunters Moon7/23/2022 c2 Heero05
I totally agree with you. The movie and books played off Harrys abuse as silly, but realistically he would have turned out way different.
I totally agree with you. The movie and books played off Harrys abuse as silly, but realistically he would have turned out way different.
7/21/2022 c3 
45VinCredable
Son of Artemis... a leather jacket and a swiss army knife. Hmm.
That sound familiar... (stares at screen suspiciously)
45VinCredableSon of Artemis... a leather jacket and a swiss army knife. Hmm.
That sound familiar... (stares at screen suspiciously)
7/19/2022 c13 1SiriusOrionBitch
Great chapter! interested to see the actual meeting whenever you present it! Take care,
SOB
1SiriusOrionBitchGreat chapter! interested to see the actual meeting whenever you present it! Take care,
SOB
7/12/2022 c11 3tOSdude
It can get a bit disorienting when you switch between 1st and 3rd person, especially in the same sentence.
3tOSdudeIt can get a bit disorienting when you switch between 1st and 3rd person, especially in the same sentence.
7/12/2022 c12 LadyPhoenix68
The subtle thing I noticed is that it was a man with shield and wand saying that is was a girl in "My old HOUSE" that needed help. Could there be a portrait of salazar slytherin that people don't realize is him on the wall there?
Better yet, how did a firstie end up behind a portrait in a hidden room in first place?
The subtle thing I noticed is that it was a man with shield and wand saying that is was a girl in "My old HOUSE" that needed help. Could there be a portrait of salazar slytherin that people don't realize is him on the wall there?
Better yet, how did a firstie end up behind a portrait in a hidden room in first place?
7/11/2022 c11 1SiriusOrionBitch
Really enjoyed this so far! Looking forward to where you go next! Take care,
SOB
1SiriusOrionBitchReally enjoyed this so far! Looking forward to where you go next! Take care,
SOB
7/7/2022 c10 A-mc-J
I like this story but there’s a rule to writing dialogue you keep breaking and it’s making reading this much harder than it should be, I tend to come across as an ass when I try to word reviews myself so I just copy pasted someone else
“Each speaker gets a new paragraph. Every time someone speaks, you show this by creating a new paragraph. Yes, even if your characters are only saying one word, they get new paragraphs.”
I like this story but there’s a rule to writing dialogue you keep breaking and it’s making reading this much harder than it should be, I tend to come across as an ass when I try to word reviews myself so I just copy pasted someone else
“Each speaker gets a new paragraph. Every time someone speaks, you show this by creating a new paragraph. Yes, even if your characters are only saying one word, they get new paragraphs.”